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Poetry is my first love.
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relationship, romance, drama, and things which break the heart
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Review of November  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Shelly,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don't mind my comments.

When I saw the dates, it really hit close to home for me. My mother was born on July 1, 1947 and passed away in 1998. I know how difficult it can be when someone you love leaves. There's an emptiness that happens that cannot be filled, and the term "missing someone" just doesn't seem like enough to explain how we really feel. It almost seems like too weak of a term to use. However, that is when a poem forms and it is said with great beauty and grace, as yours is here.

*Thumbsup* Your opening stanza is filled with lovely images, but also shows sorrow and loss. The cold, grey sky show me sorrow, and the trees casting leaves asunder show me loss.

When my soul is softly weeping,
You will come, and I'll be sleeping,
*Burstgr* I love these lines! I love the idea that she is watching over you while you sleep and offering comfort.

In those times that you are near me;
I will speak, and you can hear me.
*Burstgr* I can only pray that this would be true! How wonderful would it be if they could still hear us when we called out to them? My heart sunk a bit from your final line. Even if it's only in a dream, at least it is something.

There will always be something that strikes a chord, these little reminders that will give us memories of moments brought back to life.

Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of Fire  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Sarah,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary. Hope my comments are welcomed.

*Thumbsup* Powerful and impactful poem! I really appreciate the the way you show the terror, what causes the terror, and the affect it has on you and your brother.

*Burstgr* Fire is a wonderful way to represent the anger building. I think that statement also show we tend to learn what we live; it does not necessarily mean as adults we will continue the cycle. However, if we are taught certain ways there is always a chance that we will follow on their footsteps.

*Thumbsup* Strong ending line which pulled at my heart. This is a tough pill tp swallow, but truly an impressive piece.

Write on!
Lexi
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Review of Serial Killer  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Ajay,

I came across your request on "Review Me List for WDC Power -ON HIATUS" . I hope you don't mind my comments and suggestions.

*Thumbsup* I find your topic intriguing and was curious about where you were going to take this. I think that you managed to to a good job in describing certain things to the reader through your details. I can see the terror and dripping blood.


In your brief description, you say girl fried

*Burstgr* I think you meant girlfriend

face turn devilish and focussed

*Burstgr* focused

its a list of my boy friends names

*Burstgr* it's a list of my boyfriend's names

*Idea* After almost every line you use ..., but I think it's really not needed. May I suggest not using them, or at least omitting most of them. Usually, they are used as an idea so the reader knows that there's more to follow, or to be continued. It just seems slightly odd using them so frequently.

*Idea* It kind of resembles the shape of a poem, but it reads more like a story. I wondered which you were aiming for while reading it. In order to lessen confusion, maybe consider it not having the line breaks like you have here if it is a story. In order to do that though, the sentences would need a bit more polished. I won't go through it line by line, but I will offer one example listed below.

And there i lay...
With a piece of shattered mirror in my stomach...
Her hands red with blood...
And eyes as devilish as it could be.....

*Idea* There I lay, with a piece of shattered mirror in my stomach. Her hands red with blood, and eyes as devilish as could be.

*Thumbsup* Whether it is a poem, or a short I feel like the descriptions you give present a chilling picture. I think you have a start of something good.

*Idea* I do think if it is a story, develop your characters a bit more so that we may connect and understand them better. When you do this, readers are able to build a relationship with the characters, whether it be by love or hate. We will want to know what caused this to go sour, and why things took a turn toward the darkness for them.

*Idea* I noticed that you're showing it in different tenses by using rewind-now-flashback. Possibly consider showing a flashback where we can see what it was like before it took a turn, and a flashback as to what caused the turn.

get rid off me
*Burstgr* get rid of

*Thumbsup* There is a sinister trait which the main character carries that adds to this piece. In the end, when she laughs it off, it's a bit unpleasant and creepy!

These are just my thoughts and suggestions. I look forward to more, should you choose to make changes or expand on it a bit.

Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Jeannie,

*Thumbsup* I know that you love writing, but I also know how difficult it can be to write a letter to someone you don't know. It's sometimes hard to know what to say to someone, especially if they are in circumstances such as this. I think you did a lovely job here.

*Burstgr* I think that you show them a serene place by describing what home is to you and the beautiful surroundings.

*Burstv* I work closely with soldiers, and I feel like you gave them a sense of home in this. It's reaching out to them while showing gratitude. You give a piece of normalcy, which is something they definitely need.

*Note* I know this was written for a contest. However, my hope is that letters, such as this were sent out to soldiers while they are cut off from the world they know. I believe these letters would comfort them and allow them to have a little slice of home.

Congrats on the well deserved award!

Write on,

~ Lexi
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Review of Lesson One - DT  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Jeannie,

You are on "Invalid Item"  this month so I am trying to shower a few reviews your way!

I think commas are important too. I am not perfect with all the rules, but I do find that thoughts are translated clearer when they are used properly.

Rachael Ray finds inspiration in cooking her family and her dog
*Thumbsup* Great example to show why commas are important! It sounds like she finds inspiration is actually cooking her family and dog, which was totally not the intent of the writer. As a fan, I sincerely hope not*Laugh*

You have provided a good lesson here!

Write On!
~ Lexi

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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Jeannie,

You are on the "Invalid Item"  this month, so I thought I would drop by. I chose to take a look at this peice because from what I can tell by your involvement in "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" , you are a fan of reviewing and helping others. I love that you started this by remembering when and why you first began reviewing, and showed the personal growth by sharing what you've gained by this experience.

*Thumbsup* You included many things about reviews that I always find insightful:

*BurstGR* Why you review
*BurstGR* What you look for when reviewing
*BurstGR* Tips that may improve my own reviews
*Burstgr* What you feel like you accomplish by reviewing

*Notew* The only suggestion I have for you, and I hope you don't mind it:
*Idea* Link the groups (Showering Acts of Joy, I.N.K.E.D) and usernames (Pat/Riot) on here. You talk about them in a way that would make others interested, and if you make them an accessible link, other readers can find them easily. If you did not wish to do it within the story, then maybe you could list them at the end.

I can tell just from reading this, and seeing you across the Site that you are a big contributor to the site and its members. Thanks for all you do, Jeannie!

Review and Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of Jeffrey's Gift  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Pensive,

*Thumbsup* It's always amazing to me how big a tiny child's heart can be. I often wonder where that trait goes as some people get older (not all people). The mere thought that a child can be capable of that much love, and some times more than adults is heartwarming. I think this is a beautiful story, and we can all learn something important from Jeffrey's responses and actions.

This tugged at my heartstrings, and all I wanted to do was hug Jeffrey. Thank you for sharing something very personal, but touching.


Write on!

~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Davy,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don't mind my comments.

As an avid Walt Whitman fan, I think that this is a beautifully written piece. I love the imagery and details given about nature. It actually reads like a painting to me.

*Thumbsup* I thought that the line traced its frail veins with my fingertip was a nice touch; it gives me a sense of being alone in nature, but still connecting to it.

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Cynaemon,

Hope you don't mind my comments.

Smoke floats to heaven
Choking the gods,

*Bulletg* These are vivid lines packing a powerful statement. It is our behaviors and actions that cause the lovely parts of this world to fade.

I am the wind sighing
through leafy treetops
where my children sing,

*Bulletg* These are glorious lines that show the life there was.I love the hope sensed through them. This is the way it is remembered, but also the way it should be.

I am the river running
through forgotten canyons
where my ancient ancestors dwelled,

*Bulletg* I think you have captured what we face in days to come if the beauty if this world ceases to exist. If everyone did their part, we may not see that happen.

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Zeke,

This is a lovely poem! It can often be difficult to write about a loved one, searching for the right words and hoping that they are profound enough to let them see how much they mean to us. I love that you show her beauty from within; those are the things that truly matter. I know that this had to mean a lot to Christine. Wonderfully written.

Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of Thoughts of You  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Jill,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don’t mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* When we care for someone or love someone, thoughts creep into our minds even when we were not intending to think of them. Some things are just reminders, even if it’s subconscious, and we can’t seem to help ourselves. Your poem shows that struggle.

Write On!
~ Lexi


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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Danny,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don’t mind my comments and/or suggestions.

*Thumbsup* As writers, I think it is important to try different forms of poetry, which can be difficult to master. I like that your words contain some imagery and allow the reader to envision.

*Notev* Normally, haikus are inspired by nature themes, so this is is a bit of a non-traditional haiku, with hints leaning toward a senryu. In haikus, there are generally a total of 17 syllables shared between three lines, arranged in a pattern of 5-7-5. Your second line only has a syllable count of 6, so you may wish to alter that line a bit.

All in all, I think you have a nice first attempt!

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Sunflower,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don't mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* I think we many of us have been here a time or two. It's frustrating when someone promises one thing, and then claims to not remember. If it's an imporant decision, then it should be considered between the couple, not soley based on the judgement of one- even if they're intentions are good. Not including one another and discussing it can make each other feel like their thoughts and feelings don't matter. Your poem does a good job in showing these things.

Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

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Victoria,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don’t mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* This is cute! My friend's father works at our local grocery store, and this makes me think of him! It can never just be a five minute conversation though; he needs to walk me down every isle and talk about the things I ought to try, and the things I shouldn't. It makes me laugh a bit; I tell him all the time they need to use him for the store's commercials since he is super passionate about the products. I know he is craving company and just wants to talk to someone, so I feel good after our conversations and occasionally have him over for dinner.


Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

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Sharon,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don’t mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* Great title and strong ending stanza! I love that the prompt was "silver bracelets" and though it is written traditionally, the topic is not. Very original and creative idea that carries a meaningful message and consequences.

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Lady Bee,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don’t mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* This shows the admiration and love you carry for your father. I love the title you chose to represent memories of your father and what he meant to you. It gives me a nostalgic feeling.

Your children may not have gotten to know him physically, but it sounds like you keep him alive through your stories.


I am truly sorry for your loss and hope that the memories coat any remaining pain.

Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Lady Bee,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don’t mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* This is a lovely tribute to the Site and its Creators. When we don't have the proper outlets to allow our inspirations out it can make life miserable. I think that Writing.Com has become a safe haven for many of its Members, and allowed us to share things we probably wouldn't have if it weren't for the Site and its welcoming Members.

I am happy you found a second home here, and hope you continue to share your writings and expressions.

Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of Praise the Writer  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Gaby,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don't mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* This is comical! In the beginning, you show an excitement of someone wanting help, but then as soon as you offer critique the writer gets a bit defensive. As the writer gets defensive, the reviewer's opinion gets stronger. This gave me quite the chuckle.

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)

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CountryMom,

Happy Writing.com Anniversary! Hope you don't mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* This is an adorable poem. This reminds me a lot of Easter memories and the battle of my sister and I trying to win the prizes by finding the most eggs. Great idea to alternate the colors with the stanza; it makes the poem feel festive.
Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of TEARS COME SOFTLY  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)

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CountryMom,

Happy Writing.com Anniversary! Hope you don't mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* The thought of this is heartbreaking, but I think that your message shines through. Life is too short to worry about the small things, and we should not take anything or anyone for granted.

I am sorry if this is a true account, but thank you for sharing it with us. May she be smiling down upon you.

Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of THE RETREAT  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)

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CountryMom,

Happy Writing.com Anniversary! Hope you don't mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* You described what many of us desire when it comes to relief from everyday life! It's a shame that it was only a dream. I hope that this vacation comes true for you one day.

Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of The Birdwatcher  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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CountryMom,

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don’t mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* Great title for the topic. This is an adorable poem that brouhgt a smile to my face. Your description allowed me to see Jewel in action.

Your poem reads smoothly within its rhyme and tempo. Nice work!

Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of The Seasons  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dandelion Man,

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Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope you don’t mind my comments.

*Thumbsup* The death of a relationship and questioning its return is done nicely in this poem by relating to the seasons. I like that though the poem doesn't necessarily have a happy ending, yet you still managed to show glimpses of when the relationship was growing and golden.


Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of The Gray One  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Jen,

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Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope my comments and suggestions are welcomed.

*Thumbsup* I think that the term "gray" is used nicely here. It kind of gives me a sense of someone who is in a neutral place in their thinking, almost like they can identify with both sides. Your poem shows that we live what we learn, whether it be right or wrong.

*Note2* One thing I noticed:
He only knows te way he lived.
*Bulletg*He only knows the

Write On!
~ Lexi
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Review of Never the Same  
Review by Lexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Jen, I decided to come back!

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! Hope my comments and suggestions are welcomed.

*Thumbsup* I noticed that this is from quite a few years ago. I think it’s important to hold onto pieces from your past and reflect on them later on in life. It helps us grow. I think you did a great job in showing how someone can remain broken, even after they have tried to pick up the pieces and started a new relationship.

When we feel as strongly as you mention in the poem, it is often difficult to give ourselves fully to someone new. It is strange how someone can complete us, especially if before you met them you did not feel incomplete. Your poem shows me the love and need for that someone special to be in your life and how life is not the same once they are gone.

*Note2* A few things I noticed:
You reasons were justified
*Bulletg* Your reasons
The feelings I have are to strong to deny
*Bulletg* too strong

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~ Lexi
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