Of course I dug it my mother's family sharecropped....You commented that the poem's topic had frightening simularities to today..Do you mean in terms of how we work so hard to try to get ahead but never seem to gain an inch??? I know thats something I can certainly identify with..L.
In verse 2 the 2nd line....I think- "now all of my love I bestow" flows smoother...I don"t think U need the words "upon you" at all.In verse 5 the 4th line you wrote dose...should it be does? In the 6th verse 2nd line-I don"t think you want her to grow "surly" in your arms;surely grow? :) Of course, this is certainly beautiful; all the words the female form would desire to hear. It very clearly, with gentle and controlled power conveys devotion,passion and desire. Verses 2-7 gave me mild heart palpitations~so we know I am certainly female.Although I"d like to think if a male were my muse my inspiration for such writing he would be equally flattered. Breathtaking and outstanding.
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/landrumgreen
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.23 seconds at 8:19am on May 10, 2024 via server web2.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
