This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee poem, the gleaming lights.
APPEAL:Those who like to read poem will find this an enjoyable poem to read.
WHAT I LIKED:That the reader loses take of time watching the gleaming lights and perhaps forgets all her troubles for a few moments.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:It gave me something to thing about. That life‘s too short for just thinking about our problems. That once in a while we need to think of something else.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:
OOPS!
the gleaming lights -- In English class I was taught the title of a poem, story, etc. should be capitalized. The Gleaming Lights
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at
WHAT I LIKED:It has a hypnotic pull to the image. The fairy dancing in the moonlight.
The image matches the title quite well.
The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
You gave credit to the person who designed this signature.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I was poking through your port and found many, many wonderful things to read. It made it hard to decide what to check out first. I’m definitely coming back to poke around. I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at full moon in libra.
WHAT I LIKED:The magical aura surrounding the lady in white.
The image matches the title quite well.
The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee tale, A response to Charley.
APPEAL:Those who like to read reaching out from the grave will find this an interesting tale to read.
WHAT I LIKED:That Terra isn‘t going to take her death lying down. That she‘s going to make Charley‘s life misable.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:Glad. Terra is going to get even.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:OOPS!
1. Dear Charley, As you know I am writing you from the grave situation you have placed me in. -- You need to move As you know onto a separate line.
Dear Charley,
As you know…
2. After all the deep emotional turmoil that ensued when I left you. I knew I would never feel the same about any thing. --Anything is usually one word.
3. I will never feel the same about you about myself about relationships or even about life itself. -- I think you need to add some commas to this. I will never feel the same about you, about myself, about relationships, or even about life itself.
4. Forever and ever amen,
It will never end!
Terra
PS Have you seen my sandals. -- You need space between these sentences.
Forever and ever amen,
It will never end!
Terra
PS Have you seen my sandals.
POINT OF VIEW:I know who's point of view I’m in.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read the beginning of your novel, The Darkblade Chronicles.
APPEAL:Those who like to read stories about vampires.
WHAT I LIKED:It‘s a vampire tale with a different take on the world of vampires.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
NAMES/TITLE:Your used a variety of names for your characters making it easier to keep track of who’s who.
FORMAT:This is a bit hard to read. You might want to put a space between each paragraph.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
DESCRIPTIONS/DETAILS:
LENGTH:If the piece is overly long, then I am more reluctant to read it, but if it's intriguing, I still might.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:OOPS!
1. On that one terrifying, fateful night, I came face to face with these one of these wives’ tales. -- take the first these out.
2. Food was very scarce most were starving. -- I think you need a comma after scarce.
3. I turned rushed towards my door, snatching my sword from my table, gripping it tightly in my hand and raced out side after him. -- Outside is usually one word.
4. As I raced from my house, I saw torchlights assembling in the village square I rushed towards them. -- separate torch lights and either put a comma or period after square.
5. As I entered the square, I pushed my way towards the middle of the crowd suddenly I felt a strong grip on my shoulder; I turned anxiously to see it was my father a muscular man deep dark tan skinned and a square-jawed face. -- Place a comma or period after crowd.
6. I turned anxiously to see it was my father a muscular man deep dark tan skinned and a square-jawed face. -- place a comma after father.
7. “Father, I am a man, when are you going to stop treating me like a child” I said looking straight into his face. -- You need a comma after child.
If you’re like me, rereading may or may not catch all the wee mishaps. I suggest having someone you trust read your stories to help catch the mishaps. I had my brother do this during high school for anything I wrote for English class. I’m a rotten speller and have a bad habit of mixing tenses.
DIALOGUE:The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.
POINT OF VIEW:I know who's point of view I’m in.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at your Joker spidey sig.
WHAT I LIKED:The mirror image of the lady joker, and she‘s wearing my favorite color of purple.
The image matches the title quite well.
The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
The words stand out nicely against the background and do not block the image.
The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
You gave credit to the person who designed this signature.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee tale, The Red Teacup.
APPEAL:Those who like to read murder mysteries shall find this intriguing.
WHAT I LIKED:You told a murder mystery in so few words. I’m jealous.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:Curious.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:OOPS!
Paragraph 3: She looked around again hoping that it has magically reappeared. No the table and kitchen counter were as empty as always. -- has should be had. Place a comma after No,.
Paragraph 4: She tries to remember when last she used it. She didn’t drink her coffee out of it. The red cup is her husband’s favourite. The red reminds her of blood. She prefers the pretty blue one that looks like the ocean on a summer day.
Tries should be tried. Prefers should be preferred.
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at Storm.
WHAT I LIKED:It‘s a picture of the sea breaking over the rocky shore. The sea has always fascinated me. I‘m drawn to it like a moth to a flame. Excuse the old phrase.
The image matches the title quite well.
The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
The words stand out nicely against the background and do not block the image.
The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
You gave credit to the person who designed this signature.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee poem, My Silly Cow Haiku.
APPEAL:Those who like to read Haiku poetry will find this a charming and delightful wee read.
WHAT I LIKED:It‘s short and sweet.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:Happy. It made me smile and brightened my rainy day.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:Seems to be alright.
What a beautiful image at the end. A pretty blue butterfly nestled among the flowers. How charming.
The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
The words stand out nicely against the background and do not block the image.
The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at Kilauea Lava Flow. WOW. What a neat picture.
WHAT I LIKED:It‘s makes one stop and realize just how powerful our planet truly is.
The image matches the title quite well.
The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
This image conjures up all sort of writing ideas.
The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
Mother Nature shows one of her many sides. It’s beautiful and deadly at the same time.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
Your port was full of so many different things to read and look at, I had a hard time deciding what to review first. I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at your Dragony Sig. I love everything about dragons.
WHAT I LIKED:
The image matches the title quite well.
The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
The words stand out nicely against the background and do not block the image.
The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
Your port if full of so many things to read and look at. It made it difficult to choose just one item to review. So I followed my gut.
I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at She's a Rock Image.
WHAT I LIKED:The hint of mystery that the river suggests. Where does it go? What will the explorer find along the way? It‘s quite inspiring.
The image matches the title quite well.
The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
The words stand out nicely against the background and do not block the image.
The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
You gave credit to the person who designed this signature.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at your Review Image.
WHAT I LIKED:The lady is sitting under a star filled sky and enjoying the beauty of the night. The image is quite inspiring. It‘s filled with mystery and wonder.
The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
The words stand out nicely against the background and do not block the image.
The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at Soldier. WOW! What a powerful picture that stirs the emotions.
WHAT I LIKED:The image of the angel behind the soldier as he prays.
The image matches the title quite well.
The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
You gave credit to the person who designed this signature.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
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