Reading this made me very happy on a very sad day! Your words jump off th page and bring life to your hero. His love for beauty is palpable as is his joy that his love is returned...Bravo!
My heart is breaking for your sister. I lost my husband quite suddenly, and almost lost my daughter to leukemia. I hope she is ok. I understand the chaos such loss brings. Its been four years for me and I am just beginning to heal. You express it well and use great imagery.
Awesome...you have captured the feeling of the lone silence in our minds. I especially love the last stanza...noteably the last line. Sometimes its as simple and as difficult as that. WDC had helped me to jump that hurdle and has made all the difference. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with the rest of us!
Reading this, I can tell that you are intimate with grief. The way you descirbe the tear that runs down his cheek is deeply touching. I will reread this one many times, I am sure.
I love the power you claim; the determination and confidence you show the person who would keep you down because of their own insecurites. Well done...
This may surprise you, but I am glad this doesn't have a rhyming scheme. I think it would take away from the simplistic beauty of your words. For me, you really captured that moment when you realize that the love you feel for someone else is more important than anything else in your world. One of my very favorites...thanks!
I know this experience and you have expressed it so well here. I like that you did not use capital letters....it shows her feelings of being unseen and insignificant. One of my favorites, thanks for sharing!
Thanks for sharing the laughter!! I'm not in my sixties, yet...but this is still so relevant to those of of a little younger. (for me it was disco and big hair) I enjoy reading your work and I am grateful for your perspective. Write more like this one!
Reading this makes me want to find out those answers myself. I'm sure the parents of your students are so grateful their child has such a caring teacher.
I really like the way this flows. I read this a second time to better understand it, then read it a third time because it i could relate to walking in the darkness of life. I read it one more time, because I was wondering if the darkness you spoke about was yours or one of your students. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Perfect,. Your words are so well written, I can feel the lord's sorrow and frustration.
I would guess it is based on personal experience because you have described the scene so well.
Isn't it amazing how we can continue to function on any level, when we know that for all intents and purposes, we are dead inside? I have been there, am still there. You're right the alcohol is a temporary fix. They keep telling me to move on with my life, but they don't tell me how. I know, though, that writing is the best thereapy for me. I hope you continue to write. It can only help. Good Luck!
I identify so much with this poem. When my husband was killed by a drunk driver, my children were the only reason I even tried to keep going. They literally saved my life. Even now, there are times I want to quit. But I cannot leave them alone, even though they are mostly grown. You have expressed some of my most secret feelings in the father's thoughts. Thank you for sharing this.
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Not quite the ending I was expecting. lol