This prose is finely crafted and creates vivid imagery for the reader. All of the paragraphs flow smoothly and the reader is carried along with the greatest of ease.
I enjoyed each of these, but the last one is my personal favorite. It seems more fully drawn and one feels more involved in the activity.
Explore and enjoy my friend, and you will have many readers following along happily through writing like this.
I do like this. The wording is flowery, more like the Shakespearian era, but the flow of the words, and the depth of the emotional impact are timeless. I think I may be a hundred years or so out of time, but I still like and enjoy very old poetry, and this reads like that. Thank you Gabriella for this work.
The moments at the end of the journey, when the value of the destination reached is questioned, and the route taken is reviewed, and all the tomorrows are yesterday. Then how we traveled, and the small secret moments that were never shared, but mean so much, the review of all this is captured here, in this compact demonstration of how to write to perfection. Every word adds meaning, captures the heart and imagination, and takes us on an intimate tour of the unknowable that we all will know.
A Ballad! Maybe not in form, but in content. Thank you Tammatha. You are very talented, but like many of us, the half forgotten dreams live forever.
Good use of rhythm and rhyme to move the reader along with your theme. I like this poem, although like all good poems, it leaves a wish for dreams to be fulfilled for the writer.
You have imagination and to make the best use of this talent, you might explore one of the writing tips sites here, or elsewhere online.
One thing you might wish to examine about your writing, is consistency in tense. It is a bit disconcerting to read a story when the past and present jump around randomly. Also, some writers seem to benefit from making a sort of map or outline of their book before beginning it, or after the initial effort has given a direction in which to look for the plot development.
All of this work may seem pointless when it seems so much more rewarding to just grab the computer and jump directly into the story, and indeed, there are well known writers who are able to do that. Keep on writing, read your writing, and look for things you see that are similar to and different from the published books you have available.
Like all inside jokes; or writing in a joking way with inside information; this poem has much information that is hidden from the general reader. By definition, full appreciation of the writing is limited to "those in the know".
A sense of humor is a prized possession, so please do not consider this review negative. Rather, it is only pointing out the limiting factors of this type writing.
This article is well written as a travelogue, but lacks perspective in the emotional sense. This was primarily intended to convey information to the reader, which it did well in a snapshot of the estate, but still, the writing seems almost stylized rather than flowing. This observation is meant to encourage the author to explore making all writing tap into all of their creativity.
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