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Review of Baby  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with Newbie Help And Support Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Robin you write with purpose and with a message. It is life right on, full of questions and repletion. It is a very good poem and I enjoyed reading it. Thank you so very much for sharing.

I have no suggestions for improving this.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I think this would make a GREAT story for little ones who are meeting new fears and challenges every day. It is well written, pleasant, and entertaining. Initially, I thought by the title, it had something to do with the fear of flying (I am scared to death of flying, but fly any way). Then I thought of flight from fear, so you can imagine my delight when I realized that it was neither, and had to do with an insect overcoming the fear of flying, the light and the perils of flying to collect nectar.

Thank you for sharing.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of Feelings  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Your love flow through your words. I am always interested in reading poems, items or articles that have the same or similar title to a piece I've written. I love your treatment of and how the last word from each line began the next line. That was creative and good. I would not change anything with this one.

Thank you for sharing.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of The Bike Ride  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I actually enjoyed this story. It was long, but it had some twists and turns that kept me going. I was surprised at the ending and at the treatment of two of the characters in the story. Good job.

Under separate cover, I sent you an email with lots of suggested changes. Hope they are helpful. Thanks for sharing

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of Regrets  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Nice treatment of what seemed like a very critical situation that involved two but one actually got away. Not sure I connected the title with the piece you wrote. Maybe it is not supposed to be. The writing is tight and good, and I enjoyed the read.

Thank you for sharing.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of Gone  
Review by G. B. Williams
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Gone! She's gone. Nice title, and great writing. I like the poem and the way you took time to connect your feelings with the words. The entire house was talking, the kettle, windows, the paint, the floors because your love had walked out the door. Nothing seems to ever take the place of true love, and you can't drown it in tears or liquor.

I have no suggestions for changing or improving your poems. I LOVED IT!

Write on. WRITE ON!
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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with Let's help each other grow...  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I can relate to your piece. For four years, I ran a shelter where women came in to get away from abusive relationships, and most just want to be left alone. Many, just like you, found themselves, and their calling while living in the shelter. Thank you very much for sharing this piece. It reminded me of the need that still exist for women who are in abusive relationships and their need to go to a nurturing place that will allow them to heal at their own pace. Did your story move me, yes.

Some suggestions: Ecclesiastes 11 King James Version (KJV) Cast they (thy) bread upon the waters: for thou shalt find it after many days.; ...in the kitchen, I (forgot) my own fears and doubts; ...pitcher of cold cool (kool)- aid for them; ...waiting for God to give (provide) an opportunity to leave. ...one of the other ladies(') three-year-old came into the ... What if the storm your (you are or you're) weathering isn't really about you?

These are suggestions. It is your story, and I thank you for sharing it with me.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of Art  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Momo-Chan, I like your subject matter. When I chose your piece, I though it would be about art. Then I read it, and it is about art, but the art of life and living, and I thought that a good twist and use of the word. Life is a canvass, and we paint on it daily. Each of us happen to be our own best or worse artist, and the colors are the choices we make it life. I agree that we all are purpose driven whether we know it or not.

What I liked most was the subject matter that you wrote about. I also like the fact that it was short, and made the point that life is to be lived, and that there is struggle.

One suggestion: I would rewrite this sentence "I have faith in everyone that we will all be able to get stronger and wiser so we can all finally reach the happiness we've been yearning for for so long." I have faith in everyone. Over time, we will all become stronger and wiser, and we will reach the happiness for which we have been yearning for so long." NOTE: It is a suggestion, not a requirement.

Thank you so much for sharing. Write on WRITE ON!


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Review of Left or Right  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
GREAT story! I have been at that crossroad a few times. Occasionally, I have made the decision to turn right, and it has not always been a bad decision. A little scary, but not bad. I have also had that other feeling of just wanting to get in my car and just driving off into the sunset without every looking back. I haven't done that yet, but it has gotten to be a more frequent thought. Is there a second chapter to this already?

I did not find many suggestions, but there is one that needs to be made in the following sentence: ...most of the view was blanched (blanked) out by the light from the city.

Thank you for sharing your writing with me.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I am not a romance novel or story reader, but this was good! It was well thought out, and it grabbed and held my attention from beginning to end. The ending was perfect, it was not the usual, and it was totally unexpected. It felt true. I actually related to the lat part, and the theme throughout the story. I have been and continue to be in love with my first love although we have been divorced for more than 35 years. I have had other male companions in between and actully got engaged to one. This year, I met an older gentleman (he is 13 years older than me) and we are really hitting it off. He is a different kind of love, and he makes me feel comfortable. Thank you for the validation through your words.

Few suggetions (NOTE: I am not a grammarian), but thought the following changes might enhance the story. My suggestions are in parenthesis.

This is the way one becomes a(n) ER doc

It was a three(-)acre wooded lot half a mile from the Maine coastline.

he is here somewhere (somewhere?)

Thank you for sharing.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I actually enjoy reading old pieces, and encourage others to read some of my older pieces. For me it is a way to see the author's growth over time. I also review (actually re-read) pieces that I reviewed and rated earlier as I learn and progress through this site. I find that helpful as well. Finally, to have someone review and older piece of my and give me solid/honest feedback helps me to understand what is needed to make the piece better.

Write on. WRITE ON!
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Review of One Night  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Short, sweet, to the point, and very vivid all at once. I thought the poem was well written and I enjoyed it. The cadence was very nice and the rhyme was easy and good. It brings the reader in immediately, and keeps the readers attention. I like it very much and would not make any changes.

Thank you for sharing.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
There is power in the poem! I like it. It seems to speak of getting control over one self, while allowing others to make their own choices. The methphor seems to come from an army perspective with the foxhole, i.e., master your own foxhole before you try to take on someone else's, with regard to life and life situations.

Not being a grammarian or a serious writer (I dabble), one suggestion would be to look at this sentence and maybe rewrite it:

"All your air are belong to me.”" Did you mean All you are belongs to me or all your air belongs to me. Wasn't sure.

Thanks for sharing.


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Review of My Everything  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with Let's help each other grow...  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for sharing your very well written and very tasteful poem. It is written by a lover who is heads over heels in love with a person that seems to make them whole! The poem is beautiful

The rhyme is good. The sentences are clear, and the relation of each come together.

Write on. WRITE ON!


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Review of Writing.Com 101  
Review by G. B. Williams
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was VERY VERY helpful. Being a visual kind of person, I was able to see you do it and like when I drive, if I can see where I am going, I can always go back. Seeing the video demonstration made it possible for me to do the linking with confidence. You won't believe how many times I have wanted to post something and did not because I could not understand exactly how {b:whatever} worked. Now, I've got it. Sisco helped me post an item a few days ago in one of the contest, and I won third place. Without his help, I would have once again missed the opportunity because I had NOT found this item.

Thanks.
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Review of Writing.Com 101  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Having read this at least five times in the past few days, I am a lot better at giving ratings, I believe, but because of your recommended readings, I have found and learned something that I could not fathom for a YEAR! How to link and post my works in different places, especially contests. Thank you.

Your instructions are straight forward, easily read and understood. Your advise on reviewing is helpful, and informative about the site itself. I will probably visit it a few more times as I seek to improve my writing and reviewing skills, but also to learn more about writing.com.

Thank you.
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Review of I Need to Bathe  
Review by G. B. Williams
Rated: E | (2.5)
Okay, this one offered a little humor. Didn't quite connect with the writer on this one, but could see that as an answer between two lovers or a friend. Me, I think I would have offered him the whipped cream and chocolate and sent him off to bed! Thanks for the laugh this morning.

I am eventually going to try my hand at writing humor. So far, it seems that I write more from emotions and feelings, but then those are the kinds of poems I often read. Thanks for the deviation.

Enjoy your right to write!
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Review of The mirror image.  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a very well written poem that has cadence and it rhymes. I liked it very much. It also has some dark under tones that raises questions in my mind about you the writer and what you are really saying. My first read was quick. My second read was, what is she not saying, and why? It raised my level of thought about teens and what they are doing and seeing in themselves and others. You, my dear is looking inward very deeply, and I am not sure what you are seeing.

I would not change a word in your poem, and it reads well.

Write on. Write on!
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Review of The rope  
Review by G. B. Williams
Rated: E | (3.5)
I have frequently used your intro in workshops, Bible study, and on other occasions to teach people about faith. Had the climber had faith when the voice asked him to cut the rope he would have been saved by his "own" hands. He was less than a foot from the ground. Instead, he clung on to what appeared to be a safe condition because it saved him from his own mind of a sure death during his fall. I believe that we often do that in life, and your expounding on it in your writing gave me another way of looking at the same situation from another ones point of view.

Suggestions for improving your written piece:

I would rewrite it in some areas for clarification.

"Somehow on our way down, if we find (are hanging on to) a rope than (that) can save the little more (a little of what is) left of us, we do (should) not hesitate in (to) grabbing (grab) it and (but be willing to let go, if help is offered and we trust the help) never letting go (never letting go should not be an option because then how do we grow)."

"We are too reckless (or too frightened or to full of pride) to see anything beyond saving ourselves from the total destruction because we believe there will be no way back for us to be able to live again."

"Sometimes, it’s better to fall (all the way down and cut the rope so that we can start over again) and start again than to be left hung (dangling and die) on a silver thread by life which seems so precious to let go of but is the only obstacle between you and your happiness. And if you ask me, I believe happiness is the perfect destiny.

Just my thoughts. Thank you so very much for sharing. It is risky put your work out there for others to review, but since being on here, it has improved my faith in my written works and has honestly made my writing better.

Write on. Write on!
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Review of Seeking  
Review by G. B. Williams
Rated: E | (4.5)
Short, sweet, to the point, and quite clear about the emotions that provoked the writing. Rhyming was appropriate and fitted the writer's mood. The poem reminded me of one of my points of a similar title "looking for Love..." I believe that it appropriately says what the writer feels about the lost love.

I can relate! Write on Write.
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Review of Incredible you  
Review by G. B. Williams
Rated: E | (4.0)
"Incredible You" is a very touching poem that expresses the love of a man for a woman on first sight. It takes the reader down the path of their love and their promise of love forever with the thought that he would do it all over again! The poem resonate with first love, but also love for a life time and even after.

I like very much the writing style and the flow of the words in the description of the emotions and feelings around life with and without his the love of his life.

VERY good. Keep on writing.
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Review of Writing.Com 101  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with Let's help each other grow...  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I found this to be very helpful and informative. I did not know what an "ASA" was or why someone would need one. It is logical that many of the same rules would apply to the secondary account. However, I wondered why somene would want to be anonymous? Then I read that they cannon do reviews or rate a work. That made me feel better since I know that the cloak of anonymity allows people to exhibit their worst behavior.

Well written and clear, at least to this reader.
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Review by G. B. Williams
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Thank you for sharing your story. It shows some of the things that women live through, but it also shows the horrible truth about domestic violence. Children seem to always suffer and feel guilty about the brutality that happens in the family.
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Review of Thy Will Be Done  
Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
WOW! I was NOT Prepared for the ending. Interesting concept. Liked how you drew the story out and provided the epilogue. It was a very good read.

I Almost did not complete the read after the opening paragraph and actually skipped some of paragraph two (Went back and read it after reading the epilogue) because of the 'Once" statements.

Thanks for sharing this. Even our creations tend to be more God-fearing than we the creators. We often interfere in things that should be left alone without knowing the damage that we cause and vice versus.
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Review by G. B. Williams
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Guidelines are clear.
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