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I'm trying to get in the Christmas spirit and this humorous, rollicking poem was just the place to start!
I, too, heard this story many years ago, but it is so much more entertaining in your droll and funny verses. Your words made me laugh out loud! Then I looked around for someone to share them with!
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I love uplifting, inspirational poetry like this. Good advice and encouragement flow from every word.
My favorite line: "In time you'll reap what you sow."
But my favorite stanza is the last one. It says it all:
"Open your eyes, and play it smart,
accept every individual for their worth.
You do this by following your heart,
cherishing everything on our precious Earth."
Ah, endless, timeless love--your poem celebrates love that spans the centuries. In your beautiful verses it is recalled by a portrait that brings the history and love and pain back to the present. This deja vu feeling of everlasting love has inspired many poems (including some of my own. .)
My favorite lines:
For this painting on the wall hung high for all to see,
holds for me - in another life - my love eternally
Thanks for sharing your inspiration and providing some wonderful
moments of belief that love does live forever. WRITE ON!
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This is a hilarious account of how a 'giddy giggling grandmother' morphed into a 'glazy-eyed alien' under the influence of a bucket of jingling nickels.
Favorite part: "This was not my mother. She had been replaced with this diabolical, dealing, demon with fiendish vocabulary surging from her lips."
As usual when I wander through your port, I depart with a big smile on my face.
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This is a delightful read with wonderful characters and a lot of interesting action. Lou definitely has his own definitive voice. You developed him well.
Favorite lines: In Lou's own words: ..."I'm just a small potatoes gumshoe dick, out to make a buck and spare my jaw from some cheating husband's pummeling."
I really enjoyed reading about Lou and his adventures and I'm already looking forward to reading more about him.
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I love the flow of emotions and self-confirmation in your poem. It is obvious that you have very strong feelings on the subject of being different. We are all unique in our own way and should celebrate our uniqueness.
Favorite line - the last stanza:
And so I'll continue
to proclaim, my voice loud,
that I know I am different.
Of this fact, I am proud.
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This poem certainly should qualify as a 'Troublesome Musing.' It breaks my heart to think that some poor souls are so deep in despair that suicide is actually a pleasurable release, but your words make me realize that this is true in some cases. It is sad that we read of these returning soldiers resorting to this for relief.
These lines are so painful to read and so revealing:
"I feel the pain trickle from me, the images darkening,
the sounds fading, the faint ferrous smell of release
overwhelming the pungent past..."
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I love your challenge and wish everyone would read your poem and take your challenge. When I was younger, I used to play a game on my way to work every day. I worked in a city and walked several blocks from the parking lot to my office building and then back to my car after work. There were lots of people scurrying along the sidewalk, coming and going. I would make a point of trying to make eye contact with everyone I passed. If successful, I would smile and note how many people smiled back. It's hard to resist a smile when a stranger offers one. This always made me get a good start to the day. I hope it was a pleasant experience for those with whom I shared a smile, also. I'm not out and about as much these days since I retired but I still play this game occasionally. It's uplifting.
Favorite lines:
Send a smile to a stranger,
If you pass one today,
Or hold the door open
As you pass on your way.
Spread a kind word to another,
As you go about the day.
Remember the effect,
And go about your merry way.
I'm passing on your challenge to everyone who reads my review!
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You're a man after my own heart. My first thought every morning is that I have another day to spend however I choose. It's always a choice whether we decide to work or play.
I really enjoyed your light-hearted poem about getting old. It's so true: youth is wasted on the young!
My favorite lines:
I'll hold my pace and extend
the race. I'll add another lap.
Excuse me now, I have to go -
I think it's time for my nap.
I, too, shall keep on extending my race by one more lap every day and thank God for the opportunity to do so. You're right, it's nap time!
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You've composed a very clever and thoughtful list of expriences related to addiction. And you listed them in alphabetical order! I can sympathize and empathize. I followed you all the way to: "Zygnomic Zabernised" Care to elucidate explanation?
My Favorite: "Tomorrow Threatened" and "Utopia U-turned"
Very expressive and self-explanatory.
I enjoyed this piece very much and look forward to reading more of your work.
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Your poem "One Belief Away" is a very perceptive contrast between Faith and Religion. It is articulate and enjoyable to read. I have always believed that Faith and Hope go hand in hand. Your last line is outstanding:
"Hope blossoms within the enlightenment of the possible, absolute truth."
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This is very clever. You've taken an old children's story and livened it up by setting it in rhyme and rhythm. It's very enjoyable. I'm sure any child would be pleased to hear your new version of the Three Little Pigs.
My favorite part: So wolf changed his ways. You just never know
What kindness can do for an enemy, so
Be kind to the neighbor who seems full of wind.
He just might be a wolf in need of a friend.
You threw in a good life lesson there at the end. Good job!
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I love your poem. It bounces along at just the right rhythym and paints such a humorous picture.
My favorite part: That moment lasted forever;
I stood with my mouth agape;
What had happened to my dream child,
And my roll of grey duct tape?
I recognize that moment. I have had many of them during the process of raising three children. I appreciate your disclaimer but we have all had those thoughts!
Your poem is hilarious and truly tells it like it is. The ending is great! After all, it's Karma, right?
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The way you write flash fiction is an art. I am a fan. You are able to tell a whole story in a limited number of words and make the story complete. You tell the reader just what he or she needs to know and leave it up to them to supply the little details in their imagination. That makes it easy to buy into the story. You feel almost like you had a hand in creating it. This is an enviable trait and a real talent.
My favorite part: That was where it ran into Thelma, the dearly departed’s better half. The shotgun blast made quick work of the orb. The heavyset woman turned and shuffled out of the house through the back entrance, grabbing a squirrel gun along the way.
A description of Thelma and her actions in a few succint words. Thanks for sharing this story. It was entertaining and enjoyable.
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I, too, treasure the past. Your words remind me of what a treasure our memories truly are. As we grow older and the memories fade a bit we are even more aware of their richness and true value. Your poem flows, full of reminders of what the past means to us.
My favorite part: Treasured days of long ago lend me
The wherewithal to stay assured
Brave the gale, face the gray world
The past is ever, an empowering autonomy.
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Your poem expresses some deep emotional issues. I read it several times to try to soak up the meaning. Maybe it is not for us to understand, but only for you to express. By 'cheers,' 'crowds,' and 'icons,' I discern some type of sporting event or performance. In the remainder of the poem, I feel the expression of the futility of seeking truth from a bottle. But there is still that need to be heard.
Sorry, if I don't get it. That's what it makes me feel.
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Beauty, danger, and mystery right in your own back yard. Or rather, hanging over your heads. Your words make us feel the beauty and majesty of the mountain. The fascination and the threat of danger is clear from the lines of your poem. We all have uncertainties in our lives but this is a dramatic one, to be sure. Thanks for describing your mountain.
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We all have the right, even the responsibility, to stand up for what we believe. Stating those beliefs to influence others is one of the rights we hold so precious. We should honor and respect those who have the courage to do so.
Rising Stars Shedding Light
It's Our Job to Shine Bright
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Hello Nicki,
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. These are just my own comments and opinions; take what you value and discard the rest.
Plot: Your story builds easily to a satisfying climax.
Setting: The setting is believable. It's easy to picture the car and the gas station.
Characters: Your characters are realistic and have some depth. Your words describe each of them well enough to give us a picture of their appearance and their demeanor.
Grammar, Spelling, Dialogue: I didn't see any mistakes and the dialogue was effective.
My Point of View: I enjoyed this story a lot. The ending was quite a surprise, especially Liza's outburst. However, I wondered for just a second why neither the husband or the child recognized Liza, and she didn't give the appearance of avoiding them at all. All in all, a good read.
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Your writing style is smooth and interesting. Your characters have depth and are believable and sympathetic. I cried when your accident victim gave his soul to be reunited with his beloved wife. When she rejected him, I knew she was right but I mourned for him. Your ending, where the vampire finds redemption, is very satisfying and spiritual.
My favorite part: . Then when I reached the top, I bowed, and He touched me, forgiving me for my sins.
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Your poem is inspiring and loving. Such a peaceful picture is painted by your words in the first stanza. Lying on the grass looking up at the clouds (or stars at night) is one of my favorite spots for meditation. My favorite words: Amazed, I feel my spirit lift,
First swept aloft, then cast adrift
So far above my resting place.
I know and embrace that feeling. Then you go on to express joy brought by the presence of our Lord. A very enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing these beautiful thoughts.
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Your poem certainly expresses your contempt of old G.W. I am not a Bush admireer and I do abhor so much of what he stood for and allowed to happen under his leadership. However, I believe we have to take some responsibility for letting him get by with it.
I truly believe we are in better hands now but I believe it is up to all of us to be sure things are better in the future.
My favorite part is the epitaph you propose for his gravestone: Poor ol G.W. had the chance
To heal the world and thus advance
Us all into an age of peace –
Where war and hatred might then cease.
Instead he chose the brainless path
Where mighty egos plan their wrath
Around their smug and foolish days.
You failed us, George. Let’s count the ways
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I laughed and giggled through your whole story. You gave me some chuckles and some good memories. I have memories of the feelings you have when you are pregnant, as well as memories of when I talked my dad into taking me hunting to prove girls could hunt, too. You can guess how that turned out.
Your hilarious descriptions of your feelings and actions are priceless. My favorite part:
Oh man. Oh man. I have to pee. Augh....I really, really have to pee. The baby is kicking me right in the bladder. There's no ignoring it. I look over at him. He's looking at me and scowling. He knows. I know he knows. I try to wish away the urge. Ok. It's not going away. I really have to pee, damn it. He rolls his eyes and ignores me. I scramble off the dirt pile and try to find a "good spot" to pee. You know, a spot where you can brace on a tree and not piss on your sock. Hey, you think those are easy to find?
I had to lay my head down on my computer desk and laugh. I had tears in my eyes! Thank you so much for sharing your story with us.
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I love daffodils and eagerly watch for them every spring. Your poem painted a wonderful picture in my mind of a whole field of daffodils 'dancing to the music' of the wind. Lovely. I could see your boy wading through their glory.
My favorite part: 'It was a haven of peace and contentment.'
Rising Stars Shedding Light
It's Our Job to Shine Bright
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Hello Jyo,
I offer my review in the spirit of encouragement and support. These are just my own comments and opinions; take what you value and discard the rest.
Plot: Such a cute story showing life from a new puppy's point of view. I really felt like I was seeing everything through his eyes.
Setting: Your descriptions of the house are realistic. I loved the reference to being banished to the shed.
Characters: You developed all of the characters well and described them well, in 'puppy terms.'
Grammar, Spelling, Dialogue: Everything was well done, except for one sentence with a missing word:
and a dazzling vision in blue-violet chiffon that I later learned Joshua had been __________ without success for weeks.
My Point of View: The story flowed well and was very entertaining. I enjoyed reading it very much.
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I'm trying to get in the Christmas spirit and this humorous, rollicking poem was just the place to start! 
Your words made me laugh out loud! Then I looked around for someone to share them with! 
about Lou and his adventures and I'm already looking forward to reading more about him.
That's what it makes me feel.