I understand your dismay and your loss or trust for the Good Ole American way... I on the other hand understand it only too well.. I was told by my lawyer to leave the place I live or further persecution would occur... I am a Cherokee and the Good Ole Boys just dont see fit for my kind to co-inhabit this area... Our kind have been well aware of this for too long...
I empathize with your situation... What can you do or say... your hands are tied by the lies of our Great Leaders...
I dont know if this is fiction or non...
I am sure deals of this kind go on often enough only its those that have power that access the records to know when something of this nature goes on the market and are drawn to it like fkies to a corpse....
Im glad to be stumbling around in your port... I hope you dont mind... I wiped the Texas dirt off on the floor mat outside... I dont know who put that trail in here... Ill find the varmint tho... LOL
You definately have a way with words my dear fellow author and Ill be back to see what else you have posted!!!
I like your disclaimer and your honesty. I find that honesty is a relative term...
I understand you feelings your undergoing as you write this. And your questioning "Who" is really qualified to reveiw. It seems anyone with a pentium chip and a keyboard is a reviewer... Unfortunately some wield this "tool" Like a double edged sword... able to send some to the locker rooms on their heart shredding quest to be "better". I have yet to find someone that uses the reviews for this end to be someone I can admire.
I admire someone who offers help selflessly to help you on Your quest to become a better writer. That gives you tools to better your skills.
Sometimes I must admit this it an uphill battle to fine those that will give us the constuctive critism that we really need. I detest those who find that stepping on your words and work to raise themselves up their pedastal.
If you would like an honest review Please feel free to contact me an I will give you one. Not for gift points or pride or to make another higher mark on the reviewers forum.
For your first attempt this is pretty good!!!!
I find it quite endearing. I hope to read more poems from you!!!!
I am a member of the "I Remember When" Group and we welcome you to writing.com. You have a home here if you choose. If you need help just ask anyone and Im sure many here will help you navigate your way around
Wonderful emotions play upon and with your words to create a majestic vision of poetry deep within your mind. Thank you for allowing us this kind glimpse inside your soul and heart.
Its always a pleasure to stumble around in your port and Im glad I am here once again
Your friend
John
Somehow I felt like the last line of the first stansa could have used the word intent... so as not to have the word "lent" back to back.. Just a thought
Bob Its been a while I didnt recognise you at first!!!
I understand very well what it is you are expressing and I can attest to the importance of a peice like you have presented here. Why is it that most people like to wear binders and let the leader lead them around with a carrot... Ill never understand this concept or reasoning.
Was this a mere exploration into futility?
Or did you write this for sympathy?
One can never know what is in the authors mind
Open it therein and look what we can find...
Ill be back.. (threat or promise... not sure as of yet but Ill be back LOL)
John
Hmmm I have seen an almost identical peice just last night... How unusual... Both detail the visit up the mountain and the question was the same... two differnt answers but these two stories are so close its almost... redundant. I give him the same rating also by the way.
Maybe its time to branch out and write about... vampires.. no thats been done to death (no pun intended)... hmmm maybe write about yeah here you go!!!
Write something about The first cloned alien ever made.. Now that would be different..
How exceptionally written and also heart warming is this wonderful poem that depicts our life that many of us miss out on. I am glad I came back and found this treasure buried deep within your port
Your
John
Short sweet and to the point. The talent of an author I believe is to say more with less, you have accomplished this rather easily it would seem to this reader. The truth that lies in these words tell the story and shows how easily it could end
Hmmmm this is one I should have aced.. but I barely placed... Its good to have quizzes. Keeps you on your toes!!!
I like the way you have a scoreboard this is the first time I have seen this feature... I wished all of them had them.
I like this quiz. I enjoyed it
Your friend
John
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