Extremely succinct view/narration from a person "growing up". Simple as the "story" goes, it tells the push & pulls of different generations, those events we can control/influence and those beyond and inevitable. At the crux, Thanksgiving is just an event/occasion to meet up as a "family".
I like the realistic or matter of fact conclusion, as much as you(character)realise and "mature" there is still the need "living them" (if I may quote from the story)
As a story (purely a perspective) - thats the view and understanding. However if its a true story - the mother and child relationship is worth much more attention as we struggle in today's pace of live.. if I may quote) "too soon we are all gone" despite what mom says.
Easy elegant glimps of a "lovely face" - life lived, its only when one pause and contemplate the "story unfold"- meaning emerges!
Enjoyed the simple reading, in todays fast-food era, thats how the poem caught my attention in the first place. Time is indeed swift, and reading this poem is a trickled - but covering a life-history.
Just thought the stage of passage is incomplete? as in the story is to be continue. Anyway purely my feel after reading. This could be your intention..
Very imaginative and clever play of the magical wand ebbs and flows
I like the outside looking in and thus prescription, thus the start on "bad news" followed bu "good news" unlike the conventional wisdom of telling the good followed by the bad to soften the blows so to speak.
Perhaps when you do have the inspiration you can make the poem more insightful how not to be bland and dull besides love that is, (just a thought)
Very lively entrance to grab ones attention leading to the pushs & pulls of daily grinds. This is where your skillful interplay of rhythms and wide spectra of word innuendos makes it a very nice poem to read
I like your challenge and enticement messages to draw out your friend to see/accept life for what it is and the very clear message to take decide and take charge.
Just perhaps the final stanza reference to have faith in "me" come across a little " .. weak..." but then somewhere your message " spritually numb" ..
The choice of words in the poem certainly reflects the the frame of enjoyment and as an outlet of emotions
I like the deliberate plays of darkness/terror, tears/pain and eyes/heart. The little ones references as a prelude to encompass the loving theme finale just about sums up the "free flow - emotional writing"
Just my very personal opinion(read your Bio), this writing is very left brain, for writing to appeal to broader audiences. But then this particular poem if just for "enjoyment & emotional vent" it has done that!
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