First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the diner. The conversation between the couple moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because of the lesson about choices it taught.
Final thoughts: The first person point of view and voice were good choices for this story, because they reveal the character of the speaker.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker hating his parents for leaving him. The speaker moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like:
Final thoughts: Professor Higgins is an intriguing and sympathetic character. I also like the use of a journal to tell the story.
Write on!
I enjoyed reading this story because of the first person point of view.
First Impression: The quotes from Job, at the beginning of this item, emphasize the concept of assumption. They draw the reader into the piece and help focus the reader's attention on the item's theme.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The author uses personal experience to help the reader comprehend that well all make assumption about God and what the Creator wants us to do.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this item because of the subject.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the man waking up wearing only one sock. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical difficulties.
I like: The first person point of view and voice were a good choice for this story, because they reveal the speaker's emotions.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed this story because of the speaker.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Emily Harris being unmarried. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: Emily, or rather Jessica, is my favorite character. I like her because she is an intriguing and strong woman.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main character.
First Impression: Rosa's statement in the first paragraph hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The climax surprised me without disappointing me.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.
First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the noises of the night battle. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the suspense.
What I liked: The definitions at the beginning of this story helped me understand what was going on in the battle.
Final Thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the active descriptions of the battle.
First Impression: The first stanza of this free verse poem establishes the speaker, theme, and subject. The rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while showing service to community from the speaker's point of view.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last stanza is my favorite. I like this stanza because it ask a question.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of its subject.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Dave watching for illegal aliens. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it was a surprise.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main characters.
First Impression: The poems follow the stated form and looks good on the page. The first poem establishes the theme and mood of the poem. The following poems carry thought in the first poem forward and give the reader something to think about.
dd Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last poem in this group is my favorite. I like this poem because it is inspiring.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this group of poem because of the New Year theme.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Dave not getting a speeding ticket. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: Suzanne is my favorite character. I like her because she is an intriguing and sympathetic individual.
Final thoughts: The climax was a bit of a surprise. However, it was not disappointing.
First Impression: The quote at the beginning of this prose essay hooked me. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while showing how empathy can help a person's faith grow.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is a thought provoking essay encouraging readers to look for empathy in their own live.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay because of the subject.
First Impression: Kate;s request hooked me. The conversation and interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: Jasmine is my favorite character. I like her because she is sympathetic and intriguing.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with The brittle beauty of a bitter frost. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to make this story the beginning of a longer story or novel about the individual that Sophia spoke of.
I like: Reverend Timothy Clarridge is my favorite character. I like him because he is an intriguing and a sympathetic character.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the Reverend Timothy Clarridge.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker being out of the hospital. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while reminding the reader that faith in God is the answer to all of our problems.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is my favorite phrase, inside God's miraculous miracles are taking place, I like this phrase because it reminds us that there are always miracles occurring in our lives, even when we do not see them.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking essay a 5.0 because of its emphasis on faith.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of Sergeant Augustus Trenchfort. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it made me smile.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Sergeant Gus.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker accusing winter of being a malingerer. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while making the reader smile.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The way this letter uses comedy to express many people's feelings of winter.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this letter because of its subject.
First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, speaker, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other. The rhythm moves the narrative and humorous emotions forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last stanza is my favorite. I like this stanza because it made me smile.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the subject.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Ryan trudging through the snow. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is my favorite sentence, God will work in your hearts and draw you together again." I like this sentence because it is true.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the message about God working in our hearts.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with John unwrapping the painting and hanging it up. The interaction and conversation between the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like this part because it showed the love between the father and son.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the way it showed the love of father and son.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker going to a soup kitchen. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The similes used in this story are fresh and descriptive. This is my favorite simile, the hot smell of greasy fried ham hit me like a tsunami.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because it shows the spirit of Christmas.
First Impression: The first paragraph of this essay hooked me with gratitude being the center of positive reinforcement. The narrative moves the message of the importance of gratitude and a thank you note forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The the logical reason the author encourages a thank you note as part of positive reinforcement.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this inspiring essay because of its message.
First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the suggestion from the audience. The description are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: My favorite part of the story is the climax. I like the climax because it was the logical end to the story.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.
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