Question seems a bit confusing. I believe what you are asking is if I, as a writer, believe illustration helps a reader better visualize what I am saying.
Options are adequate.
If I figured your question correctly, then yes. Simple illustration can only add to the readers enjoyment. I say this as a reader.
Too much, or too complex illustration can take away from the enjoyment of the book or the use of the readers imagination.
Poll question asked very concisely and clearly. Options laid out plainly.
I voted 'Other'. While these hairstyles can be absolutely hilarious, I think the '70's Afro was the best at provoking laughter. This is even more relevant when satirized in the movies and on television today. Talk about "Big Hair".
Technically - Great rhyming and line breaks. The only part that didn't seem to flow well was "To have my brother locked up for so long Because he had done no wrong." Perhaps use "Because he had clearly done no wrong."
Your title, at first glance reminded me of "To Kill A Mockingbird" and "I Know Why The Caged Bird Sings". Yours a great tribute to one who aw injustice and corrected it.
Technical - At times you seemed to go back and forth between point of view. The story teller starts out appearing as an 'ordinary Joe', but using $10 words. Then the aliens with superior intellect come alone using dime-store words. This seemed a bit confusing and aided in my attention being diverted.
Personally - Excellent concept. I especially liked the idea of using a short story to bring in facts about the world we live in and cause the reader to ponder ways to improve. This is truly an art form.
Great title and description. This is what drew me in.
Your son has acquired your talent to write. This is a very deep piece.
Technical: Three passages didn't seem to flow smoothly as written - "Games and toys and films of places long
Ago and far away" Maybe try the line break following "Games and toys and"
"Forging a false jealousy I never could Comprehend" - perhaps try the line break after jealousy.
"Seeing each other seemed Trying, making speaking even worse" - possibly place the line break naturally following the comma.
Personally - Absolutely wonderful word arrangement for siblings and sibling rivalry. My heartstrings have been pulled and tugged and blessed beyond words.
Thank you for sharing your talents Chris. Jerry, thank you for sharing your son.
This is technically a strong piece. Very well written. Easily read.
Now, let me brush away the tears and swallow the lump in my throat. Having just lost my daddy in April, this was a bitter/sweet read. I have lost a number of loved ones in the past few years and you have shown me a new way to look at the loss.
Thank you once again for sharing your wonderful talent.
Oh, you poor soul! I feel for you, really I do. Amazing piece of work.
Technical - "I'll sit ice cream spoon in hand," Should have a comma after sit. "mister Briggs"; two times noticed. Mister is used as a title and therefore, should be capitalized.
Personally, you have really nailed junkies. I work in television and when people ask, I tell them "bottom line, I get paid to watch television". The most popular response is they want my job. Luckily if my power goes out at home, I lite a candle and pull out a book, no fretting.
I voted 'Other" only because I write in many places. This includes my car driving down the highway. Don't panic - The words came to me while driving and I finally pulled over, found a napkin and wrote them down.
I have a laptop that I have had for about a year and a half now. I was actually looking at it this past weekend and thinking about the keys. My mouse buttons show were as does my space bar. Other then that my keyboard is just perfect. I can still see all of my letters.
Sorry, but it seems there are a few who are growing toward your directions.
This is very interesting. I have not seen a poll regarding music (especial rock) with so many choices. I like that. Very well thought out and put together.
I think I had said earlier that I always hesitate when it comes to "baby' stories, especially by grandparents. However, you are changing my mind ever so gingerly.
Sweet and innocent I too, can see your lessons learned and how we as adults become 'tainted' from time and life.
Keep plugging away proud grandpa and think you for sharing your wealth.
I think no matter how many you list there are always more to add. Given some of the names you came up with for each, one titled "Most Brutal Leader". My vote for this one went to Hitler.
Thank you for the opportunity to continue to participate in you fascinating polls.
Just a little ditty to make me slow down and consider the up coming holidays.
I have never been into gift giving for holidays, not even Hanukkah which is the giftiest of all. To share and be there. Just giving of ourselves to each other is the most important thing.
I am still laughing so hard the tears are falling.
You have an amazing imagination.
I do hope you are planning to write the endings to other fairytales. I'd really enjoy those. In fact, you could put them all together in a book and it could be the rest of the story.
If I were in a position to grant your three wishes, you would have them. Especially if you really could get the world leaders to at the very least examine what is going on around them.
You have taken the thoughts of millions and placed them so very well into words.
Thank you for expounding in such a way that everyone should be able to read these words and take them to heart.
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