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Review of Return of Cain  
Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings Wenston*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Return of Cain" 

*WitchHat* What I liked about this piece:

I liked how you took obscure pieces in the bible and created a backdrop to this story. Amazingly done.




*WitchHat* Story Strength:

I find that you used myth and fact well to create a believable setting and a strong character. And I find the idea of God using the father of all Vampire's a genius stroke.


*WitchHat* Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

I found no mistakes.




*WitchHat* Some suggestions I'd like to make:

Is there more to follow?





Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review of Revs light  
Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings Anotherdefault*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Revs light" 

*WitchHat* What I liked about this piece:

This was a piece that I found refreshingly different to other Vampire stories.




*WitchHat* Story Strength:

Rev is a vampire but obviously not happy with his existence. This piece showed me as a reader the things I take for granted seeing in the sun. It is excellently written.



*WitchHat* Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

I found no mistakes



*WitchHat* Some suggestions I'd like to make:

Thank you for a great story.




Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review of Silo: Chapter One  
Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings Silo*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Silo: Chapter One" 

*WitchHat* What I liked about this piece:

I found this story well written and the pace not too difficult to follow.




*WitchHat* Story Strength:

Silo is a very strong character. So is her brother and father, and you set a tone in this that makes the reader anxious to find out what happens next.



*WitchHat* Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

I could not detect any mistakes.



*WitchHat* Some suggestions I'd like to make:

In the beginning you said you were not sure of the format of the story. I found the way you presented this okey and enjoyable.





Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings C.J Ellisson*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Vamp Vac Chap 7 (prev was chap 6)" 

*WitchHat* What I liked about this piece:

I liked how you used Vivian to bring Rafe and Jonathan a bit closer. I also liked how you paced the story.




*WitchHat* Story Strength:

I loved the fact that you portrayed Vivian with a little bit of insecurity. It makes her character all the more believable and like able.




*WitchHat* Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

I found no mistakes.




*WitchHat* Some suggestions I'd like to make:

Chapter seven makes the characters even stronger and I loved reading it.




Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings C.J Elliot*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Vampire Vacation Chap 5" 

*WitchHat* What I liked about this piece:

I love wolves and werewolves! Jonathan is a perfect addition to this story.




*WitchHat* Story Strength:

Vivian is not the typical Vampire we get forced into reading. I think you have made her an interesting and memorable character. And I hope to read more of Jonathan.
And by Rafe's response to her feeding I think you prove that Vamps and Werewolves are in a way superior to humans. At least that's the impression his remarks create in me as a reader.



*WitchHat* Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

I found no mistakes



*WitchHat* Some suggestions I'd like to make:

I definitely want to read more.





Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings C.J Ellison*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Vampire Vacation Chapter 3-revised 8/26" 

*WitchHat* What I liked about this piece:

Wow. Dria is one talented Vampire! I liked how you kept me as a reader at the edge of my seat.



*WitchHat* Story Strength:

The way you described Dria's abilities and the affect it has on others are tastefully done. Dria has some amazing gifts and use them surprisingly to the better of others. Also I loved that you made her and her blood bond mate so amazingly loyal to each other.



*WitchHat* Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

I found no mistakes.



*WitchHat* Some suggestions I'd like to make:
 I loved the way you ended this chapter.





Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings C.J. Ellison*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Vampire Vacation Chap 2 revised 8/26" 

*WitchHat* What I liked about this piece:

It is a great follow up to the previous chapter. I like the way you give the reader more background on Dria and the resort in a way that enhance the story.




*WitchHat* Story Strength:

Dria is a vampire one can really like. Her treatment to the people around her is not the normal I'm-better-than-you one gets bombarded with in vampire stories. She knows her business well and take care of those that work for her well. Her and the other characters are believable and realistic. I also loved the way you ended this chapter. One is compelled to read further.*BigSmile*



*WitchHat* Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

There were no mistakes.



*WitchHat* Some suggestions I'd like to make:

Thank you for an awesome story.





Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings C.J. Ellison*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "V V Chap One - revised 8/26/09" 

*WitchHat* What I liked about this piece:
I think that to the start of a story this is brilliant! Here is why: It grabbed my attention and held it. It makes me want to type this review faster so I can get back to the story.



*WitchHat*Story Strength:

Dria and her mate's strong relationship comes through very strong. And I think its great that she is fighting her natural urge to feed on the blood- personally stories where vampires just give in and feed make me stop reading. The image that they cannot control their urges is overused and boring. Dria and Rafe also use logical to a reader point of view to deal with the dead body.



*WitchHat* Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

There were no mistakes. This is very well written.



*WitchHat* Some suggestions I'd like to make:

I can't wait to see what happens next.





Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings Ditonnai*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Nathan's Tale - Prologue + Ch 1" 

*WitchHat* What I liked about this piece:

I liked the way you wrote about a difficult subject without shying away from the truth lot of people avoid seeing.




*WitchHat* Story Strength:

Nathan's inner strength shine through. The emotions, the terror and horror is made very real for the reader. You hit to the heart of a situation and topic many avoid.



*WitchHat* Spelling//grammar/punctuation:

I found no mistakes.



*WitchHat* Some suggestions I'd like to make:

Can't wait to see what happens next. Very well written.





Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review of Dark Reunion  
Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings Whitney Sanchez*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Dark Reunion" 

*WitchHat* What I liked about this piece:

I liked the pace and the action in this piece. I also liked that you deviated from the normal Werewolves are the bad guys track.




*WitchHat* Story Strength:

Your story has a very double meaning title and the story surprise the reader's natural assumptions created by that title. The action and suspense is well executed and believable.



*WitchHat* Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

Like the fact that there are no mistakes




*WitchHat* Some suggestions I'd like to make:

Is this part of a larger work.





Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*WitchHat*Greetings Mitch*WitchHat*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your poem, "Midnight On Halloween" .And I would like to share the following with you.

*Reading* My impression on the poem:

I think its a great Halloween poem and I hope you did well in the contest. It suits the theme very well and was very believable.



*Reading* What I really liked about the poem:

You used elements well associated with Halloween and your poem had the right horror and suspense factor to it.





*Reading*Spelling/Punctuation/Grammar:

I found no mistakes.






Thank you for sharing your poem. It was a joy to review*BigSmile*

*YinYang* KEEP WRITING*YinYang*
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Review of Scare Tactics VI  
Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings two of four*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Scare Tactics VI" 

*WitchHat* What I liked about this piece:

I'm a paranormal and horror fan and you brought the two things I love the most of both genres together. A story with a werewolf and the subtler form of horror I love.



*WitchHat* Story Strength:

The fact that this story is written with the view of the past and of the present make it even more enjoyable. Your characters are believable, your story has great pace and description to it. And as a newbie I can hope that one day my work would be this good.


*WitchHat* Spelling/grammar/punctuation:
 The fact that there are no mistakes made this a joy to read.



*WitchHat* Some suggestions I'd like to make:

Keep writing and do you have more stories like this?





Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings Fel*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Lone wolf: chapter 2" 

*WitchHat* What I liked about this piece:

I found it imaginative and well written. The pace of the story was easy to follow and the wolves world seemed real and believable. This review covers both chapter 1 and 2.



*WitchHat* Story Strength:

The characters in this story seem so real and that draws me as a reader in.



*WitchHat* Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

I found no mistakes



*WitchHat* Some suggestions I'd like to make:

May I suggest that you write more on this. What happens next?





Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review of The New Guy  
Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings Ditonay*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Nathan's Tale - Prologue + Ch 1" 

*WitchHat* What I liked about this piece:

I found this a thought provoking and gut twisting tale that hits right into the matter that a lot of people ignore or prefer to shy away from.


*WitchHat* Story Strength:

You take the reader through all the horror, terror and pain and frustration the characters find themselves in. I sense strong emotion behind the writing. The pain and humiliation and anger is in your face and the way it is written the reader is forced to acknowledge it.


*WitchHat* Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

I found no Spelling, or grammar or punctuation mistakes in this piece



*WitchHat* Some suggestions I'd like to make:

It should be part of a larger work. At the end I wondered what would happen next.




Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review of The Chase  
Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings Simple Dykie*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "The Chase" 

*WitchHat* What I liked about this piece:

I found this an energetic,funny and entertaining story. The writer's love and emotions are easy to associate and relate too. I found that the writer's ability to make me feel the energetic energy as Chase move very well written. Also the lessons learned was easy to relate too.


*WitchHat* Story Strength:

This story is well described and The reader know where he/she find themselves at all time. The writer's love and knowledge of dogs are reflected through the story. The story draw one in and add to the pleasure of reading it.



*WitchHat* Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

I found no spelling or grammar or punctuation mistakes.



*WitchHat* Some suggestions I'd like to make:

This piece would fit in well with a longer piece.





Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review of Turkey Talk  
Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings Purple Star the Warrior*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Turkey Talk" 

*WitchHat*What I liked about this piece:

I found this story entertaining and funny. I even felt a bit sorry for the birds.
This is well written.


*WitchHat*Story Strength:

the simplicity of the story makes it very believable that a turkey could have written it. it is too the point and very very direct.


*WitchHat*Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

I found no mistakes.



*WitchHat*Some suggestions I'd like to make:

This is the perfect stress reliever. A story one can read on a hectic day on your coffee break. Thanks for making me laugh.





Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review of Tabula Raza  
Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings Trivia Triveni*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Tabula Raza" 

*WitchHat*What I liked about this piece:

I liked how the writer captured moods and draw the reader into it. It is a good introduction to the story that made me look forward to reading more. The remaining team members grief show the reader the tight bond and make it even sadder. One can almost belief it as a very real funeral.


*WitchHat*Story Strength:

The writer used good description of both the characters as well as their surroundings. I as a reader knew exactly where I was reading this. And the characters emotions became part of me the reader.This story captured the attention from start to finish.


*WitchHat*Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

The absence of mistakes showed that the writer took time to edit and made this a joy to read.


*WitchHat*Some suggestions I'd like to make:

This story left me wanting top read further. I do hope it will continue. I cant wait to see what happens next.




Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review of Silver and Bronze  
Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings SpookyB*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Silver and Bronze" 

*WitchHat*What I liked about this piece:

I'm a fan of this genre and I loved how you didn't just fall into they the enemy trap.This story was tasteful even with the adult content in it. The story remind me strongly of Juliet and Romeo style. Also I adored how you put the story time line in the middle ages.


*WitchHat*Some suggestions I'd like to share:

My suggestion would be that this be used as part of a longer story. As the reader is left with a sense of what happens next.


*WitchHat*Story Strength:

The surroundings and characters were well described. The fact that the main male and main female characters are both strong made it an interesting read. The plot was very well thought out.


*WitchHat*Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

The fact that there is no mistakes shown that you spend time editing and polishing this. I really enjoyed reading this.


Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review of He Sits  
Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings Turtle*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work,

*WitchHat*What I liked about this piece:

I liked the way the old man is portrayed to the reader. He does not even have a name which fits so well with the sad undertones of this story.

*WitchHat*Some suggestions I'd like to share:

I liked this as it stands. It made me think.

*WitchHat*Story Strength:

The old Man is well described as the feelings of those around him to him. I think it was excellently done.

*WitchHat*Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

I can learn much from your use of spelling and grammar and punctuation. Thank you for a great thought provoking read.

Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review of The Cave  
Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings Yusuf*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Invalid Item" 

*WitchHat*What I liked about this piece:

I liked how you brought the unexpected twist as the end of the story. Also I found the description of the surroundings and the characters very well done.


*WitchHat*Some suggestions I'd like to share:

This was a gripping story and I loved reading it.



*WitchHat*Story Strength:

I found the format you used very interesting. And how you used conversation to show Eric's character to the reader.



*WitchHat*Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

The lack of mistakes made this easy to read.

Keep up the great work Yusuf.*Star*


Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings Lady Grace*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "To Be or Not To Be...Human" 

*WitchHat*What I liked about this piece:

I liked how you made this different to other Vampire stories and that Simon was so contrary to the normal image given to them. The story was believable and highly enjoyable. I liked how I as reader was drawn into Simon's world. Also I liked the dragon and the interaction between her and Simon. Again you gave a refreshing view that goes against popular believes.


*WitchHat*Some suggestions I'd like to share:

May I suggest using Simon in a larger work? What happened that he became what he is? What followed after he got bitten. Those are a few of the questions that popped up as I was reading.


*WitchHat*Story Strength:

Simon is a very strong character and you interacted him well with the surroundings you placed him in. Also you used the fantasy genre very well. You made Simon and his world believable.


*WitchHat*Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

The lack of faults made this a superb read.


Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review of Hell in Ipsi  
Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings (User Don Daddy*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "Hell in Ipsi" 

*WitchHat*What I liked about this piece:

I found the format it was written in very interesting. Also I liked how the plot was strong right through the story. The story brought a sense of suspense that the writer built on very well.


*WitchHat*Some suggestions I'd like to share:

Is this part of a longer work?


*WitchHat*Story Strength:

The tension in the story kept me on the edge of my seat. The characters personality came trough strongly. It was easily believable and the reader is left with no doubt about their intentions.


*WitchHat*Spelling/grammar/punctuation:

The lack in spelling mistakes and good use of grammar and punctuation made this an enjoyable read.


Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review of New Idea  
Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Reading*Greetings Ox~Brenton*Reading*

I'm Amy and I had the pleasure to review your work, "New Idea" 

*WitchHat*What I liked about this piece:

It was short but I loved the idea behind it. And I found this line hilarious:"I prefer Craig." Who would have thought of Fate as male!*BigSmile* I found that very imaginative and very creative.

*WitchHat*Some suggestions I'd like to share:

Is this perhaps part of a larger story?

*WitchHat*Story Strength:

Fate is well projected to the reader. And this is a story that grabbed my attention. And kept it. At the end I was left wanting to read more.

*WitchHat*Spelling/grammar/punctuation:
The absence to mistakes made this a great read.

Thank you for sharing your work with me*BigSmile*. I hope that you will find this review helpful.

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*

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Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*WitchHat*Hi Elerad *WitchHat*

I'm Amy and I'm a member of the "Paper Doll Gang"and I am honored to review "Seeking Kinship at the Dance Macabre" .

*Reading*What I liked about this story:

I love the supernatural Genre and this story had the right amount of suspense to it to make it a great story. From the start of the story you give little clues that Brian is not all he seemed.

*Reading*Story Strength:

Your wording seem strange at places but become very clear at the surprising twist at the end of the story. Brian is a very strong character and the bond between his father and himself leads further to the story's strength.


*Reading*Suggestion:

This is a strong piece that could easily be the intro to a longer piece.

*Reading*Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:

The absence of faults make this an enjoyable read. Splendidly done!

*Star**ThumbsUp* Thank you for sharing your work.*Star**ThumbsUp*

*YinYang*Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!*YinYang*
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Review of Johnny  
Review by Kayna-amy
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
*WitchHat*Hi Natsplatt *WitchHat*

I'm Amy and I'm a member of the "Paper Doll Gang"and I am honored to review "Johnny" .

i would like to offer you the following comments:
I found this a very interesting story. I liked the struggle that johnny has with the fact of what he is. It is a refreshing different point of view.

Story Strength:

Johnny is not the stereotype werewolf that has an evil disposition, he honestly want someone to stop him. You bring that struggle very clearly to the reader's attention.

Suggestion:
It seem like this is an introduction to the character. Did you consider using him for further stories?

Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:
U used the tools above mentioned well in this piece


Most importantly:KEEP WRITING!

*Star**ThumbsUp* Thank you for sharing your work.*Star**ThumbsUp*

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