jonblair,
This is a great story, however, one suggestion would be to break up the HUUUMUNGOOOUUUS paragraph in the middle. You have captured several thoughts in this one paragraph and by breaking it up you: 1. Give the reader a chance to catch his breath. 2. Separate the different streams of thoughts into individual packages for consumption. 3. Give the reader a chance to catch his breath. (Yeah, I repeat myself often, if not frequently or even continually. And yeah, I'm even more guilty of this transgression than you are.) The below is only a suggestion and doesn't change anything as far as wording, impact, or substance.
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"What the hell?" I yelled out loud. I was in north(ern) Oregon and had slowed to navigate a sharp, round curve in the highway. A soft blue pulsating light, about two miles ahead and on the other side of a hill seemed to appear out of nowhere. I was a little 'zoned out' to begin with, considering my time behind the wheel and miles I had already driven. I slowed my vehicle, a 1968 Ford Mustang.
As I slowly completed the curve in the road and straightened my car, the soft blue pulsating light I previously noticed was now an intense, pulsating blue/white light, round to oval in shape with a distinctive humming sound. It was hovering approximately fifty feet off the ground, over a space devoid of any trees, brush or other vegetation. The craft appeared to be rotating in a clockwise direction, or giving the illusion it was rotating. My best description was that it looked almost identical in appearance and size to the interplanetary vessel from the movie, "The Day the Earth Stood Still," except it was silvery in appearance, like stainless steel."
Then it happened. The stationary craft moved in an instant over the road and directly in front of my car. I stopped. The ship then advanced slowly toward me, and to avoid contact I turned and drove to my right off the road and onto the spot the UFO had previously occupied. I turned my car around to face the highway and the unidentified object. I was attempting to position myself so I could put the 'pedal to the metal' at my first opportunity, but the UFO moved again in my direction, blocking any escape route. It then slowly descended, coming to rest on the ground approximately twenty(-)five feet in front of my mustang."
Over the next several minutes, the pulsating lights dimmed, the humming sound slowly faded. Finally, the rotation stopped(,) and an opening became visible. The UFO appeared to spit(split?) in a straight line all the way from its apex to its bottom ridge, with a ramp appearing, only smaller and steeper than in the movie I previously mentioned."
The cold was no longer an issue. The combination of adrenaline and fear soon had me perspiring, beads of sweat forming on my forehead. I remember turning off the car's heater. It was difficult to think straight, or even think logically."
I finally reached down under the right front seat of my mustang. I grabbed a handgun I carried with me whenever I was in unfamiliar territory, except this time I was scared out of my wits, and definitely not ready to be a captive, or worse, their guinea pig - not even their well treated 'guest'. Yes, I had read and heard about alien 'abductions' and the stories about what they do to their captive humans. I had absolutely no desire to be their next 'victim.' I wasn't going anywhere without a fight."
I sat there, my heart pounding, waiting for one or a group of extraterrestrials to walk down that ramp. I was going to blow its (or their) head(s) clean off at even the slightest hint of hostility or foul play. What else could I do? I was trapped. Personal cell phones were not available to the public at that time. I couldn't call anyone for help. I waited for what felt like an eternity for someone, some being, or some life form to exit that ship, but nothing happened. When I couldn't stand it any longer, I opened the car door and stepped out. It was time, one way or the other, to end this."
With my gun in hand, I stood directly in front of the saucer's ramp no more than twenty-five feet away. And then something totally unexpected happened. The ramp began to disappear, followed by the opening in the ship closing as seamlessly as it had opened. Simultaneously, the pulsating lights began to flash brighter, the humming resumed as if the UFO was powering up its propulsion system. Instinctively I began to slowly step backward, past my vehicle and well away from the energized vessel."
The ship rose steadily until it was above the surrounding trees, then accelerated at an angle of approximately sixty degrees at an astonishing rate of speed. In the blink of an eye it was out of sight, and I just stood there, now in the dark, and totally bewildered."
I finally walked back to my car, placed the gun back under the seat, and left. I never stopped in south(ern) Oregon. I was in no frame of mind at that time to enjoy a visit with anyone, not even a good friend. I continued on to Eureka in Northern California before checking into a hotel and sleeping the remainder of the day. I wouldn't have slept a wink had I not been so mentally and physically exhausted. When I finally reported back aboard the Enterprise, I just kept my mouth shut. No one would have believed me, anyway."
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I think this is a fantastic story, and after reading it, I believe it to be a true story. Is it? If not, you captured and reflected realistic reactions to a truly abnormal occurrence. Thank you for writing this and letting me read it.
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