Hmm...It seemed like it was too long. I mean really, it isn't long at all but just...the way the poem was set up seem like it was short, dark, and essentially to the point. Not really too dark or goth, more lovey dovey, and boring. Well Written though.
Rhyming...christ i hate it...but i do like music. get a pimped band, say THE f***IN MISFITS, to play this and i would buy the f***in cd. Way better then other lyrics..keep on keepin on.
I hate the song Looking through the glass by Stone sour and sadly this reminds me of the song. I mean i love the band and Slipknot but, hate the song. The descpriptions in this poem of f***ing amazing though so i will rate you better for that lil intake.
Its neet how you reconize our polution is a way of hiding ourselves from the truth. Our our overpopulation is causing more buildings, more polution, along with more lies. That is a neet and creative connection..
The poem seemed quite crazy and....."Retarded"..up until the last sentence, where of course you explained the poem entirely. This bit of work is quite creative and even a little funny.....makes you think....
Dear God man......long is all i can say. I mean its not that long, but I'm used to short, emotional stuff. Which this DOES not fit into that category. Great dude.....seriously in depth and...yet again..political in the fact of the Cuban refugees. Which i already stated that im not a big fan of. I am a fan of creativity and wording which you use as a great advantage here...by the way the 200 Gps i am sending you are because of this stories originality....i would send more but this is all i have.
hmmm...well I liked the whole "black Mamba" essence. Alothough the poem itself seems hard to understand. I understand the mamba as death and the Stallion as goodness, but the rest of the poem seems....sadly...boring?No not boring....just...unwordful.philosophies really kicked in and i did like that, along with Tranquility. The poem itself rymes at a point...and then doesnt. I do quite understand why you did it like this, or maybe the words just came out that way. Anyway i would like to know what the meaning behind the poem is...
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