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Review by Riverd0g
Rated: E | (4.0)
This was an interesting story in a genre I’m not too familiar with. I had never read a my little pony story before, but you did a good job of making the reader familiar with the pony characters.

There is a spot where you wrote nopony instead of no pony, I think that could be corrected, and there is a spot where a sentence doesn’t skip a line where it should, It was right after parenthesis, the sentence begins with: His story was true.

All in all, this was a good little story, keep up the good work.
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Review by Riverd0g
Rated: E | (3.0)
An interesting story, but there are some errors. 1944 was World War 2, not World War 1.

Aside from that, the narrative of going to garage sales was well written, and conveyed a sense of mood that brings the reader into the story.
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Review by Riverd0g
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
It’s unbelievable how quickly I’ve gotten responses to technical issues on this site, sometimes in the middle of the night WDC time. I really appreciate the time and effort Storymaster and Storymistress put into this website.

Keep up the good work, and let’s hope for another twenty years, at the very least!

—-Sam
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Review by Riverd0g
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am currently trying to lose weight, so the title of this piece caught my eye. I was wondering what would happen to the obese man, but the ending caught me by surprise. I found it hard to feel sorry for him, because he had no remorse about his condition and was doing nothing to get healthier, but he is a fictional character, so I guess I took him a little too literally. The ending was shocking, but interesting. I think you did a good job!
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Review of Dark Passion  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I know you're female, but I'm male and I'm submissive, so I can relate to this. I enjoyed this poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the way you wrote about your partner's dark passions, and how you wanted to give in to that passion. I like the thirst you described, and the way you wanted to worship your partner.
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Review of Faithlessness  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting article, I respect your beliefs about humanity and society. It sounds like the struggles you went through in life have shaped your beliefs, I too struggled in life because of child abuse, but I have grown beyond that and I feel that there is hope for humanity.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I am glad you have faith despite all that you've been through.
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Review of Emma  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Plot and Content: I thought this was an interesting concept, the idea of a girl dying and the narrator describes how her life could've been better if she had not taken her life. For that, I gave you a higher rating.

Errors/Suggestions: I found quite a few errors, there were missing quotation marks and some words were misspelled. Here is a mistake: and she to blames herself The word "to" should be changed to "too"

As a suggestion, I think this should be expanded, I would like to see more of this story. It would make a great short story of a thousand or two-thousand words.

What I liked: I liked how you described the reasons she shouldn't have taken her life, it goes to show that people who are suicidal should take inventory of their lives and be appreciative of all the blessings they have.
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Review of A Fall Afternoon  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I enjoyed the peace and harmony of the scene you described, and you really went into a lot of detail about the milkshake. I love milkshakes! Was this day at the park something that actually happened to you, or were you making this up?

Errors/Suggestions: I caught a mistake at the beginning: Fall my favorite season It should read: Fall is my favorite season. You need to add an "is" to that sentence.

What I liked: I liked the tranquility and harmony of the day you described. I wish I could go there and experience it for myself.
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Review of The Wish  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a cute story about a child catching a butterfly, and her belief involving making a wish. I've never heard of this belief, but it sounds like something that young people would believe in. If you made up this belief yourself, you're very talented.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't catch any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the belief about catching the butterfly and not hurting it and making a wish. It's very innocent and cute.
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Review of Whisper  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I assume those three words you're talking about are "I love you," but I'm not completely sure, so correct me if I'm wrong. I agree with the theme of this poem, that words can kill, or drive someone to kill.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the strong emotions of your characters!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I agree with your point of view, I don't let negative reviewers bother me too much. I've had people give me one star because they didn't like the sub-genre I write in, it had nothing to do with the quality of the story.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like your wisdom in dispensing advice! I like the way you broke down the list of the different types of reviewers here. There are definitely some helpful people on this site, and I think they outnumber the negative people.
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Review of Listen  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. If this is a true story, you have my sympathy. I feel bad for what you went through. I was a victim of physical abuse at the hands of my mother when I was growing up, so I can kind of relate.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the resolution of all this, that you were taken away from the abusive situation.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I liked this little story, it's fun to read about other people's childhoods. Annie sounds like a spirited child. If you have more stories from your childhood like this, you should share them!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how you and Annie would go watch the geese, it sounds like you had a good childhood.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I like acrostics, it takes skill to make each letter into a sentence that has meaning. I enjoyed this poem even though it was short.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like poems with a positive message, you really summed up what it means to be a mod. I agree that reading and reviewing improves our abilities.
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Review of Verdant Visions  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I enjoyed this ode to Ireland and St. Patrick's day. I had to look up a couple of your word prompts because I was unfamiliar with them, but that's okay because I learned something.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked all of the synonyms for the word green! I also like the way this poem made me feel, it was soothing. Also, thanks for taking the time to explain more about this poem at the bottom of the page, more poets should take the time to do that.
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Review of Fat Girl  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I was attracted to this item after encountering it because I am overweight, and am currently trying to lose weight. I have been somewhat successful so far, but I still have a ways to go. The character you wrote about seems to be a lot fatter than me, but I hope there can be hope for someone like that.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind, but as a suggestion, maybe you could offer some hope for her and have her trying to lose weight, and maybe imply that being fat isn't her destiny.

What I liked: I liked your brutal honesty in your exploration of this overweight woman, you seems to be honest about your observations without being intentionally cruel.
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Review of Love's Embrace  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. You did a good job of describing love in all it's glory, I enjoyed this poem. I like the words you used to describe love, caring, respect and desire. I agree with your view on love.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: Finally! A poem I can interpret easily! Usually I have a hard time interpreting poems, but this poem about love was easy for me to understand.
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Review of (un)Fitness  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. You did a good job of following the prompt. As an avid gym-goer I like reading anything about the gym. I am also out of shape like your character, but my goal is to become aesthetic.

Errors/Suggestions: I found this mistake: My motivation was quiet clear. "quiet" would make more sense if it was changed to "quite"

What I liked: I'm glad you posted the prompt at the bottom of the page so readers know why you wrote about this topic, too many writers don't take the time to do that.
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Review of Review Please  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I actually agree with your opinion about guns in this article, I think making them illegal would be a mistake, because criminals would acquire guns some other way, while law-abiding citizens would have no way to defend themselves. I have felt this way for a long time.

Errors/Suggestions: I found an error: The reader can quickly understand his essay is bout gun rights and gun ownership. The word "bout" is misspelled and needs to have an "a" added to the beginning of the word to make it "about"

What I liked: I liked the theme of this article, that making guns and ammunition illegal would be a mistake.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a realistic story about a wounded war veteran who returns home after getting out of the military. I found it interesting, because my Dad is a veteran who spent four years in the Marine Corps. I like the contrast between how mean the female driver who honked at him was, and the friendliness of Cristy.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I like how you gave him hope in life by meeting Christy. I also like that this story was set in Ventura, I live in California and I know Ventura is a nice area from passing through there from time to time on my way back to L.A. from San Luis Obispo.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This poem was short and sweet, with so few lines you really packed a punch! Not only that, but I like chocolate too, and I think it is a perfect choice for the subject of a poem!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind!

What I liked: I like that first line, it is very poetic. It seemed to me like a line written by a professional! I also like that you took the time to explain what type of poem this is, more people should take the time to do that, it's a nice touch.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. You did a good job of making the oak desk seem alive, and the woman you described seemed vividly real, right down to her hairy arms.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I'm glad you included information about what prompted you to write this, too many people don't take the time to do that, and I think it's of interest to the readers, I know I personally enjoy learning of the prompts for some of the stuff written here at WDC!
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Review of Jimmy Moses  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was an interesting story, I like how shaky and scared the guy was at the beginning of the story. It would have been interesting to learn more about what happened.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind, but as a suggestion, I think you should expand this story and give more information about what the protagonist experienced that made him so shaky.

What I liked: I like how initially the word aliens implied aliens from outer space, at least that is what the reader assumes, only to have it actually mean aliens from Mexico.
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Review of Amanda  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I have tried writing extremely short stories before, so I know how much more difficult they can be compared to longer stories where you don't have a word limit. I think you wrote this story effectively, and conveyed the horror your character experienced adequately.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how short and to the point this story was, and I liked the surprise ending!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I like poems and items about God and what he does for us, even though this was written from the perspective of someone from a different Christian denomination than me. I was raised Southern Baptist, and I plan on converting to Catholic, so the Jehovah's Witnesses denomination has some belief systems that I don't agree with. That said, I still think there are things we can all learn from each other, and I read those Watchtower pamphlets sometimes and there has been good information in there in the past.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed how you mentioned that God solves our problems when we need him most, I have found that to be true in my personal life.
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