I like this poem... I have had to read it several times to try to understand what the writer is expressing... it is deep... and mysterious. Thats good.
I don't quite understand the ending lines... call me dense... "size zero white and no calorie black" I will continue to ponder... Keep writing and I'll keep reading
Great writing! Such strong emotion and well stated! I can only imagine how it must be to go through a miscarriage... it is great that you are able to write about it, I believe it will help you heal in time.
I found your writing to be very interesting. You kept my attention until the very end and much of the time writings of this length do not.
“Maybe countries are like people and the U.S. is in its teenage rebellious years.” I think this an awesome statement. Not that I agree, but it is well written.
Even though I may not agree with some of your thoughts I find them very interesting and I like your style of writing.
The ending leaves an impression, your words are profound and opens the readers mind.
“Maybe that’s simply all life is, just a bunch of random thoughts, ideas and memories.”
This is also an awesome statement… and don’t we all wonder the purpose of life.
I enjoyed this very much and I look forward to reading more from you.
This is awesome! A masterpiece! The words flow so easily together. I can so relate to what you are writing it is exactly what I am going through at this moment. Ohh.. the battlefield of the mind versus the spirit.
This writing rocks! I seldom rate a 5 but that is what I am rating this... well done! Write on!
I like this ! Very good... Well written, conveys much emotion. The words flow easily... holds the readers attention. I love the ending lines... Well done!
I look forward to reading more from you. Keep Writing!
Love it! This poem is very strong... I especially love the line: "It's decency I yearn"... Awesome!
What wisdom is shown from the writer through this. Strength and courage, a desire for the good life. I adore... You could continue with this poem and improve it is some areas. However, I think the way it is now for sure explains what the writer is trying to express.
I look forward to reading more of your work. Write On!
Wow! I really like this poem! Packed with emotion!
I can so relate to the words you have written. This is something that I could have written in my own experiences. You did an excellent job at conveying how you feel. There is no doubt we know the feelings of the writer.
I love the positive ending… how truthfully stated that closure just takes time but it will come.
This poem is well written. There is a strong story told here and quite interesting.
I think if it were spaced out some, it would be easier on the reader’s eye.
My favorite line is the ending line… great ending! Shows such determination and strength from the writer.
My least favorite line: I saw a man pluck her virtue. I am not sure what the writer is trying to explain here.
This poem is packed! I love the reoccurring line “once upon my little girl dreams” and how it switches to “once upon my womanhood dream”… that is awesome and paints the greatest image for the reader.
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