What an amazing piece. It had me hooked from the first line, down to the last. I can totally feel the emotion of the piece, as well as being able to relate to it. I definitely want to read more.
Such a wonderful read. I respect your motivation as sometimes I find myself trying to find the grace to accept God's will and Glory.
Please, keep up the great work!
This was a very interesting paragraph. Unfortunately it was only a paragraph because my curiosity was growing. An excellent start to something I wouldn't mind reading more of. Again, great piece.
I liked this submission. It was something new, especially the dialogue. It gave the character a brand new personality and not one that follows the stereotypical psycho. Nothing here distracted the reader from the piece which meant it flowed great.
Favorite line: "Both his eyes were bout poppin out his head anyway, i just kinda helped one along."
Wicked sense of humor there, definitely a much earned chuckle. Keep up the great work!
I loved the use of a quarter in this. The first time I read a piece like this, so it's an added bonus. Definitely a great read, I would love to see more of this style of writing.
This was a very good piece. It flowed well and kept me reading up to the last line. The rhyming doesn't feel forced which is a major plus, kept the piece flowing perfectly. Truly a great submission, keep up the writing!
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