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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, W.D.Wilcox , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Something To Remember Me By" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The woman's statement in the first paragraph hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The metaphors and similes in this story are fresh and descriptive. This is my favorite metaphor, her features dragged a tangled net across my heart. I like this metaphor because it reveals the emotions of longing and disappointment.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this description because of the active descriptions.

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Review of The Naughty Gift  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, W.D.Wilcox , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Naughty Gift" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker waking up in a dark, enclosed place. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it was a surprise. I did not expect the speaker to be a puppy.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the speaker.

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Review of Staremaster  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, foxtale , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Staremaster"  because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (November 15, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker walking for exercise. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace while building toward the laughter.

What I Like: My favorite part was the description of the jogger and his accident. I like this part because it made me smile and emphasized the point of jogging being unsafe.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because it made me smile.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, intuey , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "23 Cows Are Missing"  because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (November 15, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first stanza established the form, speaker, mood, and plot of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words complimented each other, while the rhythm move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I Like: The last stanza is my favorite. I like the last stanza because it climaxed the poem's plot and made me smile.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing poem because it made me smile.

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Review of Barely Breathing  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi, Scarlett , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Barely Breathing"  because I discovered it in "Poetry Newsletter (November 15, 2023)" .

First Thoughts: The first stanza of this poem establishes the speaker, mood, theme, and plot. The rhythm moved the narrative and the emotions of love and hope forward at a good pace.

What I Like: The list stanza is my favorite because it climaxed the poem's plot with joy. I also liked the repetition of barely breathing throughout the poem because it gave the poem unity.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the description comparing the twins birth to how well they had thrived.

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Review of And so it goes  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, Jacky , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "And so it goes"  because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page. Congratulations on winning the contest.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Annie surrounded by parts and paper. The interaction and conversation between the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while revealing the couples relationship.

What I Like: My favorite part of this story is the climax, because it revealed how much Sam love Annie.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, JCosmos , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Slime Patrol to the Dish room, Please"  because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp" . Congratulations on winning the contest.

First Thoughts: This free verse poem follows the contest prompt and looks good on the page. The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and plot of the poem. The rhythm moves the plot forward at a good pace.

What I Like: The repetition of slime gives the poem unity, while keeping the reader focused on the movement of the plot.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way the slime is described.

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Review of Rolls n Rounds  
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Hi, Youdii Emmanuel I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Rolls n Rounds " , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker clinging closer to Bob, because it revealed how much she cared for him. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: In several lines the speaker refers to her as if she is talking about another woman. However, some of the lines suggest Bob is going to marry the speaker. Does her refer to another woman that Bob is in love with?

I like: The speaker appears to be a intriguing and sympathetic character. She needs little more description.

Final thoughts: This romantic story has a great deal of potential. Please let me know when you have more chapters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, TheactualTreasure , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Power of Student Voice" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Mr. Henderson's reputation for off-topic rants.

Suggestions: The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: Alex is an intriguing, sympathetic, and motivated individual. I also like the way Mr. Henderson changed his teaching methods in this story.

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I enjoyed reading this story because of Alex's approach to learning.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, RadioShea , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Baseball Fields Forever" , because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (November 8, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, plot, mood, speaker, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite. I like this stanza because it climaxed the poem's plot and made me smile.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it showed the young folks having fun.

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Review of Midnight Moon  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, StaiNed-House Targaryen , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Midnight Moon" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The poem follows the stated form and looks good on the page.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The reason I like this phone is that it is easy to understand and good for short descriptions.

Final thoughts: I am giving this wonderful poem a 5.0 because of the beautiful and thought-provoking description of the moon.

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Review of The Fourth  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Fourth" , because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Impression: The question in the first paragraph hooked me. The conversation between the mother and daughter moved the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspens.e

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it was a happy ending.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the mother's explanation about the fireworks.

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Review of A CRUELTY OF WAR  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, dragonwoman , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A CRUELTY OF WAR" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Sara's statement. In the first half of the story, the conversation between Sara and Johnny move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

In the second half, the descriptions are part of the action and help move the plot forward. The climax emphasized the love Sara felt for Johnny.
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Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Sara and Johnny are intriguing and sympathetic characters. Sara was my favorite because she gave her life for her beloved.

Final thoughts: This story emphasizes the title and gives the reader something to think about concerning war.

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Review of Rescue  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Amethyst Angel🌸📝🪽 , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Rescue" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with Emily's sorrows. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Emily is my favorite character. I like Emily because she is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed this story because of the interaction of the character.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Amethyst Angel🌸📝🪽 , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Devil Doesn't Bargain" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker stating that a vampire's life was miserable. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it is a happy ending.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of The Otherworld  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, L.A.Saxe , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Otherworld" , because I discovered it in "Mystery Newsletter (November 8, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the wall ornament. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part is the way the person entered the other world. I like that part because it made me wonder what a person encountered there.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the descriptions.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Pepper , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Escape of Ni-essa" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (November 8, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with someone watching Ni-essa. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The action kept me focused on the movement of the plot and the characters.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Ni-essa.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Sailor M , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A Royal Decision Is Needed" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (November 8, 2023)" 

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with King George's question. The interaction between the king and his counselors moves the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The interaction between the George and his counselors, because it revealed George's personality.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed this story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, intuey , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Freed From My Brick Chamber" , because I discovered it in "Romance/Love Newsletter (November 8, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first stanza hooked me with the first line. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotion of this poem is romantic love.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, Which open the windows of my soul, I like this line because it shows the results of love.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0 because of the way it showed the results of love.

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Review of The Cursed Day  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, brom21 , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Cursed Day" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (November 8, 2023)" 

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Cephas's statement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite sentence, Fear not. For greater is He that is in you than he that is in the world. I like the sentence because it reminds the reader that there is nothing greater then God.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way it demonstrated faith.

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Review of On Naw Ruz  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Kåre Enga in Montana , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "On Naw Ruz " , because I discovered it in "Romance/Love Newsletter (November 8, 2023)" .

First Impression: The main emotions of this poem are hope and renewal. The rhythm flows easily from line to line and encourages the reader to read this poem aloud.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first line is my favorite because it establishes the theme of the poem, which is balance.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the descriptions.

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Review of No Looking Back  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Simply Me , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "No Looking Back" , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The poem follows the free verse form and looks good on the page. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotion of this poem is hope.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, There is never enough
time. I like this line because it is a fact that is often used as an excuse.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because it got me to thinking about time.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, 💙 Carly , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "I Write - Decade Edition - Roaring 20's"  "Gratefully " , because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven "  forum page.

First Impression: The poem follows the form and looks good on the page. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of gratitude forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, Gratitude is a practice of appreciating all that you have. I like this line because it defines gratitude.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because it gave me something to think about concerning gratitude.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, jackiesmuse , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Margie, the Gossip Girl WC 294" , because I discovered it under By Online Authors.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Margie's statement. The conversation between the sisters move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part of this story was the interaction between the sisters. I like that because it revealed their relationship.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters and their relationship.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, the last cicada , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Flash and Prompt Contest Entries"  "220: “Explain it to me again.”" , because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Alexa not having the assignment that was due.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite sentence, "The printer ate my homework," I like this sentence because, I know from experience, that it is possible for a printer to eat an assignment.

Final thoughts: The teachers approach to the missing assignment was creative and something I would expect from a drama instructor.

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