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Review of Not so Sweet  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

August 12, 2009

"NOT SO SWEET from the portfolio of gifted author, Marcus presents a tale of both friendship which prevails, and a chocolate present which takes time and pre-thought in the gifting. While, scenes and dialogue compliment this turn around and young crush for the characters, Mae and Delcine. The latter a catchy creation which sticks with the reader, like the story itself. Good one!" Rev sent from April Sunday

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Review of Goin' a Fishin'  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (4.0)
August 5, 2009

Hi Sun Dancer ... In you poem one might relive flirtatious aspects
which GOIN' A FISHIN' provides. How thoughtful to post it. Touching vivid scene found here in a heartwarming dance for anglers.

Cordially, TEFF

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
JULY, 23, 2009

CONGRATULATIONS to Redtowrite for placing first in the week of July (deadline July 18} for FRONTLINER GROUP'S ---> WORKS OF THE WEEK CONTESt.

WHO WAS MY FATHER relates in under 2100 words this sad, fiction tale of a new Daddy's instant death in a car crash. While the mother of a premature baby, pulls herself together and details in first person narration the life of her daughter.

Good one. Sad, heartfelt and realistic.

Thanks, Kat!

Cordially, April Sunday
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Review of Poetic Serenity  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (4.5)
July 13, 2009

"When I gaze into your eyes
I feel myself quite mesmerized"

opens the poem POETIC SERENITY from Dragon Blue.

Hey, Blue, you really out did yourself with this one where all stanzas contain the perfect ending word rhymes which are well chosen as well. The poem sings, is easily read and conveys a romantic tale. Thanks for this one.

Cordially, TEFF

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Review of This I Believe  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


THURSDAY, JULY 2 - The countdown begins.

Morning, Buxton. If I'm a creep for talking about rain one-on-one with you, so sorry. Yeah, it poured again last night here in SE Penn's Woods. We've so much it's become acceptable. Sorry, hon ... eerie blogs on "Invalid Item" 
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HI PRP!

{user:judity {user:judity} totally comes across, fitting into 510 specifically chosen words a code of living, which babyboomers often share.

I'm onboard with the one about cats. However, draw the line with Dobermans.
Well, you know me.

THIS I BELIEVE by astonishing, tell-all, author JA BUXTON is a sitewide July MUST READ.

Here, without pulling one single punch a truth (a belief) pivots to the foreground of living life. As we know it.

Oh, almost forgot, Judy, Judy, Judy ...

When you gave up Walt Disney here at the end ... well laughing & cackling so hard ensues at this moment in time ... Whitey ran for the screen door .. hollering MEOW! MEOW!

But, you, MS BUXTON are the absolute CAT'S MEOW!

Signed TEFF

REOPEN ... featuring rain blogs

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Commenting on -- The silliest thing ... your fourth paragraph for this essay (thanks for not using the term short story for a compostion, my dear ...) Inspires a pen from me, one to think on,

Par: starting: "My personal belief ... is that God has a sense of humour --- IS INDEED SOMETHING TO WRITE ABOUT.

llllllllll Sidebar: Does he give it to us to share? Yes, amen, sister. You know they don't ever give me indepth rewards anymore, despite an emphasis on LIT and the English Language, per se. Sorry. My feet were born wet.llllllllllllllll

Authors in the know ... know humor is a gift to record, as Judy is fully aware.

AND in the hook par ... your touch and style shine when even the neighbors of our youths in small town America (or city 'hoods) were prone to help "all the kids." Spanking was in then, as well raised voice corrections.

Ahh, well ... another excellent thought provoking pen.

Buxton, for the love of God, you honestly restore one's faith in humamity with your fine writing.

PS --- BELIEVE IT!

AMEN!

HAPPY FOURTH OF JULY!

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Review of untitled  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (3.5)


Saturday June 27, 2009
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Rev from: April Sunday wc member since 2004

Hello to maribel johnson With a cordial welcome to www.writing.com.

This poem is easily read aluod, where emhasis on chosen the poet's rhyming words are keen and sounds fantastic.

At: "The sound of your voice" one is pulled back a bit in time and forward also on second time read.

THE SUGGESTIONS:

Typo for fisrt person singular, line 2 -- use I consistently.

Second typo near conclusion, at: eachother.

Well, have the summery weekend, Marijay.

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Review of Summer Father  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (3.0)

JUNE 26, 2009
REV sent from April Sunday

Good morning, Charlotte ~ Chasing Rabbits

WELCOME to www.writing.com. Sailing around and surfing the site will turn up many surprises for you, so enjoy.

Of your flash paragraph, SUMMER FATHER, here the author stays to the point, explains the situation of a vacation.

Now, as it is, this could be expanded and would serve as a hook paragraph as it is written, for a short story. If you have a mind to, of course. Imagine here we are in a world of spam essays often found in our real e-mails, bleeps, blurbs, tweets and yet this one came off fine at less than 70 single words.

Great summer ahead and good luck in all your writing and reading adventures.
Cordially, TEFF

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (3.0)
June 26, 2009
Rev from: April Sunday


Good morning, celticevampire with a heartfelt welcome to www.writing.com.

Your poem NO LONGER AN INNOCENT might cadge a better presentation by keeping the punctuation consistent.

The sum seems to be that someone (the accused) is being spoken to as guilty of gossip or worse. Which is often the way with poetry, of course, when meanings are not evident and remain allusive.

RHYME ON!! Enjoy the site.

Cordially, TEFF
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

Hello, Rx-Queen and WELCOME to www.writing.com. With wild hopes that you enjoy exploring the site this summer.

Anyway, your poem BEHOLD THE RAPTURE meets your intro and reads quite well.

When you mention rocks and mountains, can't help but realize these things actually do occur in Valley Fill Mining also called Mountaintop Removal or MYR. When forests, wildlife and streams are no more. The saddest of all are the photos of such a mining practice. Once I thought of this, your futuristic poem seems to apply to destruction by man, even ongoing. I wonder if that was your intention.

Well, best luck in all writing endeavors Cordially, TEFF
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

June 24, 2009
REV sent from April Sunday

Good morning, Christopher,

Avidly re-reading your fine article this morning supplies much on the factual side for this freelance journalist. It was a few months back after the creative popularity of twitter came into being like the second coming of total enlightenment, that I too researched the whys or -- how come all the news is the same and shrinking(?) Even the fabulous, British paper, The Independent proposes all news shall be in one paragraph in 2009.

Now your article -- steers me toward a different aspect of this examination.

You cite so much here, and end with a fantastic link account of your sources.

Suggest all wc members check out, for the betterment of the craft we call writing, Mr. Unterkofler's fine piece de resistance, a bit of a tell all --- overall.

Here's that new MUST READ ---

 AN OVERVIEW TO WRITING KEYWORD ARTICLES  (E)
An essay for internet authors. Produce quality, not quantity.
#1574670 by Christopher Unterkofler


WELCOME TO www.writing.com, CHRISTOPHER!

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

"Reading straight thru CRYSTALS ON ROSES a short story which shows both kind thoughts and details for opening characters evolve into a short story with an endearing character list. Here, www.writing.com author Redtowrite really keeps the pages turning as readers follow this story of "an albino" child in a normal society, amid a realistic family & neighborhood surroundings." Rev sent from April Sunday /// June 23, 2009

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (3.5)

DATE: CINCO DE MAYO 2009!
Review sent from April Sunday

Hello Fairport,
Welcome to WC.

In this poem, you really do include quite a lot, adding gardening for sounds of a diversified theme. Of particular interest is the use of "weed" and "thistle." Glad that is in the intro adding more as an attention grabber.

Well done verse from a talented poet by all means. RHYME ON!

Cordially, TEFF

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Review of Concrete Roses  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (4.0)

"CONCRETE ROSES from Jewell A Pentagram offers brilliant visuals of ethral consistancy & all qualifiers of poetry in each line. Thanks ... particularly adore: use of "distant pyre" all all lacy details leading to same. Naturalist noteworthy also." Rev sent from April Sunday "Invalid Item" 

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WELCOME TO THE SITE!

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Review of I wonder  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (4.0)
Cinco DE Mayo 2009!

"I WONDER now about a poem from newcomer, poet, single mom, Violet Vixen. I WONDER rings with style of lyrical worth. Sadness, pushiness, guilt ... well, dear PRP (PublicREVPg) the best of this one for your reading enjoyment and time to think amid gloaming rain driven morning hours --- simply the click away." REV sent from TEFFY praying hard as thunder for highwind

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Nice to meet you, Miss Violet, welcome to wc. Glad to see you onboard the train we call writing.com.

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Review of Preston tonight  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

CINCO DE MAYO 2009!

Revving today, find: PRESTONS TONIGHT from Read-A-Newbie Column found to my left inside gray Item Jumps.

Now wonder which Preston, since my eyes are blurred by heavy rain once more amid sleepy Spring in wc's Lehigh Valley.

Now, might one offer a favorable welcome to Simon aka Si.

Well this item is serious poetry which deserves five star rates. A click away for every poet, short storyist and basic reviewers all.

Cordially, TEFF
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Review of SHATTERED DREAMS  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (4.0)

"SHATTERED DREAMS, written by Choplpay REALLY portrays a certainly vivid story via emotionally demanding tell-all lines from the perspective of first person narrator. This short read made me very sad. All in all we realize what a vulnerable thing love and heartbreak can be due to this uncaring "husband" found here." Review sent from April Sunday "Invalid Item"  Date: Cinco De Mayo/ May 5, 2K9 "Invalid Item" 

Thanks for the daring write, dear author.

Welcome to WC!

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Review of Cryptic Mind  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

CINCO DE MAYO

REVIEW sent from April Sunday
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"CRYPTIC MIND, a poem from the portfolio of Kiran 13, offers up "psychology genre" on a silver platter. Thanks there. This poem excels for lines where the author (or poet, of course) draws readers into the fold with a challenge. But then when unable to meet requirments RE: acquaintance, perhaps take heed. For here find also "a waterfall that once flowed free." Wonderful comparisons, catchy poem."

WELCOME TO WC! ENJOY THE SITE!

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (3.5)

Cinco De Mayo

Well MUST SAY how surprised this item makes one feel at this desk. STEINER AUTO FOCUS BINOCULARS from wc author, Alan Forray is a fun read.

Now, wait a sec, don't Buschnells offer a close second to the "Steiner" family product. Uh, sir, I think so!

Cordially, TEFF

Welcome to the site.
Seriously do Write on!

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Review of I MissYou  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (3.0)

May 5, 2009
Cinco de Mayo -- Raining ---

In the above salutation, one sees date, and the celebration day.

In: I MISS YOU, a poem from the portfolio of suel one reads of a note to a mother who is no longer alive yet prayed for while addressed.

The poem is brief, and maybe that is the intention. The poem carries a message.

It also sets one down in the space of where the narration takes place.

Well, good luck in all future writing endeavors.

And WELCOME to WC.

Cordially, TEFF
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (4.0)

"When Officer Smith gets seriously funny watch out in "YOU'VE BEEN PUNKED." Especially as it falls on "the rookie." Nice flash fiction short story from http://www.writing.com newbie, usmc329 . Sounds like a good contest entry. Clown details to die-for." Review sent from
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Welcome to the site, US MC!

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

"While much can be said for storms, my main forte since 1999, entering the story with rain is an outstanding place to start. "Bacon, Miguel, Nessa, porches, weather" stats all here inA STORM. Welcome to newbie, Brenda L Long. Her work is fine and enjoyable speed wise.

Dear author: Add "work in progress" to this one.

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

April 24, 2009

Good morning, Reevard Kingman.

 Very much enjoy the style and presentation for LAST MEAL OF THE PHOENIX.

No doubt this poet has a way of pushing the envelope toward a cliff hanger present in the battle.

Reading your first poem, posted on Auto Rewards prompts this second read today.

LAST MEAL OF THE PHOENIX is ---->
Very good and very well done.

Rhyme on!

Cordially,

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Review of The Cowboy  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (4.0)

"THE COWBOY, a poem from the portfolio of Reevard Kingman outlines by stanza ideals generally accorded to cattle herding occupants from "Texas to Dakota Hills." Good look see at western life for what some refer to as a dying breed. Rhymes all surround the theme. While the poem, itself, lives up to the poet's intro." REV sent April 24, 2009 from April Sunday "Invalid Item" 
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Review of Free Fallin'  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

"Looking for a comedic write on a daring adventure? If so be sure to visit FREE FALLIN' from www.writing.com test pilot, no seriously, WDC author, DAN. This exciting presentation includes a Cessna, a jumping class and patience shown for "eighteen pages of legal jargon." Also ride "13,000 feet" above terra firma. Watch for "terrified" aspects of grinning and a brief 'Wikepedia" take on "smiles." Five Star work evident here. Especially thrilled by "falling at 150 mph." Wow, great job!" REV sent from April Sunday "MOFFETT FILES TAKE FIVE" 
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Review of SHE  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (4.5)

April 20, 2009
TWO DAYS MORE, then we see tons on Earth Day topics!

Oh, sorry, bit of a headline April 20.

Now, onto the review of SHE, a poem from wc member, Bake.

In this poem the intro indicates that it is written about the narrator's wife.

The best line in my humble opinion is:

"Calmed when I am crazed." Now that's a great undertaking and fits well as a pivot line to the wonderfully detailed verse here.

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