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Review by Spring in my Sox
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a lovely poem, though most of yours are. I am glad you were so inspired by all of our well wishes. Keep writing! And whatever you do try not to deprive us of all of your inspirational writing and posts. I appreciate seeing you on the news feed.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an interesting story. I couldn't help but think Jackpot! meteorites are worth big money. Make sure the characters get paid and don't forget to have them take pictures for the insurance claim. The press would probably show up too. It isn't every day that a meteor hits a house.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Yipes this is twisted. This main character did a very bad thing. The interaction with the dog had me fooled until the mention that the light behind them is not dawn but the light from a massive fire. That escalates the whole thing a level beyond on the creep factor. I thought at first maybe a bar fight or a little bitty murder of someone. The fire makes it sound like he painted an entire town red with their own blood and then burned it to the ground. I can't see anything that could have made someone think that the actions were justified.

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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a cool concept. I like that even Satan has rules he has to follow. I like the idea of a cosmic do-over for soulmates. It is something precious of great value clearly even to Satan. That Satan can still recognize the beauty of it; that he hadn't lost that when he fell from grace when he lost the inherent beauty that God created in him. Beauty is a thing beyond good beyond evil it is a pure state of perfection and that is what soulmates are. I like to think I met my soulmate. I would also like to think that I do not have to call in that do over when the time comes.

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Review of Let it be  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This really is a dark piece of prose. I found some of the musings interesting. The contrast of two states actually being one and the same is quite satisfying - Drowning and rebirth -destruction and creation. All be it a dark contrast but satisfying none the less. The main piece of structure I found off was the spelling of Jin- gin the drink is spelled with a "g". I liked the idea that you only discover the true nature of a thing if you are willing to accept that part of that nature can destroy you.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a nice piece of poetic prose and I think it is highly tantalizing. It teases that there is a lot more story behind it. I would definitely continue it to see where it went. I want to know more about this character and their world. Your genres offer little to know clues to it. I would recommend changing the writing and reference genres to something more descriptive of what you're trying to accomplish. Those two genres aren't judged in the Quills which is the WDC equivalent of the Emmys. Not saying I would nominate you as it is supposed to be anonymous, and I just read a little bit.
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Review of Alone  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Ouch. I feel the struggle. My mom was a single parent and I know it got rough for her. Just know that despite the fact that none of your kids are ever likely to thank you for all that you have done and will do for them, they all have a sense of gratitude for it. And who knows, maybe you will be that lucky parent that has an insightful child that manages to think to thank you for everything. Then again you chose Parenting, Sports, and Emotional as your genre's not fantasy... Anyway great piece, definitely made me feel for you.


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Review of First drum set  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is secretly a poem about bravery- but seriously they were brave parents to buy a drum set for their own toddler! Far braver than I am. They have their ear plugs but are they ever really enough. I can totally hear this child, a budding drummer, practicing day and night happily. Was this written before noise-canceling headphones? I think that invention might have made me brave enough to buy my kid drums. NO, I will just be the cool auntie that buys drums for the nephews because I can do so without repercussions- no kids of my own!


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem is an exercise in frustration. You try to elect the right people to do the right things for the country, but who is the right person for the job. You can't ask them, they lie. You don't have time or resources to do background checks on all the choices. Democracy is difficult if not impossible to get right but all the alternatives are at least as wrong. Why should the people in charge be able to shake the world enough that babies aren't able to get formula to survive in a first-world country?


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Review by Spring in my Sox
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
That was a cool story it would have freaked me out a bit to have someone answer when I knew I hadn't dialed enough numbers especially if a man answered. This is a well written piece an it was very gripping. I barely remember when you could get a call to go through with only seven numbers but I grew up in major metropolitan areas.
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Review of The Darkest Storm  
Review by Spring in my Sox
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Good grief. Killing his whole family then committing suicide? All of that for what? You did some head hopping in the beginning it was a little confusing. It is best to stick to a single pov in a story this short.
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Review of Breathing  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This poem is the epitome of a tragedy. To have to watch a loved one struggle with so many addictions is hard. Having to watch them dying slowly from those addictions is even harder. I went through it with my mom. She died of Copd, and alcoholism. It is tough to say for sure what ultimately took my mom.

I sympathize with the torture your sister is putting you through. Just know that at some point it will get easier. She will pass, you will go through hell. On the other side you will realize that she has found peace, finally and you will move on. It will always ache but it will get better.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is such a sad poem. I am terribly sorry for your loss. I love the structure it contributes to the flow of the poem and the flow of the poem somehow enhances the sadness of the subject matter. It is a real tear-jerker.

The internal conflict of both wishing not to remember the pain and having no escape from the grief because the memory is a burned-in scar on your heart. Everybody has them and I think this poem has all the parts needed to resonate with those painful moments to allow people into your headspace at the moment it describes.


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Review of Trust Me  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (4.5)
So my first suggestion is that you link these on the feed when you post them so that it is easier for people to turn around and review you. I like these stories but I find your recycling of characters and plots a little off-putting. I would like it if these characters actually had completely new adventures rather than the same adventures over and over just with different endings. You have the talent. Use it.

In terms of improvements to this particular iteration, you could do with less telling and more showing. Get us in their heads more by showing us their reactions to things rather than just a bunch of dialog. I could use more description of the Cosmos bar. I can't really see it except vaguely. I enjoy these little stories but with a little more meat to them you could really develop a wider reader base.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a good message concealed in a poorly formatted form. Breaking it into paragraphs with an extra space in between would make it an easier read as would capitalizing the sentences properly. Better organization and formatting would definitely put more power behind your arguments.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this poem. It followed the form well, not a single strained rhyme as far as I can see. I like the message and theme of the poem the images are brilliant. I especially like the last stanza. It wouldn't be complete without it. It rounds out the poem perfectly
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Review of The Giant Skye!  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Structurally good. The storyalso does a good job of keeping to the style and flavor of the source material. The part where the pups not necessary to the rescue chatted seemed a little stiff. You also left out the obligatory part where marshal clumsily enters the elevator usually crashing into people or something. It is a pretty good example of fan fiction
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Intriguing little story. Is this the beginning of something? It could be. I like the characters and the dialog. It is quite a bit short. I would love to read more. Maybe something more about the party, seeing her as the party guests dwindle away. It would be interesting to glimpse some of the other guests too.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Ouch! That is quite the passive-aggressive poem. As one of the poor kids that got donated toys I have to say that at least a little attempt on their part meant a lot to me never mind that they could have done so much more.

The thing of it is to criticize this behavior only during the holiday season misses entirely the fact that suffering exists all year long. People go hungry, birthdays happen with no presents or cake. Grandpa sits in the home, alone with no one that actually cares for him caring for him.

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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found this a highly inspirational poem! It is patriotic as well. It is nice to see that something beautiful like this could come out of something as horrible as nine-eleven. I remember where I was the day that it happened. I was working with my mom on refinishing some kitchen cabinets. We didn't know anything was going on until we took a break for lunch and went to the local convenience store. Everyone was talking about it over their coffees and doughnuts. They didn't go into details they were all just it's horrible. How could something like this happen here? We asked what had happened and we were just striken.

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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem has a very strong anti-procrastination message that is probably very good for all of us writers to read and remember. It feels like a lot of us sit on our laurels with an attitude that we will get around to it eventually. This poem is a reminder that you will accomplish nothing if you don't start something.

You can't learn to fly if you don't open your wings. You can't write an award-winning poem if you don't put your fingers on the keyboard or pen to paper. I like the attitude of this poet very much. This poem attempts to make the attitude infectious. The enthusiasm with which the writer presents their idea is certainly infectious. I am impressed with the attitude and wonder what life experiences have brought the author into possession of this wisdom.

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Review of Imagination  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a sweet poem of young love. I like that the lovers didn't prematurely give in to their carnal natures. It says a lot of them that they are willing to let their love grow and blossom in the right time and way. This poem hardly seems to apply to a lot of young lovers these days. Not enough of them have this kind of emotional maturity.


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Review of Delta  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a pretty poem. It flows like the water it describes. It also describes the natural flow of relationships between people. The water cycle seems to be a good metaphor for the idea of reincarnation. Going from the clouds (heaven) to the earth, following a life path along side of others, coming to the end of life and possibly returning to heaven to begin it all a gain. Really a beautiful picture painted in words.

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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I liked the My word contest. This is one of many good things that has come from it. It is longer than any of my poems ever manage to be. I like the story of it and the message. The gorgeous path laid out for the poet which never really fit them. I feel like that sometimes too. Like I had a perfect path to follow and I just didn't.

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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I like the near non sequitur of the title. It appears to have nothing to do with the poem but reading the poem through that window is cute and funny. I can see my grandfather sitting back to relax and realizing he can't quite relax because he's forgotten...something?
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