Whoopie! It is grand! I was tripping over my chair with peals of laughter. Oh, my gosh! does that mean that your invisible presence was there in the vicinity.
Best things:
The whole poem got me going from start to finish at one go
General:
Too good
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Sarah "Ideas are the cornerstone of Innovation"
This article is so necessary, and enligthening. One does not think of copright infringements often as unlike the record industry that keeps track of music downloads, there is no organization that keeps track of pirated images, or pirated text even. This is sad. However much Digital Asset Management has evolved it still is yet to control content copying or image sharing.
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Sarah "Ideas are the cornerstone of Innovation"
Vibha, this is the second piece of yours that I am reviewing. And you've painted a vivid picture. I can't paint at all, but when I see the wide canvas, I always wish I could. When I see a Van Gogh, I curse my lack of creative imagery. I could see your ardent desire to paint and how you made into reality through this writeup.
Technical:
Good.
General:
Very interesting read
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Sarah "Ideas are the cornerstone of Innovation"
My dearest Mars, Can I ever say cheer? Can one thank you say it all that I feel? This unspoken bond is captured in the glory of verse by you, madam and I am so blessed. For a friend like you is a hidden treasure.
Technical:
Amazing and smooth flow of words
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Wow !indeed, for friendship that is always and emotions that shine like a pearl that is washed by the sea water and gleams with the moonbeam
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Sarah "Ideas are the cornerstone of Innovation"
Gosh! What a story! I just could imagine the chocolate melting in my mouth. The raspberries, the orange, and the other ingredients, oh, just not the mint though. Like you, I am no big fan of Vanilla, and mint.
Technical:
Absolutely wonderful writing Excellent narrative. Good tone.
General:
Amazing depiction
Thank you,
Sarah "Ideas are the cornerstone of Innovation"
I liked the parallels drawn in this poem and the questions raised.
Technical:
Liked the meter in the poem Good rhyming Only suggestion I have for lines that start with: "Why he/his" is that they seem disjointed, for instance: "Why he trusted so much on his vision?" could be "why trust so much in his vision?" - just a suggestion so as to make it more elegant and certainly not an attempt to take away from the essence of your wording
General:
Very expressive
Thank you,
Sarah "Ideas are the cornerstone of Innovation"
Dear Haidz, as an Indian, I was so stunned when I read this piece, you have put India on such a high platform and it seems like you are truly enamored by the beauty and spirit of India.
Technical:
Wonderful use of language - flowing, and glowing
General:
A very enthusiastic poem that details the mirade colors of India
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Sarah "Ideas are the cornerstone of Innovation"
I could picture the tender love and care that sprouts the seeds of life, hope and good cheer
Technical:
"It is very difficult ... From you to .." - a slight change in the way the second sentence starts from the first could help. "growed" - should that not be "grew"
General:
it is a beautiful poem that has a lot of depth
Thank you,
Sarah "Ideas are the cornerstone of Innovation"
Dear Anne, this is such an amazing poem about the positive influence one who believes in us has on us. The journey of self-revelation is an ardrous one and someone who comes along to motivate us and allow us to realize our potential are like blessings. The best things in life come free and unasked and so also the one who can guide us and inspire us. Kudos!
Meg, What a perfect picture you drew with those words of each of us that is hooked on to Writing.com. Amazing and it is so expressive. Reminds me so much of some of my days and my friend's here too. Can't wait to see what others have to say about what we write, and can't wait to see what others write and review it too ... a correct depiction of events on Writing.com
A wonderful use of words. A very expressive write-up. Made me feel the wind and all its measures.
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8 "grow red cheeks" seems to jar a little bit
* "That would have made him laughed," should read as "that would have made him laugh"
* wheverever is one word
A very sweet and delightful little poem. So perfect few words. Bring out the joy of a little baby who is crawling all about. Wish you could have written more, but, then, probably not, since it would be one too many. I could just picture the baby and feel such immense joy. Kudos!
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The whole poem got me going from start to finish at one go 
