Hi, I'm reviewing your work for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work.
Thank you so much for sharing your beautiful dream. I do believe our loved ones can visit with us, in dreams or in our thoughts, to help us with the burden of guilt that we inevitably feel about not doing enough for them when we had the chance. I believe these visits are blessings and allow us some peace in dealing with their absence. It's wonderful that you were able to remember so many details of your dream, especially the feelings you had on being able to see her again.
I have enjoyed visiting your port today and sharing in your dream. See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Hi Jane, I'm reviewing your poem for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work.
I feel great sympathy, even empathy, for one in this plight, pleaing that love and understanding will help someone who is lost in alcoholism. You feel the need to take on the blame yourself, when actually the only hope is to inspire him to take on the blame and the responsibility himself. Reading your poem makes me feel again the blame I, too, have tried to share. It's really hard to let go of it. I hope you have made peace with your life, and that your husband has, too.
Thanks for sharing your poem with us. I'll see you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Hello Joy, I'm visiting your port to review your poem for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work. I'm not a poet but I do enjoy reading poetry.
Your poem reminds us that the flag is a symbol of what our nation means to us and what we mean to each other. I particularly like the end:
my flag is waving
to let the breeze
carry its
healing breath
over us.
I have enjoyed reading your poetry. See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Hi Scribe,(e:smile} I'm reviewing your story for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work.
Thank you so much for sharing this beautiful, emotional story of a woman mourning the loss of her young husband and little child. It was very moving. You very accurately described the guilt and the reluctance for self-forgiveness which is a part of the grieving process. I was sad and cried along with Donna as you told her story.
Suggestions: None, no wonder your story was a winner.
I enjoyed reading your story. See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Hello, I'm reviewing your work for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work.
I'm sure this is the most clever item I have seen so far on WDC. How funny is your lament of a young lady trying to find a mate! How great that you told the whole story by using stanzas of different types of poetry! How smart of you to show an explanation of each type at the bottom so we all could benefit from your cleverness!
Based on this sample of your work, I'm sure I will visit again.See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Welcome to WDC! I'm reviewing your story for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work. I'm not an editor, I can't pretend to correct your punctuation or spelling. Reading your work aloud to yourself can help you with appropriate punctuation. Also, the "spell check" feature on each item is very helpful [note "whipping" and "taring" won't show up in the spell check but I feel certain they should be "wiping" and "tearing."]
Your story is filled with wonderful descriptions of the horror and damage after a bomb. Through Tanya's eyes and ears you bring the story alive. The description of her moving the body and the blood that almost makes her faint, is very good. I felt I was with her in the rubble as she heard the child cry out. The last scene is very poignant, when she choses to help the child instead of running after the jeep. You make us feel her indecision and her final acceptance of the need to do the right thing.
The smoothness of the story was interrupted for me by some questions which came to mind as I read.
"she couldn't let the boy see the bodies" She hasn't found the child yet. Why does she assume it's a boy?
She was deafened by the blast. She could only hear the child. Then, she is hearing again. I missed the transition.
The phrase "burying his head in her chest, his hair tickling her chin." Then this is followed by "Seeing herself mirrored in the eyes..." It seems to beg for some reference to the child looking at her.
I enjoyed reading your touching story See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Hi peppermint patty, I'm reviewing your poem for the "Simply Positive Group"since you were kind enough to review mine.
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work.
My dear, I can feel your pain in your words. You have put up with it for much longer than I did, but you're right, my final thought was "Why did I wait so long?" just as you say in your last line. Your poem is so poignant. You have certainly done a lot of soul-searching. There are many of us who have survived abuse. When you write about it many lovely people on WDC are empathetic and understanding. And writing does seem to ease the soul.
Suggestions: None. I absolutely love your poem. It speaks to me.
Hi Lidi, I'm reviewing your poem for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work.
A beautiful poem that makes me pause and realize all the opportunities around me. I do feel I am seeing the world anew, through an angel's eyes, when I look at my new, beautiful granddaughter, two weeks old today! Thank you for sharing these beautiful thoughts with us.
I enjoyed your poem very much! See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Hi Jaye, I'm reviewing your story for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work.
I'm sure a lot of country music has been written while engaging in such memories. I'll bet a lot of people who let their ambitions overrun their personal values feel a sense of deja vu when reading your story of Jesse's regrets. You made us feel his heartache through his thoughts and his song.
I have enjoyed your story very much! See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
This review is just my thoughts and opinion and is only offered in the spirit of encouragement and support.
The cycle of alcoholism and abuse portrayed in your script is unfortunately a occurrence happening in too many families. My heart aches for the Dianes and Susies and Elises who actually fight this battle over and over in homes around the world. This is a very realistic script describing the hell these poor people experience.
I really enjoyed your script, though it was a sad and emotional experience. I look forward to visiting you in the future. WRITE ON!
Hello, I'm reviewing your story for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work.
You have written such a heartwarming story about how a needy child and a needy adult found each other. I fell in love with Angela, you did such a good job of developing her. Your comparing Ms. Hartman to a used car salesman was very apt and enabled us to envision the type of person she was. I almost cried when she described Angela as a lost cause. Of course I mentally cheered when you brought Angela and Samantha together and they both knew they were destined to be mother and daughter.
I really enjoyed your story. I'll certainly stop back again for more. See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
I just dropped by your port to and review one of your stories to reciprocate for your review of my story! What goes around, comes around .
This review is just my thoughts and opinion and is only offered in the spirit of encouragement and support.
What a great little write; did you ever go any further with it? A wonderful story about a mundane visit to a coffee shop which turns into a full-fledged mystery. You hooked me; I want to know what happened!
You really got my brain cells stirring. Like Ray, I tried to think of how someone could accomplish this. You may have given me an idea for a story--not the same as yours, of course, but this is very thought-provoking.
I really enjoyed your story and look forward to visiting you in the future. WRITE ON!
Hi, I'm reviewing your work for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work.
You've written a great story for children, using words and a point of view that children could understand. The hero, Jakob, actually "proves" to his parents that a ghost is visiting in his room. This is sure to delight any child who reads your story.
I think your story has exactly the right amount of excitement and explanation about a child seeing a ghost without fear. Parents would be happy for their children to hear this story.
I your story. See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Hi Scribe, I'm reviewing your story for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work.
This is a well-written, interesting story of time spent in Maine, working and playing in the snow. I have similar memories from the snow in West Virginia and Ohio. Working and playing in the snow seems to be something that brings families together. Your words about the warm fire and warm clothes, and then hot chocolate was heartwarming and really stirred up my memories.
Suggestions: Just a few minor editing issues but I'm sure you will catch them yourself.
I have enjoyed your story so much. See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Hi, I'm reviewing your work for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work.
Family stories are so great. I could just picture your family snug in the warm little house with the falling snow. Waking to the smell of fresh pumpkin bread sounds wonderful. (I think I'll try your recipe. Thanks for sharing.
I had a good time your story. See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
A very entertaining story about a man picking up a not-so-lucky penny. I, too, stop and hopefully pick up lucky pennies. I absolutely your descriptions of this hapless hero's day! His bad luck experiences are hilarious
Then, you surprised me with the ending, "Lucky penny indeed." Great story.
I really enjoyed your stories and I'll be back in the future for more entertainment! WRITE ON!
I'm in your port for a "Buddy Review" of your story.
This is a wonderful, humorous story of a harried mother trying to keep up with her little boy while he rejoices in playing "Hide And Seek" with her, as taught to him by his father, her ex-husband. Along with the humor, there is the realistic description of that awful feeling in the pit of the stomach of a parent who thinks they have lost a child. Very good description of her emotional roller coaster. I dearly the end where she teaches her son a game to keep her ex-husband on his toes!
I really enjoyed your story and I'll definitely be back for more! WRITE ON!
I am enjoying the time spent in your port today reviewing your wonderful short stories. I love your easy writing style, so realistic and still so entertaining.
This review is just my thoughts and opinion and is only offered in the spirit of encouragement and support.
You hooked me at the mention of sharing secrets! Sometimes this is not a great thing to do, so I'm glad it worked out for your two characters, and in such a humorous way!
Suggestions: I only saw two very tiny errors, which look like they could have even occurred while you were editing. The hero says, "I never got around to mentioned" - I think you mean "mentioning";and "whenever I dated someone knew"-"new." Otherwise, it looks perfect to me.
I really enjoyed your story and look forward to more. WRITE ON!
Hello Crissy, Welcome to Writing.Com I'm reviewing your story for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work. The story is yours and you ultimately decide how to say it.
I love the premise of your story and I was very intrigued by your charactors. I would like to know a little more about the first four "sisters." Are they actually sisters or sisters in spirit. I sense the tie between the two groups of women but I failed to understand exactly what it was. You say "Each woman in the circle resembled one of the visiting sisters." Then, you go on to describe the resemblence,without actually tieing them to the visitors. At the end, you mention "314 years," suggesting that these women are from the past, possibly ancestors. A little more info might help the flow of your story. I really like that you made them children of the four elements, and I would like to know which one belonged to each element. Are the visitors children of the same element as their respective ancestor. You are obviously a talented writer and I really think you could develop this into quite a wonderful story with a few more details.
I really enjoyed reading your story and will watch your port for more. See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Hi Xander, Welcome to WDC. I know you will enjoy this writing community. I'm reviewing your story for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work.
You drew me in and kept me intrigued from the first sentence. I enjoyed the way you went over each scene from the prospective of both Ms. Carmichael and her robber. You developed the story so well from their individual perspectives, offering insight into the charactors' role in the story. It flowed smoothly from beginning to end.
I really enjoyed your story. See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Hi Adam, Welcome to WDC. I'm reviewing your poetry for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work. I am not a poet and not qualified to judge it at all, but I do love to read it and I know what I like.
I like the thought of each of us having a "Bridge of Dreams." It is so life-affirming. My favorite lines are: "With each breath in, I draw the energy of every pure soul
With each breath out, I send all my love to anyone who wants it"
and your last line gives us hope for the future: "My path to beyond, the bridge of dreams"
I enjoyed and plan to revisit your port to see how you are doing and if you have put up your bio. See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Hi Melissa, I'm reviewing your work for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work.
Writing about your feelings is one of the first steps in taking control. I am so sorry about your childhood but it is wonderful that you are starting to realize that only you can make changes in your life and take charge of your future.
Suggestions: Please take a little more time editing your work. Sometimes errors and typos can interrupt the flow and the reader's interest in your work. Read it aloud and you will catch errors, like "plane" instead of "plan" and "where" instead of "wear."
Keep up the positive thinking. I'll be praying you make better choices and really take control of your future.
I have enjoyed your work and plan to drop back by your port. See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Hello, I'm reviewing your work for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work.
This is a very well-written story about spousal abuse. Your abuse scenes and the thoughts of the wife were so true-to-life that they gave me flashbacks. I was really pulling for her to have a happy life and then your ending took me totally by surprise. I don't know why I didn't expect it, I know that abusers often think of their wives as possessions they can dispose of at will.
I enjoyed your story very much. See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Hello, I'm reviewing your story for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review only in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work.
Your genre listings indicate this may be a personal experience. If so, I give you a standing ovation for this act of selflessness and courage. I was drawn to your story because, in my past, I was an abused wife. Take it from me, most people go out of their way to stay out of these situations. From the wife's point of view, I understand her hesitation to file charges. She may have feared retribution from her husband and embarrassment from having anyone find out about it. I'm sure she was grateful for your empathy, whether she showed it or not. Currently, a lot of states do not leave it to the wife to press charges, instead arresting the perpetrator when there is any evidence of abuse. Your story was well written and held my interest until the end.
Suggestions: I noticed a sentence that interrupted the flow of the story and could use some editing. "When I came back out the husband had already left the scene while the wife and her girlfriend and companion had arrived and were comforting her." Maybe, "the wife's girfriend and her companion had arrived..." (Just a thought.)
I enjoyed your story very much See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Jeanne aka Jeanno
(by the way, I am originally from West Virginia, also and now I
live in Ohio.)
Hello, I'm reviewing your story for the "Simply Positive Group."
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work and take it with the proverbial grain of salt
I really like your story of the young man wanting to be a Writer. I particularly liked your description of this goal as "a shining staircase stretching upward and disappearing into the ether." His ambition knew no bounds! Your writing is so descriptive of the ups (of his friends' praise} and the downs {of rejections} that it really makes it possible to empathize with his yearning. Your description of his breakthrough at the end is great. You made your reader cheer along with him. "the Stairway glittered above him" is so descriptive of reattaining his goal. When you wrote his exclamation of "You gotta make 'em feel!" we all pumped our fist in the air!
I really enjoyed this story. See you again soon, I'm sure. WRITE ON!
Jeanne aka Jeanno
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Please accept it as only my own thoughts on your work. 
See you again soon, I'm sure. 
and 
cried along with Donna as you told her story. 
Suggestions: None, no wonder your story was a winner.
"she couldn't let the boy see the bodies" She hasn't found the child yet. Why does she assume it's a boy?
She was deafened by the blast. She could only hear the child. Then, she is hearing again. I missed the transition.
The phrase "burying his head in her chest, his hair tickling her chin." Then this is followed by "Seeing herself mirrored in the eyes..." It seems to beg for some reference to the child looking at her.
. 
You really got my brain cells stirring. Like Ray, I tried to think of how someone could accomplish this. You may have given me an idea for a story--not the same as yours, of course, but this is very thought-provoking. 
your story. 
me with the ending, "Lucky penny