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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem, I like how it was shaped like a diamond. The subject you chose to write about was something we can all relate to, the human body. Taking the time to explain the type of poem you wrote shows that you went above and beyond in my opinion.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind. Good job!

What I liked: I like that you chose to explain what diamante form is to those of us who weren't in the know and wanted to learn more about it.


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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting concept to turn into a poem, the idea of using a day to metaphorically describe the different periods in the life span of a man. Normally, I have difficulty interpreting poetry, but I had no trouble understanding what you were trying to say with this. This poem actually interested me, which is a difficult task. Outstanding job!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I like how morning, noon, and night describe the different periods in your protagonist's life, I thought this was very creative!


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Review of The Monster  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a cute little story about a young girl on Easter morning. The events were plausible, and the reactions and emotions of the characters made sense.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors in this story, good job!

What I liked: I liked the reactions of the little girl, it made sense within the context of the story that she would be frightened like that over nothing. Her reactions were realistic, she seemed like a real little girl.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature, it was a nice homage to the process of boiling water. I think it's creative that you could take such an ordinary, every-day part of our lives and turn it into a poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't find any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the way you capitalized each word at the beginning of each line, that was a nice touch.
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Review of Howling Halloween  
Review by Riverd0g
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature. I enjoyed this poem, you did a good job with it. I liked the way it rhymed, and it sounded cool, too!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't find any technical errors of any kind, but you do have a broken link, it says invalid item.

What I liked: I like the color scheme you chose, green and orange, and I like the way you designed the poem. Good choices of wording, and nicely done!
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Review of Tired  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature. Nicely constructed poem, I think you did well with this. Amazing that you could convey so much with so few words.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how this expresses the Christmas season in such realistic terms! You got right to the point with this poem, good job.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature, and I was pleased with what I found. This was an interesting article, you brought up a good point, that there should be a system in place in every story about magic that describes the price of that magic, and the toll it takes on resources within the universe of the protagonist. I agree with you, that stories are more interesting if magic comes at a price. If you had unlimited magic at no cost, the story would be boring.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed the information you brought back from the con you attended, thank you for sharing and enlightening us, your readers.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature. This was an interesting and imaginative concept, I've read about UFO's over the years, and I never put much thought into them before now. You did an excellent job of suspending my disbelief. This was an interesting world you've woven together.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how seamless this world you've developed seems to fit together with our own.
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Review of Hanakotoba  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature. This was an interesting tale of adultery and seduction. It was interesting that a couple committing adultery while the man is married to another woman would find their situation romantic. It is almost as thought they don't feel that what they are doing is wrong.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I'm glad the woman decided to do the right thing and break it off after a while.
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Review of Spring Diamante  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature, this was a nice but sweet poem about Spring.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I loved the diamond shape you utilized, it was cool!
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Review of A Letter  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: Wow. I found this item with the dice feature, and the emotions I felt while reading this were intense. I'm sorry that your friend died, this was really sad. It wasn't your fault that this happened, it must've helped you emotionally to write this letter.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the honesty of your emotions conveyed in this letter, I can understand where you're coming from.
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Review of The Station  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature. This was a really weird, eerie story, it reminded me of the TV show "The Twilight Zone." I enjoyed the spookiness of it.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how this started out as a supernatural story, then it modified itself so it was open to be interpreted as a science fiction/science fantasy story.
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Review of Interrogated  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature, I found it to be an excellent short story full of drama.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the frightening realism of "The Doctor" character and this plausible situation.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature. This was a good religious essay about the afterlife, a sky full of people was a good metaphor.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the title and the religious metaphor it describes.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature. This was a cute little poem about bowling. I don't have a lot of experience with bowling, but I've played it enough to know that it can be a difficult game.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how honest and true this poem is! Bowling can be a tough game!
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Review of Hey Lilly  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature. At first, I couldn't figure out who Lilly was, I like how you left the reader in anticipation before we found out. This was a beautiful story of a father seeing his newborn daughter, you did a good job of putting it together. I'm a single man, but I hope to get married and have children some day, so stories like this are interesting to me.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the sentimental feelings this story aroused in me.
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Review of Urban Fantasy  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature. This poem was interesting to me because it tells a complete story, and I think that can be better than a rhyming poem in some situations. I've never been to Miami, but this poem gave me a tantalizing taste of what it could be like.

Errors/Suggestions: I spotted no technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed the stark realism of the dangers of Miami, it sounds like it can be an unfriendly place. I also like how you were able to tell a complete story within a poem.
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Review of Beyond the Golden  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature, I'm doing reviews for Simply Positive. This was an interesting look into a day in the life of an older couple, I found the struggle of this older woman interesting on some level. You have a talent for making ordinary characters interesting, and I applaud you for that.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed a day in the life of this older couple, keep up the good work!
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Review of Inside My Memory  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature. Normally, I have trouble interpreting poetry, but I was able to understand this one pretty well. It seems to be about someone who regrets having contact with someone in their past, maybe a former lover. We all have people like that in our past, so I could relate to this somewhat.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the way some of the lines repeated, like a song.
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Review of Digital Sneeze  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature. You put together a gripping, interesting story with just three simple prompts. This would definitely be a scary future, if it came true. I like your attention to detail, the dishes in Puerto Rico made it seem more realistic.

Errors/Suggestions: I spotted a technical error, at the end of the story, you have the ending bracket for italic, I think you need to go through and edit that.

What I liked: I liked the whole concept of this whacked out world where an artificial intelligence is taking over the world, you have quite an imagination.
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Review of Life  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member. This was a very vivid short story, that takes a concept and turns it into a snapshot or a short film in the reader's mind. The idea of describing the birth of a baby and showing the senses that he/she is experiencing for the first time was an original concept, and very well designed.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: It's amazing that something so short could have so much impact! I really liked this.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Plot and Content: Your mom is a member of the Simply Positive group, and your port was linked in her bio-block, so I decided to check out one of your stories. I read part one of this story, and since you wanted it rated with one star, I didn't feel that it would be fair to rate it so low, so I read this sequel, so I can give it a higher rating.

Errors/Suggestions: There were some punctuation issues, but I'm assuming that this was part of the style you were using.

What I liked: I enjoyed the interesting imagination that you have, even though this story is meant to be a joke the characters are still interesting.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member. This was an interesting article, I enjoyed it. A lot of people can relate to some of the things you mentioned, and the pop culture references such as American Idol interested me, I'm also a fan of that show.

Errors/Suggestions: You misspelled "Afgan" I think there's an "H" in there, so it would be spelled: "Afghan"

What I liked: I liked the positive message wrapped up in this item, you did a good job with this!
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Review of I am from  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member. I like poems about people's lives, and yours was interesting to me. I enjoyed reading about your origins, and it sounds like you've gone through some struggles in life.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I liked the honesty of the good and bad things you shared about your life.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member. This was an interesting piece, I can see what you were trying to do here. It was very violent, but the violence made sense within the context of the story, and wasn't just there for shock value.

Errors/Suggestions: I spotted these errors: As if time could read minds, they big clock stroke midnight. it should read "the clock struck midnight"

I found countless errors throughout this manuscript, you really need to go through and re-read it and catch all the errors. I also noticed an error in your bio-block.

What I liked: I enjoyed the action and drama you unveiled for the reader, you have an interesting writing style!
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