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Review of "Steps"  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member. This was an inspiring story, I could feel for the protagonist in the grip of her misfortune, and I liked the inspiring meeting she had with others who share the same disability as her. This story was very short, but very potent.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind. Good job!

What I liked: I like the growth you showed in the mother character, when she finally accepted that her daughter might not walk again but may need to learn to accept being in a wheelchair.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member, and I came across this item because it dealt with teenagers, and I like stories like this. Beth is an interesting character who is trying to do the right thing, but gets wrongfully blamed for being a meddler in her friend's life. I felt the title accurately fit the context of the story.

Errors/Suggestions: I spotted this mistake in this paragraph: I thought that it couldn't get much worse then this until he told me that he would keep her around until he started college "then" should be changed to "than" There were a couple of other errors, but after copying and pasting the first one, I couldn't re-find the other two.

What I liked: I liked how realistic you made this story feel, and how villainous you made josh seem. Some guys really are that ignorant, he seemed believable.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member. I enjoyed reading this poem, most poetry goes over my head because I have trouble interpreting it, but your poem was easy to understand. I like the contrast between the first example where everything was hectic, and the second example where everything was peaceful.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how peaceful the second example was, I'd have to agree that this is what life is about.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member, and I enjoyed this item, I feel you've done a good job with the acrostic. I like the two versions you presented, both are well-done.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the two different ways you spelled out Lornda with the two poems, but I have a question, what does that name mean?
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member. I enjoyed this item, poems about the seasons interest me for some reason. You were very adept at describing the changes of the seasons.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed the metaphorical ways you described the transitions of the seasons from summer to winter.
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Review of The Red Teacup  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member. This story a started out innocent enough, but the twist ending took me by surprise! Well done, you did an excellent job with this. To tell such a dramatic story in 300 words takes a high level of skill.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any errors at all, kudos to you for doing such a good job!

What I liked: I like how this story reminded me of the way Alfred Hitchcock wrote stories.
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Review of Twin poem  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I didn't know you were a member of Simply Positive! That's how I found your port, when I do my Simply Positive reviews, I try to pick only members of Simply Positive. You really took on a challenge writing this, I didn't know you were interested in subjects outside the realm of giantess fiction. I think you did an excellent job!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any errors, but you asked for suggestions, so if you made it into a 14-line poem it would be a sonnet, why not try that? There are other rules for writing a sonnet, maybe you could look those up. I learned about sonnets in my creative writing class in college.

What I liked: I liked the majesty of your poem, it made the universe seem so vast writing about such powerful forces as the sun and the moon. Great job!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member. I came across this item while looking through your port because I wanted to know more about this person you wrote a tribute poem to. She seems like a really good person, but I was left with some questions. Did you ever meet her in real life? From the sound of the poem, it seems like you may have never met her, and only knew her over the Internet. Also, did she pass away? If she did, I'm sorry to hear that.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed the descriptions of what a good person she was. There should be more people like her in the world!
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Review of Romeo and Juliet  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member, and I was attracted to this item because I love the story of Romeo and Juliet, and I enjoyed your rendition of their tragedy.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how you put your own spin on this, and didn't just repeat what occurred in the play.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member, and I found this item entertaining and interesting! The way you described the climate I could just picture it in my mind, and the old woman character was eccentric and interesting. One thing I'm not sure of, did the man in the story kill the elderly woman, or did she die of natural causes?

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the spooky surprise ending!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member, and I enjoyed this item. It was a sad tale of two people finding each other again after some time had passed, and time was good to one of them, but not to the other. This tale was true to life.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed the contrast of the woman's life compared to that of her ex-boyfriend, it was kind of sad, but interesting and realistic.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member, and I was attracted to this item because it is about space. You did a good job making the words rhyme, and the subject of the poem was fascinating.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed the way you described the Milky Way, I liked the colors and the cadence of this poem.
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Review of Lonely  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you are a fellow Simply Positive member, and I was attracted to this poem because it is about being alone, and I'm 41 and still single, so I can relate to this. I don't feel as lonely as you describe in this poem, but I can understand how you feel.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed reading about someone else's perspective on the emotion of loneliness.
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Review of Forever In Love  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member. I enjoy reading love poems, and I enjoyed this one. It sounds like you are truly in love, and blessed to be with the one you're with. You sound so happy that it seems almost too good to be true; I don't personally know any couples that are this happy together, but if you are, then more power to you, I'm glad there are couples like you in the world.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed the awesome grandness of the love you expressed, I hope to find true love like that some day!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member. I enjoy reading love poems, and I liked reading a poem like this written by someone who has been with their partner for 40 years, I thought I might learn something. You're lucky to have found someone you could be with for so long.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked reading of how strong your bond is, and I liked the metaphor of the unbroken knot.
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Review of Fleeting  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member. This item was interesting and realistic, showing the dysfunctional relationship between a young woman and her husband. It was sad, but so true to life.

Errors/Suggestions: In the beginning of the story, it is kind of unclear who is speaking, you spoke of Zuri and Butch at their grandmother's house, but then you had one of them speaking and it was unclear if it was Zuri or the grandmother. Also, it was at first unclear if the grandmother was Zuri's or Butch's. In one section of this story, there are two paragraphs that are stuck together; normally, you skip a line between paragraphs, but in that spot, you need to skip a line there, too.

What I liked: I like the sense of realism. Butch and Zuri felt like real people.
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Review of my confession  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member. This was an interesting item, a confession to God. Some of the things you claim to be guilty of are things all of us can relate to.

Errors/Suggestions: I found this mistake: {c:red]I take things to far The word "to" should be changed to "too"

Another mistake: I do not know were this is going, The word "were" should be changed to "where"

What I liked: I liked your honesty, if most people could admit their wrongs like you did, there would be less problems in the world.
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Review of The Ant Farm  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member, and I chose to review you particularly because you are a mod and I'm trying to review all case colors this week. This item caught my eye because I'm interested in how powerful people treat or mistreat people who are weaker than them. It was fascinating how the spoiled rich boy didn't care for the ants under his charge. There are too many powerful people in this world who think like this boy.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't catch any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the sympathetic character of his sister, at least someone spoke up for the ants.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a scary as well as funny short story with a twist ending that I didn't see coming. For such a short story, this really packed a punch.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the twist ending, the true intention of the "burglars" caught me by surprise, as well as their fate. This story was well-written, and could be used as an example to show people how to write flash fiction properly.
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Review of Harry's Prairie  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I enjoyed this story, and I liked the environmental feel of it, despite that you did this from a prompt. I also enjoyed the surprise ending. We've all had well-meaning neighbors or friends who tried to "help" us that way.

Errors/Suggestions: "Xeric" is a word I know in the comic book industry that is a grant created by one of the co-creators of the "Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles" for new up and coming comic book artists to receive money to publish their first comic book. I don't know how you could've worked that word into a story like this, but I feel you didn't understand the meaning of the word when you used it in this story. You should've Googled it to find out what the word meant.

What I liked: I liked the way you had the prompt words in bold lettering, so the readers know when and where you had placed those words in the story. I'm also glad you showed what prompted this story, and what words you were supposed to use, I hate it when people write a story that came from a prompt and they don't share the prompt words.
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Review of A Ghost Story  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I found your port because you're a fellow Simply Positive member. I enjoyed this piece, I like true ghost stories and I completely believe you that this is the truth.

Errors/Suggestions: I found this error: and they engineer lit off the sea chest pumps "they" should be changed to "the"

What I liked: I like true ghost stories in a military environment, it reminds me of things my grandfather told me about the Marine Corps. during World war two. (He never told me anything this good, though!)
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Review of Lesson in Manners  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I like the setting of your story, I live in the Los Angeles area, so being swept away to a house in the country where I could see through the eyes of the protagonist and see deer from the front porch was a nice change of pace. If this is your regular every day life, you're extremely lucky.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I definitely liked the setting, and the theme of having the tables turned was interesting as well. I loved the deer.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: It was fun reading a sonnet you wrote as part of a school assignment, and I'm glad you had fun writing it. I wrote a sonnet for the first time in college in a creative writing class, it was hard, but it was fun. Your sonnet had fourteen lines, like it should have, and it made sense. If you like writing science fiction, you should try writing a science fiction sonnet next.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I'm glad you fell in love with writing poetry, despite not initially liking it when you started out writing the sonnet.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a sad story of child labor, I was rooting for her to escape. I was curious to know what era this story takes place in, it could be in the modern era in another country, or it could be in the past in Europe or America.

Errors/Suggestions: I spotted two lines that should have had a space between them, because you skipped lines between paragraphs, but there was one line that was below another line: "Bethany! What is it that is taking you so long with the thread?”
I told him, “I am hurrying along as fast as my hands will let me, Mr. Pithy, but I have been working without a break for some time now!” There should be a space between the line that ends with "so long with that thread?" and "I told him"

What I liked: I liked the sense of hope the protagonist has in wanting to escape despite her miserable surroundings.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I like poems about the struggles in life, that is something we can all relate to. If this poem is unfinished, I encourage you to finish it, you are a good poet.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't find any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the sense of hope in finding peace that you wrote about, that contrasts with the struggles you wrote about and gives this poem balance.
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