The first line doesn't make sense to me? I enjoyed the pace of the lines though. Nature's Vein is a nice comparison. Overall I think it is a nice and visual poem. I always enjoy when someone speaks in a tone of optimism! Just part of the cycle... Keep it up!
Definitely liking this one! The idea of a ghostly plantation along the Bayou comes to mind.
You paint a nice picture but I'd like a little more detail and the end feels a little sudden. I would like to read further into the haunting. You gave a history of the ghosts but not how they made their presence felt.
Such a sad and angry tale, though introspective. Nice composition and flow. Ah, the experiences of immaturity are what we are built from. You have simply worn your heart on your sleeve and emerged from the shadows enlightened and perhaps a bit less naive'. Nice read!
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