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339 Public Reviews Given
342 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I'll comment about your story, characters, descriptions (narrative), and point out errors if you have any. I won't tear you down for small mistakes but I will point out anything I notice. I'm always polite in my reviews, I will do follow ups if necessary and I'll certainly be thorough if that's what you're looking for.
I'm good at...
Characterisation - I can instantly point out if your character's believable. And I can also help with show and tell if your story needs more balance.
Favorite Genres
Fantasy, science fiction, comedy, romance, mystery, action/adventure
Least Favorite Genres
Historicals and political stories without humour or a twist. Overtly long non-fiction too.
Favorite Item Types
Short stories *Heart*
I will not review...
Well, there isn't much I won't review. I don't mind horror and erotica (no matter how hardcore) as long as there's a meaningful story. Please note - I will not review a random, weird fantasy that makes me feel like a perv *Bigsmile*
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Review of Should I Jump?  
Review by Tiger Cub 🔱
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Hey! I saw your piece on the newbie page and decided to give you a review. Please know that this is my personal opinion and you're free to ignore anything you don't like.

Your storyline was fast moving. You don't waste anytime, do you? :) It was a tad bit on the teen side to classify as adult - especially since you mentioned junior high. Ambri's character seems well thought out. But I would suggest putting in more emphasis on the descriptions - I don't know what the school, her room or even what Leighton look like. While it is good to know what's in your character's head when you write in first person POV, it also matters how she perceives her surroundings.

There were a few lines that confused me in the last paragraph of the first half. You might want to simplify your sentences there.

My favourite line was "I would live in a card board box if I was capable of staying dry and it was sanitary." :)

Overall, I liked your piece. If you polished it up a bit and ran a few edits it'll be perfect. Please don't hesitate to ask for help and thank you for sharing your work.

Have a nice day!

-TG
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Review by Tiger Cub 🔱
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello!

I'm a newbie and I got your piece by random review - so please don't expect a great and wise review from me - I'm still learning the ropes.
Lovely piece - quite emotional - and it got me thinking if it actually happened? If not, you're a great story teller and you've captured a lot of feelings in a well written piece. It was quite interesting to think how someone could fall so in love with a person they've never met before and it made me smile. My only suggestion would be to break down your sentences - some are way too long and adding too many commas makes it sound long winded. But otherwise it flows very well and I liked how you kept it in first person and referred to Myra as 'you'.
Thank you for sharing a nice story and have a good day :)

-TG
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Review by Tiger Cub 🔱
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!
As you probably must have noticed, I'm a newbie. So I can't offer any deep, meaningful grammar based reviews. Just my honest opinion as a reader.
And I can say - I agree with you a hundred percent.
Love may not be about hot water in my case but it's certainly worth the sacrifice :) This was a beautiful piece with a lot of quirky statements that made it an interesting read. Thank you for sharing!

-TG
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Review by Tiger Cub 🔱
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey!
I laud your bravery to take up such a daunting challenge for the sake of literature. Future generations shall speak of you in great reverence for establishing the first law of showerdom.
Clothes dont go with body wash.
Seriously? I couldnt stop laughing :)
Lovely attempt and while it was about as deep as The Fox, it was refreshing change (pun intended). You should be so proud - I found no grammatic errors or punctuation issues. Only one thing - the last paragraph is in present tense while the rest is in past. Other than that, beautiful ; )
I enjoyed reading it and I hope to read more from you...

keep writing!


-TG
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Review of secrets  
Review by Tiger Cub 🔱
Rated: E | (4.0)
Not fair! Now you've left me wondering what's so embarrasing that she didnt want you to post it.
Anyway well written. A nice tale with nothing in it for me :( but still. Just one thibg though. I think in the first line it would be better if you used that started with instead of starting. keeps the tense consistent.

keep writing!
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Review of That's you  
Review by Tiger Cub 🔱
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!

I'm new to WDC and I got to review your piece randomly.

Might I begin by saying wow. Just wow.

This was a beautiful poem, very well written and with so much emotion. It flows so well and it has such a strong tone. I only have minimal suggestions - and that's because I'm a perfectionist, so please excuse me. Last line of first stanza - I think you meant soul's mind.
I see you through a tunnel, this darkness need a fire. (I think there should be a comma in the middle.)
Times hands - I think you meant time's hands.
But otherwise - wow. I love reading poetry (not that great at writing it) and you just made my day. Lovely piece and I hope to read more of your work.

-TG
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Review of wake  
Review by Tiger Cub 🔱
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello!

That's my morning too, only you can factor in annoying alarm clock, drooling dog and frizzy hair. While I agree with your poem - I can't ignore the grammar. It's a nice piece but you'll be taken more seriously if you fix a few things.
'i' should always be capitalised. I think you meant too and to in almost all the places.The second stanza isn't broken down into lines - it makes it a little hard to understand. Also, it might need a little more punctuation. (I can help with that later on if you want.) In the last line, 'ill' means sick. You mean I will, so use I'll.
Otherwise, it's a good poem and I can totally relate.
Good luck and keep writing!
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Review by Tiger Cub 🔱
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!

This is the first piece I read on WDC and you're my first review here :) It was a lovely piece of poetry and I enjoyed reading it. I couldn't agree with you more - the adverb is constantly edited out of fiction as it slows down the pace. Easy, nice read - and I have no real suggestions. Just one (and that's because I'm a punctuation freak) - there should be a full stop after 'soundly'.

Good luck and I look forward to seeing more of your work!
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