I think it's a great idea. I have been looking through few other websites and posting your link in facebook and mocospace, as well as myspace, and dailystrength website. I enjoy writing just as a good cheap therapy to get your thoughts and feelings out. I told few of my friends about this too. So, hopefully they will join htis awesome community. I recently joined and so far, I am getting really good comments and suggestions for my writing. One day i hope to be a writer of poetry and write a memoir of my crazy life. I already started writing chapter one on here, any suggestions would be great. Never wrote a book before, I think it might be something wonderful and inspiring for other people as well as will ake me into deeper learning about who I am today. thank you, larisa
I really like your poem and descriptive words that you used to describe your pain, you did show instead of tell that what makes a good poem. Though I think maybe similes/metaphors will bring the poem a lot out as you will compare the emotional pain you are feeling to something towards the nature. I hope this helps, larisa
Welcome to read my poems and any suggestions would be greatly appreciated.
Wow, I really enjoyed reading your poem its very deep. Would you mind reading my poem 30 seconds until it was done any suggestions would be greatly appreciated. Thank you, larisa
Wow, I really enjoyed reading your poem its really deep and I can feel emotions flowing through it. Great job. keep writing.. would you mind readin my poem 30 seconds until it was done-Angels
thank you, larisa
Hi Anya,
I am not sure if it's a poem or not, i sounds more like a short paragraph to me. Maybe you can make this poem with comparison and similes, and bring it in towards the end of it with inspiration and make it as a learning experience. but It was more like a paragraph then a story.. if you maybe follow a few of the suggestions i would be happy to read it again.
I liked your poem that was so sweet for you to write a poem to your girl. I would suggest maybe using similes/metaphors and imagery.. if you add that to it would be really kool poem. I miss my fiance :(
I liked your poem the final hour. The words you used went really well together and description was well done. Maybe though instead of story at the end you can write history. just a suggestion.. hope it helps overall was great. larisa
Sounds really kool... it's different but I like it. Seems like it could be about zchizophrenia and the voices you hear in your head telling you to do something, but you are confused by it.
The poem gave me goosebumbs, I felt and feeling still after finished reading the poem what you are meaning. The imagery you are bringing through the poem is amazing the phrase..
I am already serving my time, give me no more pain.. I am doing time with my man and yes he hurt me so bad and broke the trust he is recovering addict. I still believe in him and have hope and faith, that we can be best friends again like we used to be. We been together almost 5 yrs will be in December.. and I thought moving back to seattle will be an easiest way to get away and forget. To be honest in my heart it tells me this love is real and unconditional and it's not easy to get away as I thought it would be. I believe that we can take the past as a learning experience and even though he might be locked up work on our relationship from both sides and make is stronger. He is already taking those steps to get better, but sorry for rambling. I will tell you more if you would want me too. Thank you agian so much for reading my poem rainbow because it means so much to me. Your poem is amazing it touched not just my heart when I read it but my soul as well.
I really liked your piece of writing and I so agree with you that relationships some are harder then others. Some people think of them as a game, but really they take a lot of work and dedication. Write on!!
I am not sure of what you are trying to say here, but to some point I can relate. Is your hubby in prison. I think its a good poem and it comes within deep in you. It's very original maybe use more similes/metaphors to bring out the poem a bit more. Overall, i really like it. Keep expressing the way you feel as it's the best way to heal:)
I just read your poem and I felt the deepness of it and the moment on how you felt and what you felt. Though this poem can be so much deeper if you put more thought to it and similes with metaphors, where you can compare and contrast and instead of writing the word image.. make an actual images from creating the words. Overall, its real good.
I liked the way that you used similes compared and contrasted. The flow of the poems is great as well. I think personally its a touching poem and I can feel that love you are feeling for that person and how it's easier for you to write it on the paper then acutally trying to make out words infront of that person face to face. I feel you.
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