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Review by Riot
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Today was the day." 

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.



I like the title, but I feel it should be properly capitalized and the period should be removed. I found the plot of this poem to be great, a birthday. I like the enthusiasm that was felt through this piece. The imagery was really great as well. Overall, I highly enjoyed this poem and I can find no room for improvement. Thank you for sharing it with us and keep up the great job!



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Review by Riot
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "The Height Of Sorrow" 

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.


Title/Plot: The title fits the plot well. I cannot think of any suggestions to better it. For the plot, I think you did a good job with build up and driving a point home at the end.

Style & Voice: I think your style and voice is clear here. I have a few suggestions, which can be found under technical.

Characters: Your characters were especially good in this piece. I liked how you used your dialogue, and liked the build up from the beginning.

Technical:
*Bullet* hiccoughs while correct in most terms is still commonly referred to as hiccups. - You actually use both forms in the story, I would change it to just one.
*Bullet* maneouver should be maneuver
*Bullet* defences should be defenses
*Bullet* revelled should be reveled
*Bullet* apologise should be apologize
*Bullet* recognisable should be recognizable
*Bullet* favourite should be favorite
*Exclaim* Of course, with the last three, I guess it's debatable.
*Bullet* I'm not sure what an accouncher is.
*Bullet* You're missing a double quote at the end of 'but that her husband shall never have...'
*Exclaim* Keep an eye on punctuation at the end of dialogue.
For example: "Natalie Burns – 1712 onwards" it proclaimed. needs a comma after onwards.

*Star**Star**Star**Star* Overall Opinion: Overall, I felt this was a pretty good piece and enjoyed the read. I'm not sure if it's really my cup of tea, in all honesty, but I still think you did a great job with it. Thanks for sharing it with us. *Heart*



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Review by Riot
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Just Two Lips and Half a Brain" 

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.


Title/Plot: I wasn't sure about the title at first, but after reading the piece in its entirety I think you made a good choice. The plot was well established and well thought out.

Style & Voice: Your style and voice is clear throughout this piece. I especially like how you incorporated the use of good dialogue between people and their unique way of speaking (slang) added to the reality.

Scene/Setting: This is a good setting. You didn't spend an overly large amount of time describing things, but it also wasn't needed. The brief mentions of Tulips destruction was quite enough to paint a mental picture of where they were.

Characters: The fact that you didn't solely focus on one person and one person alone was very pleasant. We got to see Uncle Jimmy, Aunt Jenny, you, Tulips and Pup. Excellent job!

Technical:
*Bullet* Second paragraph, first sentence, seems to be a bit of a run on.
*Bullet* everafter should be two words: ever after
*Bullet* Is diamante a brand? If so I think it needs to be capitalized.
*Bullet* You upto to Nuthin' good? - The upto/to part here is awkward and confusing. I realize it's dialogue and likely slang, but it seems (to me) like it's a bit overkill.
*Bullet* ...her mother belonging to a friend of his... - belonging to seems off to me here. Maybe 'belonged to'?
*Bullet* half a brain, again, may be slang. But half of a brain seems more understandable.
*Bullet* Beware, chewing habits are injurious to health". - Did you mean for the period to be outside the double quotes?
*Bullet* ...I wore 'girl clothes', I liked to dazzle. - I think the comma needs to come before the quote after girl clothes, as well as further down with accidents.
*Bullet* Needless to say is wordy and needs a comma after it. You could use something like Clearly, instead. The same is true for all of these which could be just all these. So by the end, re-written, it could be: Clearly, all these were not deemed...
*Bullet* accompanied by should be used with people, not objects. Suggested change: accompanied with.
*Bullet* but instead of chocolate on tan, he had dark black socks and markings of fawn; - I think that he had the dark black socks would sound better. 'he had dark black' in the context you've used it seems awkward to me.


*Star**Star**Star**Star* Overall Opinion: Overall I felt this was a very touching story. Thank you for sharing it with us and keep up the excellent work.



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Review of All To You  
Review by Riot
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "All To You" 

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.



A truly awe-inspiring poem. I can sympathize with your feelings on this; finding the man that you love and clawing your way from depression. It just goes to show that one person truly can make a difference. I see your words on the screen and grin, I'm so happy for you. Internally, I'm so happy with myself too because I can relate. My favorite stanza was stanza 4, I like how you mention him 'giving back' your smile that others had lost. Superb writing, it's no wonder your so famous on this site. Thank you so much for sharing.



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Review of Crimson Teardrops  
Review by Riot
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Crimson Teardrops" 

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.


Thank you for sharing this piece with the community. Child abuse is never an easy thing to write about, believe me I know this to be true. I like how this has a light rhyme to it, and structurally it is sound. I can find no errors and can offer no room for improvement. The imagery in here was great: jagged edges, crimson, bruise this life - it was all great. Of course, in it's greatness, I have to point out how incredibly sad and touching it is. It is definitely deserving of the beautiful ribbon that adorns it. Thank you once again for gracing us with your ability to write.


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Review of Tentacle  
Review by Riot
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Tentacle" 

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.



I found this to be a highly creative poem. I liked the title and I thought it was fitting of the piece and how you cleverly spaced out the words to make a shape. The imagery was great, as you can see with some of your word choices: coincidental illusion, rusty metal bars, slime, marrow of yer bones, etc. I especially liked the voice in this and the slang. Overall I feel you did an excellent job with this. I could find no room for improvement and spotted no errors. Keep up the excellent work, and welcome to WDC!



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Review by Riot
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "My Long Journey to Freedom" 

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.


I found this to be an extremely touching piece. I couldn't find any errors in spelling or grammar and I can find no room for improvement. My opinion of this is that you are a very strong person. When many would have given up, you prevailed. I know how it can feel to be stuck and helpless while the world around you goes living without you, completely unaware of your predicament. While I can't offer you any advice on rewording or rewriting (because I think it's perfect the way it is) I am able to say that I am touched by this read. Not only is some of the stuff you've written heart breaking, but it's also incredibly inspiring. You lead us with an example to never give up and this piece you've written is a gift to anyone willing to take a few minutes to read it. Thank you very much for sharing this with us.


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Review by Riot
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "My Teacher's Dog Ate My Homework" 

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This is an extremely cute poem and very creative. I loved the punch line at the ending, it made me laugh out loud. I think many children would love this poem, it sort of reminds me of Shel Silverstein. I could find nothing wrong with the structure, and can offer no room for improvement. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem with us, keep up the excellent writing! *Heart*



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Review by Riot
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Devils Dance in the Moonlight" 

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The image at the top of this poem is excellent. There's so much I could say about it alone, hehe. I really like the couplet form you have here. The rhyming was spot on and I didn't feel the flow was disrupted at all. I thought it was particularly clever how you have the dialog in red and how it's repeated again at the end. Overall I felt this was a chilling and grizzly read - just the kind I like!



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Review of Knock, Knock  
Review by Riot
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Knock, Knock" 

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Wow, this poem put me in awe. I think you did an excellent job conveying emotions throughout this, playing on our fears. The bold text in this poem did it a lot of justice, they pop out of the screen. What's really clever is if you take the bold portions out the poem stands alone very well. You can even put all the bold stuff together and it stands alone too. It's like we got two poems for the price of one, I love it. Thanks as always for sharing your wonderful poetry, it's clear you're very gifted!



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Review of Time is Brief  
Review by Riot
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Time is Brief" 

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.


I have never seen a poem with this structure before, not that I ever noticed anyways. You're right though, it does drive a point home and the words you've used in this are strong and powerful. I noticed one small thing, in line three of the first stanza, it felt like the comma was needed there just like in line 1. I'm not sure if this was done on purpose or not. As for the rest, I think you did an outstanding job. Stanza 4 and 5 were especially powerful and you drove the point home in stanza 5 with the repeating lines and powerful words. Keep up the excellent work, and Happy WDC Anniversary once again! *Heart*



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Review of A Shallow Soul  
Review by Riot
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "A Shallow Soul" 

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This is an excellent free-verse poem. I like how it has a fantasy feel to it, though anyone could easily feel the same way you've described. Many words struck me as my eyes fell down this poem, but I especially liked the descriptions in the first two stanzas. The galloping prince, the tiara resting upon your head. The words were almost whimsical and they were so strikingly sad. Thank you for sharing this with us, I look forward to reading more in your port. This poem is well deserving of the lovely ribbon that adorns it. Happy WDC Anniversary!



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Review of Darkness  
Review by Riot
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Darkness" 

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Grim, sad, dark. Everything I'm sure you intended. What I liked most about this was the great descriptions because it made me feel enveloped in the darkness you must've been feeling when writing this. You used great examples of just how dark it is inside, from the theater's without lights, to the cave's inner chambers, and the desert with no moon. Excellent job, I hope to see more from you soon. Happy WDC Anniversary once again!



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Review of Alone  
Review by Riot
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Alone" 

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Another great couplet. I think your rhyming is really good. I especially like how you used completely alternate spelling on some of the rhymes, instead of finding a perfect match. Like with vase/space. I've been exploring the poems in your darker poetry folder. You were right, some of them are really heart wrenching. Thank you once again for sharing these, I've been having a great time exploring your port. I think you should do more!


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Review of Broken Glass  
Review by Riot
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Broken Glass" 

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I love the couplets here. My only suggestion is that perhaps you could put each couplet in their own stanza. Since the poem is not that long, I don't think it's a huge deal. For your word choice, this is excellent. Many powerful words float through your poem, telling us about this sad story: shattered, fragile organ, figure falling - Great job! Thank you for sharing this with us, I'm having fun looking through your port and excellent poetry. Happy WDC Anniversary!


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Review by Riot
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Children In Costumes-Acrostic" 

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I can't believe some of your stuff hasn't been rated or reviewed yet. As with the rest, I enjoyed reading this one and am glad that I have. I noticed with your others that you've used color to illustrate the vertical words, but you didn't with this one. However, you did bold it. I like the wording in this and how you've incorporated all the goodies of Halloween. Dracula, licorice, chocolate goodness treats, etc. A delightful read, thank you for sharing it with us!


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Review by Riot
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "A Winter Wonderland" 

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Another great Acrostic poem, I'm glad I stumbled upon this folder. I like especially how the blue jumps out at me, it was a really great choice. My favorite imagery of this was the penguins gliding on icicle sleds. How it turned darker with the orca strike was a good contrast of the real elements within a community in the wild. It turned dark fast, just like in real life. Thank you for sharing this with us. I hope you have a wonderful WDC Anniversary.


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Review by Riot
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Only My Shadow Moved" 

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I think the title (and vertical lettering) of your poem is great. Your word choice was also really good and I didn't feel like any of them were out of place or overly fanciful. I also enjoyed the way each 'stanza' fit each vertical word perfectly and that you kept same-like thoughts in each one. Overall, I feel this was a good read and it got me thinking. Thank you for sharing this with us and I hope you have a Happy WDC Anniversary!


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Review of Midnight Walk  
Review by Riot
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Midnight Walk" 

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I love everything about this. From the title, to the great word choice, to the way it was tied together to your voice shining through with every stanza. Your punctuation was great, I loved the structure, and can find no room for improvement. My favorite part of this would have to be the last stanza, but the entire thing was great. Keep up the excellent work and thank you once again for gracing me with your words. Happy WDC Anniversary! *Heart*



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Review of REFLECTIONS  
Review by Riot
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "REFLECTIONS" 

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I can say nothing bad about this poem. You did a killer job with punctuation, just reading the punctuation made my head spin. My only criticism is the title. I don't personally care for capitalized titles or titles that end with a period. Other than that, I thought this was superb. I really thought you expressed emotion well in this and used the poem to speak of reflections. Not just the physical sense, either. It's clear from looking through your port and reading this that you are a talented writer and everything is well deserving of the ribbons that adorn your port. Keep up the excellent work and have a great WDC anniversary!


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Review of The Archer  
Review by Riot
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "The Archer" 

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I found this poem to be cleverly spaced out, I thoroughly think it does your poem justice. Great job on that aspect! For the words, I think they were meaningful and imagery-filled. I particularly liked: pulsing, rush of blood, and voice of birds. Overall I think you did a good job and I highly enjoyed this read, thank you for sharing it with us. I'm having a lot of fun peaking through your port. You're a very talented writer and it shows through with your remarkable gift at wording things. No subject seems too tough for you. Happy WDC Anniversary once again.



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Review of Secret Keeper  
Review by Riot
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Secret Keeper" 

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Thank you for sharing this with us, I think you should keep up the good work. I thought your voice was consistant through the entire piece. Writing it from a first person point of view, you've managed to capture slang and good dialogue. Well done. My only thought on the technicality side of this is to watch your punctuation, paragraphing, and spacing. Other than that I'm not sure if I have much else to offer. Again, thank you for sharing this with us. If you decide to add anything to this please drop me an email as I would be interested in re-reading it.


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Review of Freedom  
Review by Riot
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Freedom" 

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.



Title: The title's definitely fitting to the poem.

Word Choice: Your word choice here was superb. I like how you told this story and posed questions to keep the reader interested.

Structure and Form: This free-verse was well worded. I didn't feel the flow was disrupted.

*Star**Star**Star**Star* Overall Opinion: Overall, I felt this was a pretty good poem. Thanks for sharing it with us, and keep up the excellent work! *Snow1*



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Review by Riot
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Sheep in Wolf's Clothing" 

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.



Title: I love the title. *Heart*

Word Choice: I loved your word choice. Some that struck me in particular: wild eyes, ovine miles, hypnotic silver.

Structure and Form: Sonnet's are a very difficult creature to tame, well done.

Imagery: It's packed with it. Every line, every part.

*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* Overall Opinion: I can find no room for improvement. Thank you for sharing this with us, and keep up the good work. Welcome to WDC!



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Review of Scared Stiff  
Review by Riot
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot . This review is in response to your entry "Scared Stiff" 

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.


Title/Plot: Good title. *Thumbsup*

Style & Voice: Your voice showed through with this. I liked his slang, and the way he spoke throughout the story.

Scene/Setting: A perfect setting for a thrilling story.

Characters: Both characters were well played.

Technical: Some things I noticed:
*Bullet* Paragraph 5, I think the screaming should be in its own dialogue.
*Bullet* In some places you capitalize God, in others you don't. If you capitalize it through the entire piece, consider capitalizing Hell too.

*Star**Star**Star**Star* Overall Opinion: I thought this was a pretty good story. It was more exciting in the beginning when we didn't know what it was, hehe. Thanks for sharing this with us, and keep up the good work. *Snow3*



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