Wow a lot of questions. I think its a little to stunted in the beginning. I know it says Why is love such a mystery, or is it just a feeling? But for some reason I reread it three times and each time I wanted to read it differently....... Why is love such a mystery? Or is it just a feeling? A feeling that erupts from within the heart. does thus deem it true? There are many different types yet are each so appealing, Only love and nothing else for us would ever do.
I don't know its interesting but I guess it just wasn't for me. It seemed like some of it was shortened just a little too much for me. But it does leave one thinking.
This story is written with the honesty of cancer. It is a cruel thing to loose one so young or anyone to this disease. I am sorry I could not find anything wrong with it because I am to emotional to rate it for spelling and grammer. But the story is one that I can relate to in a way. I enjoyed it although it made me sad. It also made me remember. Thank you
I like your story about the spider. I think I would be freaked out too if one tried to land on my face. I didn't know spiders are a symbol of good luck. You learn something new everyday.
Very nice. I like the descriptive words. It makes you think of the many ways words are used.
On the second line the word beautiful is missing the a. I think if you put a made another paragraph out of "words in order make fantasies real tell lies so powerful they're read as gospel" it would make it read smoother. I also wondered where to pause and reflect. The sentences run into each other I think a period or comma might help.
Thank you for your wonderful poem.
I like the descriptions. You can feel the authors needs and wants. The only thing I think would make it better is if you were to put spaces between the paragraphs. For instance after the line about her opinions it jumps to her skin I think would make a line space. It makes it a little easier to read. You can pause and reflect after each area of explanation about her. A lovely piece of work.
Beautiful. Very simple yet elegant. The only thing missing is punctuation and capitalization. However, if this was written as a thought without end or beginning I think it's perfect.
This poem confuses me a little. I think I may not realize the true meaning. I do however think I would put a period after the word flesh. It makes it smoother while reading. Also another period after "I stand".
This story is very realistic. I like the way you described the city.
I was wondering why he kept the beer in the bag it would have been a larger bag than a beer can due the newspaper. I think I would have had him put the newspaper away before he left and had only the beer in a bag.
I like this very much. As disturbing as it is it makes you happy that in the end she tells. It breaks my heart and makes me weak in the knees to know that this is what happens to people. This story moved me and haunted me at the same time. It makes you want to help the girl and the mother but at the same time it makes you want to hurt the father the way he hurt them. I enjoyed this. Thank you for giving me the oportunity to review such a wonder peice of work.
This story is wonderful. It really makes you think about life and what you have. We truly don't know what we are going to miss until we don't have it anymore. Thank you for this thought provoking story.
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