Hey, I read this one and somehow could only imagine a girl who madly loves a guy, who does not know the cons of immature crazy love. You wrote this one with your normal poetry style. I am saying about the rhyming style you maintain in other works too. It is well written, but I somehow don't like the theme of loving somebody without knowing that person well.
Keep writing because you have a gift to transform your thoughts in to nice poetry..
Hey, it was nice reading this piece. A simple yet heart touching one. Sorry, but I couldn't help myself to imagine that I am reading a story written by a 7-8 yrs old kid. How could you express your childhood memories with such innocence?
I too love writing monologues and this was somewhat inspirational how you express a very young yourself in this story.
Hey...i don't know how to express my feeling after reading this poem..
Somehow it is full of innocence as you have maintained nice and sweet rhyming words and it is full of romance too that i could not stop myself to send a copy of it to my love. You have exactly reflected the thoughts those are coming out of a heart which is filled with love and desires for a special person. I love how you describe the meaning of desire in its purest form.
I must thank you for such a beautiful share..
You have a beautiful mind and simple heart for sure..
hey..wow..First of all congratulations for this fiction...it was really something else..salute to your imagination..
Some thoughts about the future are actually common to many people...All the characters were well created by you...You have added every possible details to them...
hey...how are you??? i am Munmun from India and i am 23 years old...I have gone through the lines that you have written.. You have added your frustration, strength, dream, realization and maturity all in this note...
I can't realize how hard for you to face the real world in this age, but, yes off course, i can figure out that you are having a hard time.. Everyone have bitter experiences as you are having now..May be they have different stories..but one thing you must believe that a constant hard worker sooner or later gets what he/she wants..Have you ever meet a loser who tried and tried till death but remained to be a loser..obviously no...
And you should not think much about looks..Why, dint you meet anyone in your life who has a bad face and still a successful person??? I have seen many..
You possess an attitude that you can do something..yes, you can.. Please never give up that attitude..Just, keep growing that..And when you go out for an interview just make sure what you are going to sell as those interviewers are buyers who are waiting to buy the best with the money they have..If you think its all about looks..then try to be as neat as possible...and be transparent with the ideas that are in your mind..
I am happy that you realize what happiness really is...in the future years you might be more prosperous with wealth, but you will always have a simple way of living as you know the true happiness exists when the people whom you love and who loves you are with you..
As i am writing these lines to you, i feel like i am recalling my own ideas which always give me strength and empower my life..
I am a computer science and engineering graduate with not so good looks..i am a straggler and yet to get what i always want..
Hey, it was great reading your note...As a new writer/author(????????????), i found the whole thing to be very helpful for my future work..
I usually do grammatical error as for many years i am far away from literacy. As a BE in CSE i am more into technical words.. Now i am trying to write as correctly as possible.. Writing was a fear for me as my vocabulary is not that strong..But, i think to be a writer you only have to posses a quality which is the ability to express what you think and express it in a way that the reader could get your thoughts...and practice makes a man perfect, that's an universal fact..
hey...i don't know whether you are online, still , wish you a good morning..
I would like to say that your poem has gifted me a fresh start to the day....
Your lines remind me a great dialogue by master oogway in the movie "Kung Fu Panda", it is "yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, but today is a gift. That is why it is called the "present."..
hey..First of all wish you a great year ahead.. I read the letters in the story as i really love to write letters to my lover, but, i found it too different..These are letters which are describing emotions of a lady to her love throughout her life.. I love the line "Your music was always your key to unlocking doors you wanted to get through, and now it is my key to unlocking you." It tells that when science and even god fails to help you, there are people around you who love you and they know how to make you feel good..and it only happens when you are a lucky one..
hii...may i ask your name??? i guess u r a girl like me who loves her father a lot...m sorry that u r facing this situation but i appreciate that u still try to connect to him by keeping regularly d news paper on his chair, adding less sugar to your dishes..u must b a good daughter of a great father...everything will b fine..best wishes to u ...
hii..was it a dream or you wrote the story?? I think it is a dream as most of the events are there where you felt like you dont know why it was happening...
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