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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought, especially since I know someone who was heavily impacted by the pandemic on a mental level. He got some help, and I hope it's enough.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is very beautiful. The dance of time is far more difficult when one is feeling exhausted or otherwise unwell.

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Review of Matters Soul  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. Thanks for giving my brain something to chew on.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

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Review of Tur pie Daugavas  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I used my internet browser to translate this to English, so I will not comment on the grammar.

This river seems like the wind to me.

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Review of Monster  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This makes me nostalgic for my university years. I'm glad those struggles are behind me now, but it was fun.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is great to know! Some of it went over my head because I'm not too familiar with the region, but it's good for me to learn more about what's happening in the world.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! You established the characters, their struggles, and the setting very well. Keep it up, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

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Review of Broken Heart  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start!

The grammar could use work. If you want a more in-depth look at sentence structures, I recommend reading "The Elements of Grammar" by Margaret Shertzer.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start!

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a delightful idea. Thanks for joining to share your joy of reading with the community.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I feel like I've been here a few times, though in some cases, I didn't advance quickly enough. Timing is key.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is lots of fun! However, in today's world, I can't imagine anyone letting a child run home alone, unless the houses are super close together.

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Review of Alive (Nightmare)  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Thanks for taking me on this journey with you.

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Review of Waterdog  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This was a funny read. I've seen some Family Guy, though not an extensive amount. It felt a bit disjointed, though, as if the references were jammed in places they didn't fit.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

I like the way the chain of events is interconnected with the protagonist's family. I also like the way religion and science are blended here.

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Review of Farewell  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This has a lot of powerful emotions in it.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as am, are, is, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing and make it less wordy.

Example: The ballpark was packed, and the crowd was electric.
--> An electric crowd packed the ballpark.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks for requesting my review!

What strikes me most about these lyrics is the concept of "When HE taps us/me on the shoulder." On the first read of this, I assumed that HE referred to God, and then I saw that it was referring to the Reaper. As such, the part about dancing with all the girls struck me as lustful, and the part about eating all the finest foods and licking the platters struck me as gluttonous. I'm not religious these days, but I used to run with that crowd, so I often see things from that perspective. It was the capitalization that made me assume we were talking about God, though I noticed the change from He to HE in the middle of the song. Was it supposed to be God at first, and then the Reaper later?
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Review of What Love is  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This reminds me of the feelings I have for my first love, though he made me no promises except in my dreams. I still dream of him sometimes, and I believe there is something deeper there on a spiritual plane of existence that we will eventually have access to.

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Review of Might I?  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I have these feelings myself from time to time. It sucks so much.

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Review of Happiness  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This is quite a profound tale. The writing is crisp and clear even if the memories are not.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Review of Forest Interlude  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This is an absolutely beautiful piece. I enjoyed the mystery as well as the journey.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Review of My Boys  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This is a super sweet poem. My son is 2.5, and many days are starting to look like this, though we don't have a consistent bathtime. I typically spray him down after we eat popsicles outside or if he's been playing in the dirt. When we do have a proper bath, it's usually whenever I want a long soak in the tub.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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