What is Pleiades? Click here! ▼The root form of Pleiades comes from the number seven. It's a seven line poem with few restrictions, but emphases on strong imagery. The title's first letter should define the rest of the poem and can only be one word. The following seven lines should start with the first letter of the poem's title and only be six syllables each.
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Initial Impression
At first I thought the opening couple of lines were almost leading up to a rhyme because they flowed so well together and just sort of had that 'off rhyme' to them in a couplet.
Imagery and Feel
I think you picked some great 'm' words to describe this poem of memories. I like how you described memory as being almost fluid-like like sand, but what I found most remarkably thought provoking was the last two lines:
merge into the present / modify the future.
Technicalities
As far as I can tell, you've done everything correct to fit this type of form. On a couple of re-reads I discovered that I was having some mild difficulty with flow. I don't think that punctuation is necessary for all types of poetry, but I'm almost wondering if in this poem it may do it some justice. There are a couple of spots with 'harsher' sounding words, and with all of the repeating 'm' sounds (not just in the beginning of the lines) it tends to get a little confusing. For me, I seemed to break this into couplets in a way, as every two lines seemed to work perfectly.
Overall Impression
I liked this poem and found the descriptions and imagery to be truthful and well written. My only thoughts for improvement are more of a personal preference on flow and technicalities. Thank you for entering this round, and I hope to see you again!