October 10, 2009
How about that NOBEL? Sorry, Lee, still excited since yesterday morning.
Now, onto your review suggestions, reader reaction, author-to-author writing hints ...
For: MEASURE TWICE, CUT ONCE .. decent title, BTW.
Okay, from hand written notes in chronological sequence --- let's hope. A bit iffy as the scrap paper is on the back of THE NY TIMES ... blank add space .. oh well
As authors of fiction, Lee, most writers forget a few of the basics in tense & grammar involving verbs & specific predicate fabrication. Too many infinitives spoils our eloquent spicy broth of froth bubbling about inside any story.
TEFF dubs the entire menu or kittencaboodle of umpteen action words --- "Verb Sandwiches." Basically think of a real sandwich. Rye, mayo, horseradish, onions, tomato ... Now think of a paragraph containing sentences of all these condiments.
Then, as you whiz backward to your hook opening sentence do this ... redefine phrases ...
Always decide as the storyteller: ME: you lead reader's. Eventually, an author's experiences throughout a piece rather knows --- when exactly time for the writer to indeed lead and persuade. The audience is ready to be led, Lee.
Okay at: seemed to get heavier --- grew heavy/ heavier
was standing --- stood
get out of here --- leave
As noted these center on get. Shall post a piece on "get" from "Invalid Item"
on "MOFFETT FILES TAKE FIVE" Sat.
Not every predicate in the English Language needs the word get. Even President O used "get" He said in the Rose Garden Fri morning --- get an education --- this is pursue an education.
So, now ... you've deduced all of those.
Next: AT: "... one of the boys jumped ship ..."
A chance and perfect spot to enter into present tense, Thomson. Use: jumps ship.
Of: "get the he__ out of there"
Forget get although relative slang is up to the author. You can keep the emphasis on the h-word by centering on speed --- fast as he__ ... See?
OKay, not all stories need be told in perfect tenses. Grab that advice and write on & on with more space for great vocab choices, more coloquial slant & respect for readers whom attempt prying their minds away from have, had, seem and little old get.
Up to "Karen." As soon as an author, any author, picks a second character with the same letter in the caps --- digression tempts readership toward --- which K? So, try Annie. Or anything you like.
Well best good luck. Enjoy Autumn.
Simply needs major cut backs, vocab spice, speed all known in authorship reality as revision/ re-edit/ revamp.
Thanks --- for reading.
ATTENTION ---> PRP (PublicREVpg) Advice rendered here easily applies to many other novice authors on WDC. Easily fixed, simply takes time.
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