What I liked
*The imagery - you have chosen to use words that paint a picture for the reader, down to the crumbs on the table.
*The final stanza - beautiful.
What I liked
*The humor in the last stanza
*The rhyme scheme - it fit nicely with the poem
*I have had this happen also - you are not the only one! My philosophy is this - if you don't want it to be rated and reviewed, either don't allow ratings or keep it private!
What I liked
*The emotion of this one - I think that all of us who have been told about Satan and what he can do have been afraid at one point or another.
*The use of the color red for the poem - helps to emphasize what you are writing about.
What I liked
*The humor - having both children and pets, I can totally relate to this one!
*And just where do you get a trained monkey and how I can get one?
What I liked
*This is a very interesting campfire - you have a well defined set of rules for it and all of the members of the campfire have followed them.
*The characters that you have created for this campfire - very creative!
What I liked
*The three qualities that the writer was looking for in a perfect mate - very good qualities, indeed!
*The directness of the letter - short, sweet and to the point - well done!
What I liked
*This poll is one that is close to my heart - I met my husband through an on-line personals site and we have been happily married for two years now.
*I was interested to find that a majority of the people who took this survey felt that as long as they were safe, there was no problem in meeting the person socially.
Grammar and Technical Issues
*one's - there is no need for the aprostrophe
What I liked
*the creative spark that you have in developing this in and out
*the format of the in and out - very creative!
*the story so far - I think that I really like the fact that this encourages creativity in WDC members
What I liked
*The loving way that you wrote this tribute
*The imagery that you used - especially the part about the cracking underneath the bike tires.
*The poem at the end - when reading this, I could feel the love that you had for Glen
*The way in which you portray Glen as a person and loved one first, not just as a person with polio. You show that anyone can overcome the odds if they have a support system to help them and a strong will.
Grammar and Technical Issues
*Place a space between paragraphs eight and nine - you did this with all the other paragraphs, I think it was just an oversight
What I liked
*The letter used the vernacular of the time period - very well done
*Stonewall Jackson was an oddball (I'm from Virigina, where he is regarded as highly as Washington and Jefferson) and you captured his oddities in a well written manner.
What I liked
*Practical advice for new members to Writing.com
*Encouragement and incentive to become active in the community - the ideas that you provide will help any new member become active!
Very funny! I think that everyone on this site can add something to this list. WDC is very addicting, and I think that is because of the community that has been created here - this was a great idea for an in and out - great work!
Poetry.com is evil - you have hit the nail on the head - it takes advantage of poeple who have just started writing poetry or who are looking for a place to display their writing and turns it into a money making scheme. All they want is money - thanks for sharing your experience with them, as unpleasant as it was.
I like the way that you have structured this poem - you begin the first two lines of each stanze with "my" - very effective and very attention getting. You have used words that evoke emotion and also have provided the reader with great imagery - thanks for sharing!
I enjoyed reading this one - I liked the rhyme scheme that you used for the poem. The meaning of the poem came through clearly and anyone who would read this would be able to understand what you are trying to convey. I especially liked "The soft sirens song we can feel" - very well written!
You have written a piece with a great deal of imagery. Through your words, the reader is taken into the storm and feels the tenseness that you must have felt when you were trying to get to the cabin. Thank you for sharing this - it is truly a great essay!
This is very well done! You have done a great job in providing a wealth of information about the fourth of July and have documented your sources, so those who are interested can go and find out more information. You have given a lot of details here! Well done!
I like the way that you confront something head on and provide information for the reader. Many people probably had misconceptions about polygamy before reading this article. You use references that really do support what you are writing about - thank you for sharing this!
I have the feeling that, without even knowing it, you have written a wonderful tribute to a place that helped turn you into the person that you are meant to become. While you at first dreaded working there, you came to realize what it meant to you and how it made you into a better person. Thanks for sharing this!
I didn't necessarily find this spooky as much as haunting. The words that Roses uses are extremely haunting to me - I read them over several times to make sure that I got the full effect of them. One of the things that impressed me is the rhyming - it caught my eye - while not direct and flashy, I like the way that the last word in a stanza rhymes with one of the first few words in the following stanza- very nicely done.
UGH!! This is a great attempt at horrible writing - or would that be a horrible attempt a great writing? Either way - wonderful work (or terrible work?) - you have provided a great laugh either way. Thanks again for sharing such a, um, piece of writing!
Very, very humorous! I am hoping that you were able to get some type of resolution from this letter - if not, I say write another one that is just like this one!! I especially like the PS that you put at the end - a very nice touch to add. Great letter!
What a great newsletter! You provide great information for the readers and give a practical and helpful writing exercises to help strengthen their writing skills. You also give insight into different types of sensory writing and how to achieve it - thanks for doing this!
Thank you for shining a light on a topic that really needed one. All too often, sports heroes are placed in positions of honor and distinction, even though their past actions may not merit them the honor of doing so. This is a well written editorial - great work!
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