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Review of Dearest T.  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for Anshruta

Initial hook and Strengths:
When I write about something, I generally write poetry. There are two reasons behind it. I feel that I have said it all, and the second that I do not have to state all the truth, and I can play around with the words to not make it glaringly obvious. Now, as I think of it, I do it because I am afraid to share the feelings with the world. But reading the title and the description of this story, I knew you were not going to hide behind a veil and bare your heart out. I wanted to know how you do it, and that is what brought me in.
I like the purity of the voice in this tale. I can readily relate the suffering of and the pain, but I am also happy that you are actually looking forward to life as it lay beyond those “blue eyes” *Smile* Life is an experience, and I am glad that you managed to take it in that spirit.

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
The last line is very special to me, because in this last line I can see pain, joy, and a hint of longing. I feel bad, but as we said this is life.

Concluding remarks :
Welcome to this site, dear. I can see that you have a way with words. I hope to read more of your works, some time soon. [Are you Indian? Just a guess...Please don't mind.]

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking.
Thanks,
Nishank
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for Angus

Initial hook and Strengths:
I see that you really like horror story writing, as well as writers such as Stephen King. That gave me ample clue of what this story would hold in terms of adventure and thrill and yes, horror. The title sounded like a warning, and it immediately piqued my interest. The description, too, complemented the title perfectly, and I had no reason now, to not read this story.

The first thing which strikes me immediately is the effortless way in which you are able to portray the feel of the forest, and that of the those “flatnlanders” being lost. There is a sense of building despair in the voice which is hard to miss, and it immediately transports me to the forest, along with those poor souls. Thumbs up for that.
Of course, the twist at the end takes the cake. Though I was expecting something, but it happened quite a sudden and caught me by surprise.

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
Well, it’s not a pretty one but the last line is going to stick with me for some while.

Concluding remarks :
I enjoyed this little twist story, and it just gave me a sneak peek into your talent as a writer.
*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking.
Thanks,
Nishank
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Review of Heat Rises  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This is a House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for S Ferguson~ Prepping for Prep

Initial Hook:
The description of the story was my hook into the story. I wanted to know how the lady deals with such a tragedy, and that is what got me to read the story.

Strength and comments:
I think you know it already, but I should point out that you are quite good in capturing the little details. For example, the setting of summer which you created in my mind in the first paragraph was realistic. I had no trouble visualizing it, and as a result setting the context and time of the story for myself.
The other standout point was the undercurrent of emotion in this story. I am not sure how you did it, but the emotion in this story manages to be controlled but always threatening to boil over. This again gives the story a life-like feel. Maybe, it is because you let the reader fill in the gap by adding just the necessary details, at places, for the scene.

Comment:
There is one comment, though, and it is mostly to do with the font used. If you can resize the font to a bit bigger, then it would make the reading a quite bit easy. This story was so good, and that is what kept me going, else I may have dropped off because of the font *Heart*

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
I am going to remember it for the ending, where the lady soaks in the emotion of all what has happened so quickly in so little time. Of course, it was all blur yet emotional, and I could imagine the lady standing their numb, not knowing what course her life would now take.

*Star* Keep writing and keep rocking, dear. More power to you!
Thanks,
Nishank
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Review of All That Matters  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for TigersEye

Initial Hook:
The description told me that it was going to be something personal and emotional. I like to read about such things, because it moves me and gives me a high. That is what we all read for, don’t we! Also, the title syncs it pretty well with the description, and I had clear expectation of what to expect.

Strength:
I think I like the flow of the story, and how you remain true to the soul of it. There were not much distracting elements, so as to speak, and hence, it was easy to flow with the story. It built up quite well and reached a crescendo at the end with the letter. Very well done, I would say.

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
I think the letter takes the cake, here. The way those little things mattered to Mabel, and how much she cherished her companionship with the little girl. Lovely. Also, the way the girl cares for Mabel is something which strikes immediately. It is so very humane, and that is what we should all strive for, isn't it! Lovely.

*Star* Keep writing and keep rocking, dear. More power to you!
Thanks,
Nishank
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Review of Love Storm  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for LilLadyBug

Initial Hook:
The title oozes passion and that is what got me hooked. I decided to have a look on the storm of emotions on display, here. The description of the poem, too, hinted at more of the same. So, I had clear idea of what to expect from this emotional poem. I like setting that context sometimes in my head.

Flow and feel:
I think mostly the flow is good. There is a gradual cascading in the structure which is pleasing to the eyes, as well. I always tend to like the poem with rhyming scheme, and here I can clearly see the rhyming in action.

However, when I read it aloud, I notice a couple of bumps, here and there.Like the line starting with “You don’t call and I remem..” is too long, actually, and kind of disrupts the flow. However, it is a minor distraction.

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
I really like the way you portray pain and angst here. The message is clear, and the emotions are relatable.

*Star* Keep writing and keep rocking, dear. More power to you!
Thanks,
Nishank
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Review of Whispering Walls  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for Nixie

Initial hook and Story Strengths:
I am always curious about supernatural forces and stories. I struggle a bit to not be drawn into clichés while creating a spooky scene, and that is why I came to read this story to see learn something new. I have read your stories before, and I remember being in awe of the life-like characters you create.

The strength of the story to me was the unique plot, and how you stick to it while moving the story at a rapid pace. Every few lines, I get a new surprise which seems very plausible in the overall theme of the story. That is what makes it believable and even scarier.

Also, I like the details you give to the scenes. Like the scene which you describe of how the protagonist set fire to the hotel was clearly registered in my mind. It was easy to read and imagine. Kudos!

Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:
None that I could spot.

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
I think it is the dialogue between the wind, furniture, and the tree branch. Very spooky indeed.
*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking.

Thanks,
Nishank
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Review of The Land Of Ons  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for Sum1

Initial hook and Story Strengths:
I was looking for something funny and short, and this story filled both these requirements. Also, the title had a different ring to it, and it was enough to bring me into this story.
The end is what takes the cake. The dialogue between Susan and the weird voice seems strange but not un-follow-able. What I mean is though it doesn’t look like a normal exchange, there is a certain amusing character to it which keeps me reading. I am intrigued by the less-ons and the Land of ons and stuff. Little did I know where it was heading to *Laugh* Man, I laughed quite a few times in the day thinking of this. Very clever and naughgty, too *Heart*

Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:
None that I could spot.

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
I am going to remember this story for the clever pun. You know, I might even use it on somebody in office. Oh not my boss, I am not a more-on *Laugh*

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking.

Thanks,
Nishank
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for Paul Lennon

Initial hook and Story Strengths:
What intrigue in that title! Cold Steel portrait. It’s almost like reading a prose right there. I was very impressed and intrigued by the title, and that is what brought me in.
The flow and rhythm of the first half of the story was just plain awesome. It was like hearing a story from an elderly, and I couldn’t help but read more and more quickly as I read what you had to offer. You built quite some mystery there in the first half.

However, the impression and the power of the first half is what lead me to have even greater expectations from the second half. I hope I don’t sound harsh here, but the second half starting from the actual tale onwards is a little less impressive. Please don’t get me wrong, there is no mistake in the flow or the plot, but its just that it is not as impressive as it should have been after the build up. Maybe, it’s just my expectations!

Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:
None that I could spot.

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
The whole of the second paragraph where you describe how trains form an important part of the life is dear to me mostly because, as a kid I used to immensely fascinated by trains and engines. Hence, I could imagine the fascination, then and there.

I can clearly see your writing prowess, and I am pretty sure that I would be interested to read more of your works. You do have talent!

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking.

Thanks,
Nishank
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Review of Saved By Art  
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for Tales From the Soul

Initial hook and Story Strengths:
I have a little sweet spot for art. Though I am no artist myself, but that doesn’t stop me from appreciating the masterpieces. That is the reason the word “art” in the title caught my attention.
I see what you are trying to achieve here, that is, to show how art can and does change one’s life. You remain true to the point throughout, and there is a whole hearted effort towards it. I appreciate your soul for telling that story.

Comment:
I would have liked it a little more if the tale had a little more dialogues in it. At present, it is more like reading a story without actually feeling it.

Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:
Not much punctuation issues but yes formatting could have been better. If you could just space out the paragraphs, it would be little more easier on the eyes.

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
I am going to remember the kid whose life was changed by art. This tale has potential. Stick to it and polish it a little.

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking.

Thanks,
Nishank
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" , for Jillian Whitney

Initial hook and Story Strengths:
I got to know from the story’s description about the context and the setting of the story, and I was curious to know how the husband would deal with it. It promised to be an emotional tale.
I think you are quite good at describing the emotions, and that too with quite an apt intensity. The rage, the helplessness and the irritation of the husband came out pretty well and that is what kept me going through the story. It was definitely the strong point.
Comment:
Though I could see the point of it all, I still had a little trouble imagining the rage of the husband. I mean smashing a little thing here and there looked okay in my mind, but going after every memory seemed a little difficult to imagine. But having said that, I can still see some people going down that path.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:
None that I could spot.
The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
The second last line where the wife’s voice consoles the husband was a touching moment in the story. I felt bad for the husband.
*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking.

Thanks,
Nishank
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" , for of House Stark.

Initial hook and Story Strengths:
I got to know from the story’s description about the context and the setting of the story, and I was curious to know how the husband would deal with it. It promised to be an emotional tale.
I think you are quite good at describing the emotions, and that too with quite an apt intensity. The rage, the helplessness and the irritation of the husband came out pretty well and that is what kept me going through the story. It was definitely the strong point.

Comment:
Though I could see the point of it all, I still had a little trouble imagining the rage of the husband. I mean smashing a little thing here and there looked okay in my mind, but going after every memory seemed a little difficult to imagine. But having said that, I can still see some people going down that path.

Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:
None that I could spot.

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
The second last line where the wife’s voice consoles the husband was a touching moment in the story. I felt bad for the husband.
*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking.

Thanks,
Nishank
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Review of Dying Day  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for Take apart your head

Initial Hook and Story Strengths:
There is something about the dying day and the dying time which makes it a curious concept for all. Everybody wants to know how it feels like, without wanting it to be the first-hand experience, you know *Laugh* So that is what was my hook into the story.
The thing which kept me hooked to the story till the end was the underlying psychological narrative. You don’t say it aloud, but I can feel the underlying dichotomy in the narrator’s voice. I feel that something is eating him from within, and I might be wrong here. But that is what I felt.
Also, your narration is pretty pin-point at most places whether it be describing the man soaked in rain, or the last scene.

Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:
None that I could spot.

Comment:
Please don’t get me wrong here, but I came out a little confused at the end. I would have liked a little more confirmation or affirmation on why it was going on.

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
The moment when all 26 years of moments pass by in a flash was what I would remember. It made me feel how it must feel like in those last moments.

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking. I hope you don't mind my critical comment. It is just what I felt.

Thanks,
Nishank

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" , for Charlie ~

Initial hook and Story Strengths:
The description was the primary reason I was curious about the story. I wanted to know what was going on in the life of the couple. Who doesn’t love a little bit of gossip and spice in somebody else’s life *Laugh*

The one thing which I did expect was mystery from this story and that is what I got here as the highlight. The surprise gifts, first coming in one at a time and then in bursts had me hooked. It was curious and I didn’t see the culprit. You had me there.
Also, I could feel the emotions building up in the story. The irritation of the home-husband, the troubled emotions of the cheating wife, and at the last the wronged husband – each of these emotional threads seemed real and relatable.

Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:
No error that I could spot. Pretty neat throughout.

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
At one place, you change the scene in a flash from husband wife conversation to lover and his lady. I didn’t see that coming, too, and honestly I am having hard time deciding that which of the 2 surprises hit me harder *Facepalm* I would go with this one, though *Smile*

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking.

Thanks,
Nishank
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" , for ♫~ Kenword~♫ .
Initial Hook and Story Strengths:
I will be honest, here. I wanted to review your some story on your birthday, and that is what brought me here. Out of all the items, I chose this one as it had a funny, naughty feel to it. I wanted to read more.

The standout point in this story for me was the sweetness this story was full of. Like there are fairies, there are mortals, there are talking dogs and then there is a perfect song, and it all feels like a fairy tale, exactly as it is. I like the mischief of the fairies that you were able to show here with some witty dialogues. Also, that scene that you painted where they forcibly made him drink a potion was hilarious. Poor Man!

Characters:
Of all the characters I liked Emera’s the most. As I said, her mischief is palpable. Her helpers are cute, too.

Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:
None that I could see.

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
I am going to remember it for the ending of the story. I am always happy when mortal gets their due in fairy worlds *Laugh*

So, at the end, again wishing you all the best. Hoping for a great day and health, dear.
*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking.

Thanks,
Nishank

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Review of PARADISE Chapt 3  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is a House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for Write-fully Loti .

Initial Hook:
Wanting to know what happens next to Beth who is trapped with a stranger (murderer?) in her own cottage was my hook to the story. I wouldn’t stop before reaching to the end.

Strength:
Obviously you have thought it really hard, because the kind of twist you gave to this story again caught me off-guard. I didn’t see that coming, and my heart raced a little when Beth met Officer Brown in the woods. Superbly done.
Man, it may sound strange to you, but despite this being a mystery/horror story the thing that tugs at my heart time and again is the feel you gave to the cottage and the surroundings. It’s not like I am liking the mystery any less, but that is the something which feels like magic to me in this story.

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
The last line was the most favourite line to me in this story. This was exactly what a person would think or wonder about if caught in such a situation. Also, it forms the perfect hook to the next story.

*Star* Keep writing and keep rocking, dear. More power to you!

Thanks,
Nishank
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" , for Write-fully Loti .

Hook and Story Strengths:
I read the first part of the story, and of course I couldn’t live without knowing what is going to happen to Beth. I came looking for that adventure set in serene settings.

TO me the strength was the appropriateness of the point in your story where the murder angle was introduced. What I want to say that, I was just getting comfortable with the stranger’s presence in the cottage and kind of starting to trust him when Beth switched on the radio. Man, I was as shocked as she was. It’s one thing guessing about something and wondering whether it is true, and totally another thing to be so creepily correct about it. That is exactly what happened here.

What I am going to remember:
Though it is the point wherein the radio switches off, but since I have already talked about it I will choose my second best moment. It’s the point where Beth curses herself for living so far away from town. That is so because it is dripping with reality. We all crave for those faraway exotic places, but the problems compared to city life is a reality. The fact that you bring it up, here, gives Beth’s character life-like feel to me.

Concluding Remarks:
I am super excited for the next part. I want to know how it unfolds.

*Star* You are one master suspense builder. You rock!

Thanks,
Nishank

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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for Maryann .

Initial Hook:
I am a sci-fi nut, a big time fan of fiction of this genre. Coming from a known author on WdC such as you, I knew I was in for a treat when I read the title and the description. That is what brought me here.

Story strength:
The biggest strength of this tale to me was the way in which you created wonder out of nothing, really. For example, you had Pam all giddy as he tried to walk for the first time. The tentativeness, the excitement, the goofiness, all of it seems so correct. Similarly, there surprise when they sped ahead in a jeep, that confusion of Pam over whether the texture of the road was responsible for different feel in the jeep. It was like seeing the world afresh through Pam’s eyes. Brilliantly done, dear.

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
I remember myself almost watery eyed as I saw, along with Pam, the wondrous colors of Earth just when the students were about to descend on Earth. The wind, the clouds, God so much of beauty that we take for granted.

*Star* I loved your idea of the field trip and also the way you did it. Fabulous.Keep writing and keep rocking, dear! Lovely *Heart*

Thanks,
Nishank
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Review of The Silent Night  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for Pony Tale .

Initial hook and Strengths:
There is a contrast in the title and the description. One feels so soothing, and the other so threatening. It’s this contrast which made me curious to know what will happen in the story.
I think, the main strength of this story was the realistic feel it had. Considering the not so commonplace scenario in the story, I still didn’t feel, as if it was fake, you know. It all felt so real, so close to me, and that to me was the story’s salient point. You really did bring that carefree attitude to the fore in your character, and I could kind of feel for him when the unfortunate scenario occurred.

Favourite part of the story and Concluding remarks:
I absolutely loved the way you finished the story. Not with the cries or the screams, but with a spooky contrast to the whole event which just occurred. Pretty impressive. That is when I knew the link and the reason behind your title and the description.
This is a short-ish story but the fact that you could still create a believable tale out of it tells me about your prowess as a writer. I cant promise when, but I think I will be back for more.

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Thanks,
Nishank
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Review of Pillow Fight  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for Geoff .

Hola Friend. Just dropping by for a quick review.

Initial hook and Strengths:
“Pillow fight” the cuteness filled title, and the description which has a tone of sadness to it, was my hook into the story. I didn’t know what exactly to expect and that sometimes drives your curiosity to know.

The second half of the story is the main strength to me, purely because it sounds very believable. It is how a couple in love would supposedly talk to each other – with tinge of naughtiness, too. Liked it. Also, the fact that it provided a stark contrast to the first half, it somehow felt good and soothing to read.
Clearly, dialogue writing is your forte, and it shines through in this story. Well done, dear.

Lasting memory and concluding remarks:
I am going to remember the last line from the story, as it seems to be such a cute way to tell your lover about something so big. Novel way, too! I also liked the fact that you left the reader guessing here. There is something about suspense which keeps a story fresh in mind, long after you have read it.

I liked reading this story of two halves, and so contrasting halves at that! *Heart*

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking
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Nishank
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for Lonewolf .

Initial hook and Strengths:
The description coupled with the intriguing title told me exactly what lay in store, and that is what hooked me. I wanted to know your idea and picture of the Dark forces.
Detailing and lots of it is the standout point in this story. It’s like you were actually seeing the characters as you were writing them. Boggles the mind, honestly, because the character were not commonplace by any means. So, visualizing them this clearly tells me a lot about your calibre.

Lasting memory:
The description of Vergis is something I will read again, once I write this review. It is almost breathing, right there. I really hope that you have already used that character somewhere in your novel, or say some other story. It is a brilliant one.

Concluding remarks :
There is a Harry Potter-ish kind of feel to the story which I liked. The names of the other world, the tension, the magic reminds me a lot of HP and in a good way *Smile* There is a natural grace in your writing which also shines through. Loved it!

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking.
Thanks,
Nishank
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for Write-fully Loti .

Strengths:
Wow, you are a master at building tension or what. Right from the first startle, I was literally tense myself, placing myself in the lady’s shoe (not very manly, yeah, but had to *Laugh*) The way you kick-started it in the sentence was accentuated only because you were able to carry that throughout.

Another glowing aspect was the detailing in the story. Just the little things actually, which make it more relatable like that habit of hers to wipe her hands against her jeans while even being aware of it. Brilliant.

Lasting memory:
I am going to remember the image of the lady pulling the curtains and peaking whether the man had gone. Man, I was literally peaking along!

Concluding remarks :
Fabulous story. A perfect storm loaded with suspense and mystery. No questions I will come back.
Just a little thing to say, to me, it would have been even better if the description didn’t say “killer”, because it kind of eliminates the scope to second guess along with Beth. Since this is just the first part, I would have liked to be in limbo. Please don’t get me wrong, it’s just what I felt would add even more mystery to the story *Smile*

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking.
Thanks,
Nishank
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Review of The Loving Ones  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for two of four .

Initial Hook and Strengths:
As I scanned through your port, I couldn’t help but stop at this piece because the description caught my attention. There is a sense and feel of inviting mystery which got me into the story.
I think the bond between the family members that you were able to portray is what keeps the story together. There is a sense of protection for Hugh which the reader also feels, as more and more story progresses. Each of the family member seems dedicated towards him.

Also, I think you were able to sustain the mystery for quite some time. I think I got it sometime during the second half of the story, but all in all it seemed to be kept pretty well under the wraps.

Lasting memory:
The place where finally Hugh talks in his “native” language, showing the glee for all the love and affection. A heart warming moment there.

Concluding remarks :
It was a very enjoyable. Cute little read. These kind of stories could be enjoyed by kids and adults alike, in my opinion. I liked it!

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking.
Thanks,
Nishank

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Review of Her Beloved  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for Fhionnuisce .

Initial Hook and Strengths:
It is the simplicity of the Title and the description which made me choose this story from your port. It seemed loaded with purity.

There is a certain sense of calmness and purity in this tale. The beautiful ocean, the yearning, the lady searching for her lover, all of this has a sense of continuation, and a linking thread of stillness in it. I am myself an Ocean person, and maybe that worked for me even more. It was as if I was there on the Yacht on that sea, feeling the balmy Ocean around me. Also, the way you strengthen that feel of bond between the husband and wife in the reader's mind is very neatly done. It is almost like I took it for given, despite it not being repeated often.

The moment I will remember:
The last line caught me off-guard, dear. I really didn’t see that coming. I reread the story from halfway on-wards, and then smiled as I realized what I got tricked into. Lovely piece of work there.

Concluding remarks :
This is a neat little emotional story, and I liked it very much. Your detailing is very thorough and wonderful.

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking.

Thanks,
Nishank
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" for willwilcox.

Initial hook and Strengths:
The description promised to offer something new, and that is what brought me in. Going by the high regards I have for you as a writer, I wanted to see where your imagination would lead me in a dead world. It didn’t disspaoint me one bit.

I have tried to write dialogues and although I enjoy writing them, I have struggled the most with the feel part in them. What I am trying to say is that it is very difficult to build that feeling of camaraderie between the speakers, and even more difficult to let the readers feel it exactly, as you wanted to. Got to say that you exceled in these aspects here. At no point does the dialogue seem jarring or unnatural, and it makes the story flow along with it. There is humor, there is friendship, there is love and all of that you showed with just dialogues. Amazing job.

The lasting memory of this piece in my mind:
There are places where I burst out laughing (like where Bill says that whistle blowing through the bullet hole irritates me) but my absolute fav are the last few lines. That feeling of warmth, that salvation and calmness is touchable. Lovely work there.

Concluding remarks :
I keep growing a bigger fan of you, friend. You seem so natural irrespective of a genre. Must be a feat of continuous writing and focus. Hats off!

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking.
Thanks,
Nishank

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Review of Hugh Dunnit  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A House Stark review for "Game of Thrones" , for willwilcox.

Initial hook and Strengths:
It promised to be a delightful combination with loads of humour with dollops of mystery. I wanted to join on in the fun, and I came into the story.
I get a sense that you like sci-fi, too, and the fact that you can create humour in this genre makes you my favourite. The first few lines wherein you set the scene of nothing happening on a cloud was brilliant. You couldn’t have done it in lesser words, and with more effect. There were some smiles this story got out of me, right there.
The dialogue was another strong point of this story, especially the one between Hugh and her secretary.

Comments:
Um, please don’t get me wrong, but I found the humour at the end a little forced. Maybe it is the high expectations from you which makes me say this, but I was expecting more jokes, and witty one-liners in there.

Concluding remarks :
I hope you don’t mind what I said in the previous section, but all in all I liked the story. It was not awkward, and fun at times.

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing and keep rocking. I will come back for more, surely, as I have been doing all day.

Thanks,
Nishank

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