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Review of Lovesong  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an enjoyable love poem, it had a really personal feeling to it. If you were writing about a real person, I hope you get to be with that person.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked it when you mentioned "the moons of Mars," that's a reference I've never encountered in a poem before, and it is of interest to me personally, because I'm into science and science fiction.
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Review of Sparrow  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I enjoyed this poem about a bird, usually I find some difficulty interpreting some poetry because I'm not a poet myself, but this poem was easy for me to understand.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how you were able to tell a complete story in the form of a poem.
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Review of How can this be?  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I tried to absorb the meaning of your philosophical musings, but I'm afraid it went over my head. I guess I just don't have a mind for this kind of stuff. I'd be interested in having you reply to this review and explain to me the meaning of what you wrote with this essay.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: It was interesting to read something philosophical for a change, what you wrote wasn't typical.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting account of your childhood, and the benefits you learned when your mother was raising you. I'm glad you were able to apply that knowledge to raising your own kids.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I think it is awesome that your mother took you to museums when you were a kid, that sounds like a great childhood!
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Review of Christmas Eve  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I really enjoyed this poem, I liked the topic and the cadence flowed smoothly. Poems about Christ interest me because I am a believer, and this poem was a cut above the average Christmas poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed the message of this poem about why Christ was here and what we can receive from worshiping him, and I enjoyed the smooth flow of the cadence of the rhyming lines.
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Review of In Elysian Fields  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I recognized Shadowfax as Gandalf's horse from Lord of the Rings, and Pegasus from Greek mythology. The subject of this poem interested me, and the cadence was put together very nicely. I read a lot of poems where one line doesn't seem to have as many syllables as the line before it, but with this poem each line matched seemingly perfectly.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed that you made characters out of two horses from mythology and literature, and I enjoyed the cadence of this poem. Great job!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting self-empowering poem on the part of the author about being in an abusive relationship; I hope you broke up with this person and moved on with your life.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how every other line rhymed with each other, lines A and C rhymed with each other, and lines B and D rhymed with each other. I also like the fact that you had the courage to write about this, and that you are now hopefully experiencing a new happier chapter in your life.
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Review of Lurking Raven  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I enjoyed this poem, the idea of Death personified is a recurring concept that I have always enjoyed, much like episodes of the old black and white Twilight Zone television show. This was a well-written poem, and I learned two new words as I read it and looked the words up.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: There were several things I liked about this. I had to look up a couple of words, quiescent and harbinger; I like it when I see a word I don't know or that I can't pronounce, because I go to an online dictionary and look it up, and I learn something. I also enjoyed the sense of an afterlife, with the soul and body being separated at death. I also like the idea of Death personified as a living being, you did a good job with that.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is a helpful article written for newbies, I like it when someone goes out of their way to try to teach the new people who are eager to learn. It's good that you mentioned Storymistress and Storymaster, they are very helpful and newbies should get to know who they are. You gave some good advice!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, but as a suggestion you might mention how long you've been on this site and how long it took you to get to know your way around.

What I liked: I liked the positive intentions behind this article, the desire to help newbies!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is a heart-breaking story of children suffering at the hands of irresponsible parents. I feel bad that this is a true story, I wish something could be done to help you when you were going through this. I suffered a different form of child abuse, I was beaten, but what you went through seems much worse.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the honesty of this poem, and the courage you showed in sharing this with us.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: Some poems go over my head because I have difficulty interpreting them, and this is one of those poems. It seems to take place in Autumn, the author is longing for December. The words were beautifully placed, despite the fact that I didn't completely understand the poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the font you used, it was really beautiful. I also appreciate that you mentioned what type of poem this is, that is helpful to your readers.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting story of revenge and justice, it was enjoyable to see a rape victim get her revenge, and to see the aggressor get what was coming to him.

Errors/Suggestions: In this sentence, there is one too many "n's" in happened: Then something incredible happenned.

What I liked: I like the fantasy element, and I liked seeing the victim get her revenge. I also felt that Brazil was an interesting setting for a story. Not all fantastic events would take place in the United States!
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Review of Vlad's Wife  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an action-packed story from beginning to end, and all based on historical events. Well done! I enjoyed this, and I remember learning about the Ottoman Empire in my art history class in college.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed the drama you managed to create from a historical event, this was as action-packed as a television show or a movie!
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Review of Morning Brew  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I was an avid coffee drinker before I had to stop drinking caffeine because it reacts to my high blood pressure medication, so I know how important that morning cup of Joe can be to a person. I don't blame you for writing a poem dedicated to your favorite drink.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like that you took the time to explain what a Cinquain is, that was helpful to me and I'm sure it was of interest to your readers. I also like the illustration that accompanied the text.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a beautiful poem with a positive message. I enjoyed it. I live in a house with a 6-year-old, and he brings me a lot of joy, so your words ring true.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how true your poem is, and I enjoyed the positive message.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem, the angst and eloquence reminds me a little of Edgar Allan Poe. Usually I have trouble interpreting most poetry, but I like poems like this because I can get a grip on what the author is trying to say.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: terms like "stygian depths" and "vault" seemed appropriate for this type of poem, some might say those words are too over the top or expected in a poem like this, but I thought you inserted them nicely into this piece. I also liked the fact that you took the time to explain what prompted this poem to be written, and what kind of poem it is, because this information is of interest to your readers.
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Review of LED BY A STAR  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is a beautifully rendered poem about the three wise men and the birth of Christ. It really makes you stop and think about what this season is really about.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: In addition to the poem itself, I enjoyed the colors you used, the green and red really gave this poem a festive feeling, just in time for Christmas!
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Review of Why Am I?  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem about a man questioning God about his own existence. Some of it went right over my head, but the discussion your character was having with God seemed deep and thought-provoking.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the general theme of a man questioning man's existence to God, this is something I'm sure many of us have pondered during our lifetime.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a cute story, your personality shined through in this. I enjoyed it, and I think this is the first poem I have read in this type of style. I guess I would label it as a "cute" style.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed the personality of the writer shining through on this poem, I hope to read more poetry like this in the futrure!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting post-apocolyptic cautionary tale, stories like this teach people to think about what we are doing to our world.

Errors/Suggestions: You started a sentence in the second paragraph with a lower-case letter, the first letter of the first woerd must be capitalized: he was called God In this sentence in the second paragraph, you're missing an apostrophe in the first word of the sentence: Lets leave this place, In the last sentence of the third paragraph, the first word of the sentence is missing an apostrophe, and the sentence doesn't end with a period, and needs one: Lets move on In the fourth paragraph, the first word of the sentence needs an apostrophe: Its a stroller, There were numerous other errors, you need to go through and edit this story exstensively.



What I liked: I enjoyed the message of this story, that humans could destroy their world if they don't shape up.
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Review of Trumpets Sound  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem that followed the Bible chronologically from the dawn of creation to the second coming of Christ. I found this poem uplifting, and the theme was of personal interest to me.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how you explained at the bottom of the page what kind of poem this is, most people don't bother to do this, but I feel that it is of interest to readers to learn the technical aspects of what type of poem was written by the poet.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a nice homage to Winter, I enjoyed the scenes I visualized through your poem. I live in California, so I enjoy reading about snowy winters elsewhere in the country.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the Winter scenery you described!
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Review of WEATHERED STONES  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a bitter-sweet poem about a graveyard and pondering the people who lie in the graves. I've done that myself, so I can personally relate to the theme of this poem. Some people might say this is spooky, but I enjoy pondering what the people named on the gravestones were really like before they died.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed how you breathed life into the people whose names were on the graves, you made them seem interesting.
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Review of REUNION  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a nicely written ghost story, I knew something had to be going on when the man was looking for his name on the memorial. Spooky, but not too scary, I liked that!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like ghost stories like this that have a happy ending, rather than being the type of story that is meant to scare people.
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Review of MID LIFE CRISIS  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an above average poem that I thoroughly enjoyed, the topic and subject of the poem was interesting to me because I'm 40, so part of the poem relates to me. Thank you for such an enjoyable read!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed the subject of this poem and the theme, especially since I could relate to and benefit from the advice in this poem. It's nice to know that I have some extra years to look forward to!
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