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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good Day Moody Blue! This review comes to you on behalf of "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  and the "June 2016 PowerReview Raid" . Hope my comments are welcomed.

*Frown* Clearly, this was not easy to write. As a teenager, my mother gave the advice that I should write one to my father too. I did, but I never could find the courage to send it.

He was not an absent father, but more of a father to the family he chose and throughout the years became less to me. I am alright now, but I wasn't for a very long time. It is hard to come to terms, and find yourself accepting it and not remaining angry, but I was able to do it somehow. Perhaps, it was because I had wonderful grandparents, and a fabulous mother.

I hope that both you and your father are able to realize that it is him that is missing out and that you are worth the time and effort! It's good that you wish to still try and keep the lines open. Some times, too much happens and it's hard to to keep an open heart and open mind.



Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Good Day Sewcrazy! This review comes to you on behalf of "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  and the "June 2016 PowerReview Raid" . Hope my comments are welcomed.

*Thumbsup* I find this to be a significant memory that shows a great bonding experience between you and your father. Perhaps, since your father was such a serious man, moments like this stood out more to you.

I can picture you mumbling the words to an unfamiliar song while your father tried to quietly mimic the words*Laugh*

I am glad the two of you found the laughter between your sister's tough shell and Roy's music.

Thank you for sharing this memory!

Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good Day Rebecca Sue! This review comes to you on behalf of "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  and the "June 2016 PowerReview Raid" . Hope my comments are welcomed.

*Thumbsup* Informative and interesting. Before reading this, I had not contemplated on how Father's Day came to be.

I like that you mention giving time as a gift for that day. Though our time is a free gift, the hustle and bustle of life often conflicts with people being able to do that. However, this is a friendly reminder that life can be short, so we should really make the time, or it may be too late.

I also appreciate that you touch base on doing this for someone who may not be a father by blood, but maybe a mentor or father figure by choice. It can also be celebrated by those that have lost their fathers, or who only had the chance to be one by choice. Those people are just as important to honor.

After all, where would you be without them? Just a glimmer in your mother’s eye
*Thumbsup* Good ending that makes a nice point!


Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good Day Winklett! This review comes to you on behalf of "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  and the "June 2016 PowerReview Raid" . Hope my comments are welcomed.

*Thumbsup* Touching piece from son to father through your eyes. This warmed my heart and brought smiles to my face.

You place me before everything there was or ever will be
That defines love and selflessness. My friend has a son who is autistic and there are days where she is tired and tried, but it is always worth it*Smile*

This is a nice reminder of the simple things which are most important. Some times life moves by fast and we forget to cherish these times.


Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of Her Father  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Good Day Shaara! This review comes to you on behalf of "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  and the "June 2016 PowerReview Raid" . Hope my comments are welcomed.

I love that you were reflection upon your own memories, but drawing on different ones for your child. It shows how deeply you miss him, but also shows the great efforts in trying to show what kind of person he once was. It's sad that she did not get to experience that firsthand. She is going by what she knows instead on what she has missed out on In either case, both circumstances are sad.

If this was written on true account, my heart goes out to you. You're doing what you can, and hopefully one day she will see it differently.


Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of Without Him  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good Day Sophie! This review comes to you on behalf of "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  and the "June 2016 PowerReview Raid" . Hope my comments are welcomed.


*Thumbsup* I like that you began each stanza with something your mother said.

I am not sure which is harder- you losing your father or watching your mother go through it. It is not easy to deal with either way. Some times it can be difficult to be the bridge that is needed, connecting the two and keeping things stable.

This tugged at my heartstrings.

Beautifully heartbreaking.

Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of Things Drift  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Margaret,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don't mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* Your words paint a quaint and lovely picture of nature. I noticed the hints of alliteration through your piece, which I thought was a nice added touch. The ending of one season, changing and slowly falling into a new season shows a nice transgression.


Dandelion seeds
In a soft afternoon breeze
Drifting along invisible currents of air.
*Up* I love that these lines feel fragile, but carry such beauty.


Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of Last Sigh  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Sanguine,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don't mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* I think that you have done a good job in showing what one's final moments may be like, without being morbid. I never really thought about death from this aspect, only from the aspect of losing someone.

I think you present us with a certain calm and soothing idea of what it may be like once we leave this earth.

Your title suits this piece nicely.


Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of A Single Tear  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Jim,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don't mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* This sad and heartfelt poem reads in a lovely way. I like that it has a fairytale approach, but that it does not have a happy ending, which is usually what is expected from this type of poem.

I like that you show that there's a struggle with her own emotions, yet others were not able to see that because she hid it well. When she was finally able to confide in someone, his actions did not match his words*Frown*


Then to feel another ultimate loss- what a great amount of pain exposed through your piece.


Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of One Last Time  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Amay,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don't mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* I think this is precious and adorable. I think children think that they're going to miss out on something so they tend to try and prolong sleep. If they weren't clever and sweet, I may find they're ploys annoying, but it melts my heart instead*Smile*


Very sweet moments captured, especially the final lines. Hearing that makes it all worthwhile!


Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of Not sure yet...  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Rae,

Welcome to Writing.Com! This review comes to you on behalf of "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  and "Over the Rainbow POWER Raid!" . Your brief description mentions that you're looking for some thoughts and advice, so I hope my comments are welcomed.

*Thumbsup* I love that you used vivid imagery to help bring your piece to life. I read your poem quite a few times, to see what thoughts came to mind about a title; it's far too pretty of a piece to go unnamed.

*BurstG* Title Ideas

Aurora
Northern Lights
Southern Lights
Borealis
Guiding Lights

*BurstG* Stanza 1
contrasting with the water, it practically begs,

Good use of personification! I like that you give the water an action here, which gave it more of a connection with me. I like your choice to use "beg" because it made me feel the yearn.


*BurstG* Stanza 2
Overlooking the lights longings
the darkest shade comes alive

When I first read this, the word "overlook" made me think of failing to notice rather than having a view of this from a high point. Maybe consider Looking over, instead of overlooking- or another idea would be to make it dance:
*Idea* Dancing over, Waltzing upon

*BurstG* Stanza 3

But the gleam knows better,
the only thing that will be seen is the
unique patters creating a beautiful wake-
not the rough waters that take everything under.

I tried to hone in on this stanza particularly because this is where you stated that you wanted help, and because it's my favorite one from the poem. An idea that came to mind was to play with water more in this stanza since the element already exists.

The line "unique patters creating a beautiful wake" is lovely and it feels like looking through a kaleidoscope! However, I am wondering if the word "patterns" would work better than patter there. The stanza mainly discusses something seen, and patter is a light tapping sound. It makes more sense to use patterns in that line simply due to the context.

*Idea* unique patterns creating a beautiful wake-
not the turbulent waters that drown everything.

~ Or ~

*Idea* unique patterns creating a beautiful wake-
not the turbulent waters, pushing everything into the undertow.

*BurstG* Stanza 4

Nor will they notice the warmth,
eliminating from the bright aurora
that brings everything to life around them.
The phrase "eliminating from the bright aurora" conflicts with what I think you're trying to say. It comes across as trying to get rid of the light, but I think your intention is to say that the warmth is coming from it.

*Idea* Nor will they notice the warmth,
radiating from the bright aurora


These are just some ideas. I really think you have a nice way of showing certain things in this poem, and I appreciate that you're not afraid to take a chance with imagery and metaphors.

Keep Writing!
~ Lexi

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Review of Tear Soup  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Snow,

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*Thumbsup* I think it is a wonderful idea to build a recipe of memories for your mother. These are things that pinpoint her and use memories as a trigger to have your remember her. I love that through your poem, we get to know a little bit about someone who you loved dearly.

Your title choice suits the topic quite nicely.



Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of Silent Seduction  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello WW,

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*Thumbsup* You present the reader with a vivid and steamy situation and scene. Your piece feels like a daydream coming off the page.

Splendid smile, silver
Tantalizing thoughts titillate
*Burstv* Nice use of alliteration and imagery!


Your title did its job and pulled me into the piece. I really liked the reference to the "blush" in the first stanza. I think it keeps the piece modest while still keeping it sexy.


Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there and Welcome to Writing.Com!

I came across your poem in "Review Me List for WDC Power -ON HIATUS" , so I thought I'd give to a g*Angelic*


*Thumbsup* You have certainly packed this poem with imagery! I love the details and your ability to show me the scenes. I really think you showed the death of one season and the birth of another season quite nicely. The rhyme and rhythm were consistent until the end, and then I noticed there was a huge change. I actually think works here though. Perhaps, it is because it feels like a prelude to the ending.

Your title interests me because I tend to like long or strange titles, but something is throwing me slightly off. Maybe consider adding a comma or a preposition? Throwing out a few ideas:

Soft Whispers, Jack's Last Frigid Gasp
Soft Whispers of Jack's Last Frigid Gasp
Soft Whispers in Jack's Last Frigid Gasp



A few quick things I noticed...


Shake then yawn, and turnabout, sniff an snort, it's hairy snout.
*Notew* its hairy snout- because you don't mean "it is hairy snout."

Pleased to find, seasons end, now it's feet, it must attend.
*Notew* its feet

First to rub, and scratch it's back, then peel some wood, and hear it crack.
*Notew* its back

Gathers all abundant grace, and walk around, to mark it's place.
*Notew* its place

Strolls it's range, along it's way, for either peace, or war,
*Notew* its range along its way

Life it knows, all depends, what's placed within it's jowl
*Notew* its jowl


I really do think you paint nature on canvas in a lovely way here. Good Luck in the contest and keep writing!


~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Dave,

*Thumbsup* Heartbreaking. Love was only starting for them, and taken away all too soon. I think that you show a vulnerability in this, and perhaps the naivety that comes along with being young and in love. We can never truly prepare ourselves for what happens in the future.

I volunteer at the AL and there are Vets that come to us that do not have a home or money. When someone fights for us and defends us, how can they not be taken care of once they are back? It's sad.

cold canister of bad news
Nice effect you used in that line, it reminded me of the words inside an iced canister.

This tugged my heartstrings.


Thank you for entering Round 53 of "Invalid Item" and best of luck to you. Hope to see you enter the next round!

~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Irregular Onion,


*Thumbsup* I like that the title prompt inspired you to write something personal. You show how things were when they were young in years, the progression to how things are in later years, and what truly matters in those years. I also think that the moments you chose to include in the poem were done in an unique way, which I appreciate.

Sometimes I get an urge, a longing for an Us:
Official declaration to the world of our association,
Proof, documentation of love and happiness –

*Up* I think it's only human to have or crave that, even if it is only a moment.

In the end, it's the moments you're both sitting side-by-side that make you the happiest. Your poem ultimately shows what happiness is, but it is not overdone. It's the imperfections and realness of one another that shines here.


Thank you for entering Round 53 of "Invalid Item" and best of luck to you. Hope to see you enter the next round!

~ Lexi
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Review of This Could Be Us  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
QPdoll,

First, let me say that I am happy that you tried your hand at poetry, and in all the places you could have done it- you chose LPC*Smile*

*Thumbsup* I like that you show all these things that they could be, but in the end you talked about how things are in reality. It almost feels like someone is fantasizing about having these things, and reminding their partner about what they could, or should have.

I hope you enjoyed writing outside your norm, and I encourage you to keep it up!

Thank you for entering Round 53 of "Invalid Item" and best of luck to you. Hope to see you enter the next round!

~ Lexi
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Review of The Sun Won't Set  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Shepard,

I think that loss is a good subject to choose for this particular title. As I read your poem, I felt you showed the death of a love that once was, and the feelings of being incomplete without them.

I hope you don't mind that I have one small suggestion for you.
of dry deserted vacant empty soul
*Idea* since vacant is another word for empty, perhaps consider using another adjective there. Maybe: of dry deserted vacant forsaken soul.


Thank you for entering Round 53 of "Invalid Item" and best of luck to you. Hope to see you enter the next round!

~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Megan,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary!

I like that there is a constant throughout the piece, and that is her love of music and the piano. I think it was an interesting idea to show her life in the past and then in the present. Though she was not bitter or mean in the first marriage, I think you show how enriched her life became when she met someone she adored.


Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of Water  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Ryan,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary!

*Thumbsup* This prose is a beautifully written and I think it carries a lot of depth behind its meaning. It certainly can be taken in the literal sense, but it feels like this could be about someone caught in a horrible place, fighting for survival. Anything they say or do drags them down further and there aren't any safety nets.

You final lines are powerful.

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of All That I See  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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PurpleInfinity,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary!

This is a romantic notion; when we are falling in love with someone they often consume our every thought. As time passes, we hope that those feeling remain. I think you have done a nice job in showing what this person means to you and, the devotion you have toward them.

Also, it feels like this may be about two people who are separated by distance, but that may be coming to an end. Perhaps, they finally get to be together.

Write On,
~ Lexi
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Review of This, For You  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Jace,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary!

This is a beautiful gift to give someone for their special day. I love the use of the line, This, for you because these are promises that should only be for the person we choose as our life-long partner.

It would be lovely to hear with music!

*Idea* I don't know if you need a professional membership in order to post in "Poetry Readings" , but it may be something to consider.

Just a thought*Bigsmile*

Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Harry,

I got a kick out of this! I am exactly the same way. I have a tendency to not be able to sit still when I notice something like that. I sometimes have guests over and feel the need to sweep or wipe something that is smudged.


It drives people crazy, and then I am wondering why it doesn't bother them too!

Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Harry,

Happy Writing Anniversary! I like that you've chosen to write about being alone versus being lonely. Being alone, allows you time to do the things that maybe your significant other may not wish to take part in, but there is no enjoyment in being lonely. I think you do a wonderful job in showing the difference between the two.

Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of The Sun Won't Set  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.0)
Roz Lynn,

*Thumbsup* I love that your piece focuses on being in a place where positive forces surround you! It's often difficult to be in that place when things let you down.

I think you send a wonderful message in this to people who may feel like things will never get better.


Thank you for entering Round 53 of "Invalid Item" and best of luck to you. Hope to see you enter the next round!

~ Lexi
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