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Review by April Sunday
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

Sept 4, 2008

 Good morning, Mr. Powell,

Shock sets in with your tell-all from Experience Genre. Namely: SOLITARY, TIME AND A PINK THUMBNAIL.

Imagine if you will, a very genreours, super talented author, who places much empahasis over the years by posting stories on Auto-rewards Page, and now this current, personal information.

Actually, the scene of "solitary confinement" is hard to fathom.

As well, reading "two books" per day is also high on the to do-list for many authors, one supposes. Very impressive.

But what is the absolute best thing about this article from the perspective of this humble reviwer (moi)?

Simply this --- an article on how-to-write incentives from a thoroughly gifted author.

Thanks, Jerry. With the best of all close of summer and a bright start on autumn for you and yours.

Cordially, TEFF
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PS: As for your Christmas story mentioned in this article. Please consider submission in:

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Gotta run, critiques gone down re: advertising too much these days. But everyone does it anyway AND promo is everywhere onsite. Uh, oh my eggs are burning ... really gotta run.

So -- WRITE ON!

 My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

Sept. 2, 2008

Being very impressed by TIME IS SHORT, a short story by Leighoire, simply can't resist another in the posted "Psychic Series by this author.

In: DO YOU WANT TO KNOW? Am going to step aside with an author-to-author suggestion to add Really to the title. Then, Leighoire might consider: DO YOU REALLY WANT TO KNOW?

This is what occurs when a family of ladies meets for their consultation. Rebecca & Ann are absolutley believable character names in this one.

 Love this phrase which sets the pace and keeps to the title at the same time.

Namely: "Skeptics you may be ..."

Good vocab choices here.

*Heart* 'iota'
While 'hocus pocus' fits to a tee.

Presenting this author Teff's Hat's Off for a great story, told without a hitch and once more --- rendering the twist-in-the tale.

Leighoire, you are going strong with this psychic who is better than a shrink.

While reading, am surprised with ... oh my goodness ---

Suicide? Finacial problems?

The above woven into the plot.
Gracious me! Fantastic, nonetheless.

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Cordially, TEFF

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
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Review of Time Is Short  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

Sept. 2, 2008

WOW! Leighoire, this is the best story, which I've ever reviewed from your portfolio on http://www.writing.com.

 When a "psychic returns" as you mention in the intro for: TIME IS SHORT, a short story, one can only appreciate the following author tie-in.

Dialog for the card-reader takes on fortune teller lingo. And it's great!

The character name choice for "Christine" fits perfectly as she also shines within the dialog sequence ... a true babe-in-the-woods, awaiting her future to be mapped out upon the surface of the table.

BEST of all is the twist-in-the-tale at the end of this fine read.

Congratulations on a short story product which is certainly very well done.

Cordially,
TEFF "Invalid Item" 

PS: Here's a fortune teller poem from last autumn, you might enjoy, my friend.
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My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


August 22 the Friday, 2008

Oh, my goodness, Blue ...

'Tis yourself with a new poem on a webpage.

Blue, you're one of my favorite, hhtp://www.writing.com poets, since we met way way back ... oh no, darling, not ... 1564.

The subject of your many daring epistles over the years adds flair to research into the trying times of The Inquisition. To be sure we keep in touch taking liberty to add your pen name to "Invalid Item"  where painstakedly a gathering of talented, gifted authors survive our trying times.

Your techno ken flaunts the artistic minded. Many of us try but never succeed in the sig department as well. Yet, viewing here casts a reminder to truly appreciate what the eye beholds.

I fear, mon amis, that here upon this webpage you out do yourself. This WEBPAGE presents top-notch skills and crafty poety.

NIGHTMARE MEMORY is gorgeous.

PS: Of: THE CLUB, ADC, dear Blue, systematic promo ensues for membership.

Looking forward to wishing you
on our forum
a colorful clash of Summer's end,
and Autumn's lanquid start.

The end.

OH & YO! ATTENTION PRP!!!

Hello, Welcome, WC Guests!!!

Teff here "TEFF'S MERIT BADGES"  cordially saying fantastic this one, everyone!

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

August 9, 2008

Good day to you, WWharton,

At:
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there's a premise afoot to aide all authors. Of your opening paragraph for FINGERS OF BETRAYAL you manipulate the character from his slumbers.

At one point in what is known as the hook par for pieces, short stories or novels inclusive and probably essays or flash fiction, we read the following:

 "He pried open his left eye, and grey wooden walls peered back at him."

Given the fact the char has bruises ... but still in the dark as to what instrument measures in as honestly useful for prying open the eyes of a man. Now, running to the makeup section next time at the mall and holding an eyelash curler, which is not your intention at all.

Now ... OF: walls peering back ... huh?

Well a few more par until the gist gets off and plowing along into the story, of course. Perhaps, a bug-a-boo from this author re: waking up as the start of a story. We know rooms have walls, so also something to consider for less wall-eye-char waking repeats.

Oh, and good luck with the story, sounds like action afoot, simply move it up to the hook area. Lest it be lost. There, at the top, perhaps display your best visual, where it begins for the fiction and the best of it, you can lay upon the audience.

Neither, sleep nor waking in this section is suggested. All folks eat, sleep, bathe, in fiction .. murder, escape, find true love etc. Overall for wc/onsite fiction hope to see some pizzazz at the start. Thanks.

Touches for the sec par include: a close up of a rat with quivering whiskers and beady, darting eyes. From the viewpoint of the char discover .. so he does have accurate sight.

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

July 31, 2008

Hey there Steven Michael Jester:

What a wonderful happy moment finding your excellent, no holds barred, generous prize pool short story contest, my friend.

Which makes one also thrilled that you're a member of ADC "Invalid Item" 

Searching for contests this last week of July, and this morning posting all overall contest- reviews, my previous reviews as a member of "Invalid Item" 

on my blog "Invalid Item"  can honestly say this contest under current review status is GR GRRR GREAT!!

The contest forum contained in the portfolio of Steven Michael Jester is a grand slice of reality. Not that reality is seldom found onsite.

Here, primarily discover some differences in the usual run-of-the mill contest formats.

Wonderful, daring and open to all genre.
Like the natural flow of the written intro, Steven provides.

My theme this month and the month before and the year before is to suggest short story contests take the provebial gamble and not stifle ficiton authors with frustrating low word counts.

We may ask .. what is this contest all about. For
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appears to be a place that cares not for superficial low word counts,
offers a monthly submission for both new and old stories,

includes stories which already won less than first place elsewhere within submission guidelines,

and sends reviews.

Another good feature includes time to craft good stories.

Donations are on the way, from my desk Jester. So check your e-mail. While hoping you get a lot more of these coming your way.

Best of all this forum really sounds like a ton of fun.

 Dear Audience: Don't delay, just a click away. September's round is now open.

September!

Goodness, Steven, please pop me in the elbow or something. I'm having trouble letting go of July. As you can probably notice from the July nl also in your mailbox this morning.

Enough said for now. Big thanks for this one.

Cordially, TEFF "Invalid Item" 

The CLUB intro is scheduled for a new look, Steven. AD-CLUB clocks in with 377 views, while new members are most welcome everyday, 24-7.
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (4.0)

"Wondering if the title: MY ONE-SIDED CONVERSATION applies to when (I) plot a short story. Decide, the title fits this poem. Enjoy the vocab throughout. Like the sudden switches in tempo re: "Baptismal waters" and "brine." Well, without a doubt this poet has something to communicate and the potential talent to do so with ease." "Invalid Item" 
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Review of The Swamplands  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: ASR | (3.5)

"C J Groshek, new to www.writing.com, posts THE SWAMPLANDS on Auto Rewards. The poem bespeaks of gossip as compared to a river. Like the vocab choice of versimilitude. Whew, quite an undertaking to prounconce within this specific line, however. Good start. Welcome to the site, C J." April Sunday
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Review of Death of a hero  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

"When a dying old fellow relives his youth abed in hospital, after the final meal of "green jello" readers might enjoy a list of dreamy teens who enter said environment. Found on Auto Rewards Page, here's a winning short story for www.writing.com's ever-ongoing, traditionally popular, Amazon prize sponsored contests. Be sure to check
out this April copyright from the portfolio of wc member, Hyperiongate."
April Sunday "MOFFETT FILES TAKE FIVE" 

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

"When author, J A Buxton offers BLUE SATYR, THEN AND NOW, be ready for a smooth ride for the story is about a car which incidentally gets "36 miles" per gal. Along the way you might want to check out Judity's book, HOME OF THE RED FOX, generally posted in the author-in-print section. And shazamm when you pull this item up, note also the blue sheen of the car, whose "engine swells" with pride. Fun read. Good starting point for beginning writers who are looking for ways to close off some inovative methods to zero in on details. How to render the latter while including the inimate descriptions of a satisfied motorists are all here for our reading pleasure." "Invalid Item"  // July 28, 2008// April Sunday

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Oh, and Judity, please pass the word, we're collecting blogs and forums down at the Club.
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

"When someone's cousin, a girl, realizes the night before went way beyond the ultra-embarrassing moment, a self examination of the events takes place in a strange place. But then, the cousin to the rescue part of the story leaves many questions for readers of CONTEMPT OF A GREAT MAN, by KK1739." April Sunday "Invalid Item" 

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)


"When singer Bobby Darin did Atlantic City's Steel Pier and American Bandstand, Elvis fans paid attention back in the day. When radio host, Walter Winchell commented: "Goood evening, ladies and gentlemen and all the ships at sea" he tried to stop a war. When, www.writing.com member, Gisele joined this website in June of 2008, we got lucky. When reading THE FILE ON BOBBY DARIN readers may encounter the daring, imaginative talent of a novelist with a work in the process of being posted. When, the character, "Lips the trumpet player" teams in the same chapter with "American Firsters" from a bygone era ... whose to say where this novel made lead. This work is highly recommended for all serious writers. Well done, Gisele and very entertaining. The latter a huge part of those special creations as well the between the lines touches of history your novel provides. Thank you." April Sunday "Invalid Item"  7/15/2008

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)

"With AN ACQAUINTED STRANGER, author/ poet Mal admits the poem "is up to the reader to interpret." Fine line, attractive presentation. Reminds this reviewer slightly of O'Henry's painted ivy leaf."
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Review of Ursa Major  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: ASR | (5.0)


July 14, 2008

Title: URSA MAJOR
Author: Jinks

Welcome to wc, Jinks.

Your well crafted flash fiction is a pleasure to read.

Sum: Two kind-hearted people meet & greet as they deliver Christmas presents to the less fortunate.

Sorry, just thinking ahead. If gaoline costs dad & mom $4.00 per gal now .. what will happen to this favorite holiday? Sorry, I digress.

Well, the common spark for this one is when Miles hugs Hazel. The ending itself is near perfection.

Below is an item open all year, Jinks. Usually everyone walks away with a little something.

Cordially, Teffy

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Review of " The Tattoo "  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)


July 12, 2008

Hello there S A Gibbons,

Hope this communication finds you in proper form and good spirits. The latter comes my way due to reading your eloquent poem, THE TATTOO.

Found out a few years ago how easily it is to misspell tattoo. Well, an acquaintance has a parlor and printed his business cards wrong. Be that as it may, please allow the fact that your tatto-ed guy in this poem (is) --- comes off as thoughtfully represented.

HE, if that is the case, since nobody ever really knows with poetry .. DOES A BANGUP JOB communicating.

AT: "With that he turned and walked .." there's true praticality for the physical being of this person. As, seen by this reader. Not really nec to add that since you can see whose opining is in progress by the name on the review, of course.

However, sometimes there are odd reactions when a rev is sent from this desk which generally connect to authors with a reaction on content. Again as we know not all folks review exactly the same as is our individulistic natures, Gibbons.

*Heart* the line: "Like the beauty of fireflies on a June eve." Yes, quite pretty, easily agree.

When you come to think of it authors from Literature immortal will probably always use moonless or moon filled or moonlight .. Besides, what else is there?

Fantastic poem, which makes one think.

Cordially, TEFF owns "Invalid Item"  where public revs are re-printed.
"Reviewing Wisdom 1, 2, 3 GO!" 

Submission gathering in progress @
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Review of My Prayer  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (4.0)

"Inside the poetic lines of MY PRAYER by www.writing.com member, Chris one happens across the quip -- on writing --

Namely: "Help me to write, but not for show." Chris your talents indeed show. Your open address to a Creator, no doubt held dear by many, bespeaks reams of sprituality." July 10, 2008// April Sunday "Invalid Item" 

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Review of KIRA  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

July 9, 2008.

Hey, Leigh, your present revver goes by TEFF. In this case, Miss TEFF, novelist.

Okay ... taking a few guesses after reading to the end of Chapter One. Do see Bridget waiting in the wings in Chapter 2.

There's a few eye openers which since you wrote this in April and revised it in May, you as novelist should be aware.

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please read these over slowly as these are not run-of-the-mill from moi ...

 Hypothesis No. 1.

Thinking maybe folks told you they could not uderstand this ... so between April 11 and May you revised it and it got choppy.

RULE NO. 1 --- FROM THE SUGGESTION LIST === From a www.Fiction4sale.highpowersite.com edit.

FOR ALL NOVELIST, OURSELVES, LEIGH ... DON'T COMPROMISE YOUR STYLE FOR A FEW.

RENDER THE BEST, KEEP THE STYLE.

Did you by any chance start out at a vantage point? A setting such a West Africa would merit a strong visual.

Did you wish to not be bogged down in the telling but always keep great sounding, excellent details flowing?

To be truthful, kid, methinks you have struck me dumbfounded when arriving at the sentence starting "J ... C ... re: the kid in the box."

Did you by any chance wish fall privy to choppy fuss in verbs, sentences?

Can you allow sentence such as Robert felt troubled, are too out of place?

The above .. my notes say: sounds like Moll is glum.

So .. there's a chance this is a great story ro read, even emulate at the best parts, of which there are many in Leighoire's 44.kb work.

Add the background of West Africa, two guys in a landrover, mention of history of Rhodesia, Nigeria and its a real live wire, definely a go. Finish is the final suggestion novelist to novelist.

The biggest mistake novelist make their first time out?

Don't return and revise what you liked in the chapter re-edits, your voice is your style.

Leave it and in all instance of insistance from this recipiant of Eleven Review Merit Badges for revs, hon ...

Stay the course, call me, visit the CLUB!

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Thanks for this one:

Definite Must READ! Only one page of handwriten notes at this desk.

Superficial really and easily fixed.

Oh, yeah -- Paragraph breaks === Stat! in the correction column.

Shorter bitems. Cut in half.

Tables are inactive. Lamborghinis purr but tables can't make efforts unless maybe floating up on the Titanic.

Psst: Can't wait to read Chapter TWO.

To all and sundry --- IRONIC CHANGES, IS MY GUESS, so we steer away from the those, toss those efforts ... move on.

Author may post -- Work in Progress.

The comparison to sky color an artist can't duplicate is .. fantastic.

Well,
Later ...

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When taking a few hours to mull over this reading, I guess I lost the notes .

Why?

BECAUSE, KIRA wanted me to enjoy good literature. And overall this is a reaction rev with a few points of advice for all novelists.

Sometimes a mistake is made when a finished chapters gets the special effect tie-ins after written, say in a third/fourth edit.

Avoid that trap, sure change what you like, but always perfect the style.

On style ...? individual, no doubt.
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Review of Fire in Podunk  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


July 9, 2008

Gosh, almost every single time, reading one of J A Buxton's short stories for THE WRITER'S CRAMP Contest something is bound to happen.

Apparently this contest gives good prompts.

In this case, FIRE IN PODUNK is anyone's gamble. Anyone who takes a dangerous situation for granted, that is. For this story surely sets the hair on end.

Known to her pals, when she affectionately signs Judiy, our gal on the scene does a bang up job with this one.

When Michael and Lucy (oh poor Lucy) are stranded with plans underway to snap a few on-the-scene photos ... Woah! Watch OUT!

Adding to the piece, find and view the added feature of raging fires. Oh, scary!

Author to author, Buxton -- You Tube should be so lucky.

Cordially, TEFF

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That crazy blog above, went a tad light this morning so for your cat story pleasure find Mr. McWhite, dear Judity.

PS -- Reading about Judity's cat's adventures also brings smiles to many a face here on www.writing.com.
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (4.5)



July 8, 2008

Good morning, Maria. Reading PINATUBO, CHAPTER 2 makes me doubly glad you're a member of "Invalid Item" 

Writeartista is a gifted member of the CLUB, whose writing leaves one breathless with anticipation and curiosity to read more and more.

You couldn't have chosen a better, more colorful cover for your novel. Oh, this wonderful picture sets the pace for scenes pertaining to the Philipines.

 So, shall we? -- In chrono order ...

Of: "Most of the passengers seem asleep."

Don't forget using seem may show you can't make up your mind. And you must do so, Maria. Because you are the novelist, our undisputed leader for now.

Of: details re: passengers on the plane ...

*Heart* "Someone flips crisp pages from a magazine."

Please --- USGS (Huh?) define, please.

{c: blue} Next: Are you sure you want to place this overemphasis on the flight pill in play?

We can exit anytime from a semi-stream-of-conscience type pen which makes us simple patsies to any repeats.

Then note more excitement by way of volcano hopping.

Enjoy the present tense throughout as action unfolds during the conversation.

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Present tense is not a glaring choice of wc authors onsite. A rarity really from over 1,700 r/r/r by moi. llllllllllllllllllllll

AT: "how we escaped that" ----
simply toss that

*Heart* The answer to "You're a hero."
(When ... William replies) "It's my job."

Marie, your punctuation is to die for.

Dialogue tells Pinatulo's history. Excellent, good place in the novel ... to include same.

All on the way to Manila.

The character, Mary, rendered in first person narration, is coming of as intellectual, ladylike demure present.

GREAT CHAPTER.

Cordially, April Sunday

Marie, my friend ... Best to tip you off ... there's a discussion on dialogue in progress on "Invalid Item" 

See you there?

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


JUNE 29, 2008

 OVERALL REACTION:

WOW!!! THANK YOU, Paratwa. The content of this one is one of the funniest things (I) read on WWW.WRITING.COM ALL YEAR. All year!!

When author, Paratwa mixes humor with reasons to feel akward pain for the fate of others the result is found in almost every funny paragraph of: SANITY -- CHAPTER 1 --- INTO THE CAR.

Great takes on normal daily fair.

Wonderful ribs for all of those things we hold in the normal column, if there be such a sanitized spot.

So, another Sunday MUST READ found today.

Hon, this is a true MUST READ. Looking forward to Chapter Two, already.

Now, truth be told this is indeed twenty-star work, surpassing the ten star usually given to works of excellence in reviews of this caliber, P.

A few typos. Easily fixed.

living live == living life

AT: Oscar ... point ... not --- now she is. Go with --- How she is ---

AT: jetliner --- use --- taking off

*Heart* "This meeting was just the meeting to plan the meeting that had to be planned for the planning committee."

Wonderful nuance of dissing the mundane wastes of time, time, time.

At: two thousand people ... no article of "a" before two thousand.

AT: adequate roads -- use too poor. Note typo of to.

Great work with the rarely used ///

HATS OFF FOR THIS STORY.

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This one really made me laugh.
Which all adds to a great day ahead on "Invalid Item"  where there's actually some
controverisal, sad stuff in progress, my friends.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

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Hello there, S L Britton, nice to meet you.

Giving your prologue for BLOOD FEUD a five star is the easiset thing today since I like vampire genre.

Ever since Stoker graced the scene, we entered a phase of fiction like no other. Today, if you do an online search for Vampire Fiction you will no doubt see friendly, provocative vampires who often bring the genre to the modern world in Vegas, Hollywood etc.

Here, Britton sets the scene with an actual date of 1880.

A vampire slayer named Van Heising is about to tackle a task in mind.

Of the first line: "A small Transylvanian Village" you can toss small, as villages are geographically hamlets. Already known as tiny.

AT: "making his body make use of ...

Perhaps simply go with "making his body use ..." dropping any second make as a verb which comes off as a mouthful of making.

Make sense? But your story does make my day.
Causing me to think upon the Vampire Greensleeves from my Von Broom Vampire Trilogy.

*Heart* Valenko Keep --- which also adds to the flavor of over nearly 130 years past.

This one is well worth the look see, easily deciphered but needs a few adjustments on paragraph breaks.

Best, as you enjoy writing this one, Britton.

Cordially,
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)

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June 1, 2008

Generally if replies do come for these revs, right off the bat the date written appears for my records.

Okay Edgework, in order to disagree in fluent Teffom style, might take a few more paragraphs.

In: WRITING HURTS -- Review Forum ...

one finds some rather excessive standards of excellence present and accounted for.

Although Joyce and King are referred to, nary a quote from either in sight.

Next: Writing doesn't hurt all.

Au Contraire!

For the good writer crafting a good story ... it is the world of fun at the fingertips of many a keyboard coast to coast. Yet from Albany to Philly, to Detroit to Denver we do our thing ... unawre that yours is out there ready to improve it for us. How generous.

Lest we not forget that a rev is penned after or about another's pre-created original.

Best to you this first day of June.

Cordially, TEFF owns "Invalid Item" 

 BTW, dear forum host -- what do you like to write or read?

Perhaps a few, educational credentials might be helpful for those considering submisssions to your desk. Before their work goes under the broad microscope you outline in the intro.

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (3.0)

June's arrived!

Hello: Ben. Your story, a flash fiction in first person narration, sums up a visit to an attic.

One tiny, wee suggestion. When we write our stories, it not always customary to begin in such a basic chronoligcal manner by starting almost 90 % of your plot sentences with I.

However, kinda neat the tie-in for back to youth when fun and games rang relevant.

Cordially, TEFF

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Review of The Photograph  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

May 31, 2008

 Hey there, Susie,

Just finished reading your short-short, THE PHOTOGRAPH and must say it is well done.

Like the mysterious old man in the lake district taking that prized snapshot. Then the details of the memory while the family is listed sharing their yearly outings of fishing together.

One tiny point: In the intro it is "An old man."

Best. Do write on!

Cordially,

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Review of The Quills  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

April 18, 2008

Sitting around reading seed packets, Andrew, er ... Mr. Bowman and came across your spectacular generosity (for time served especially) and with an open heart read all, every single word ... then sit back throw the packs into their straw basket, applaud and say ... thank goodness for this wc recognition, all onsite, all in front of the world wide web we so adore, my friend.

Right now, please accept this TEFFOM HAT'S OFF sig to commend this item, Mr. Bowman.

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takes contests to a whole new height.

The gift pool is spectacular, the deadline's out there, plenty of time to think things thru for fellow authors and poets.

Plus, Mr. Andrew Bowman's item is put together as well as a freshly plowed field, ready to be planted. Andrew, we're kind into the farmer thing again this time of the year. Alas, selling flowers takes a toll on the physical side, arthritis, aches for the likes of Miss TEFF, but nonetheless, the fingers still get a work out on the keyboard now & then.

 Thanks for using the bold, Andrew. Once heard onsite that this meant shouting. Huh? Actually, it is so much easier to read, looks swell to all who've adopted same.

Notice you don't overdue in your presentation in the least. None of the excessive larger is better font messaround. Thanks for that. Once tried to read an item and ended up scrolling all the way to China and I was standing on top of the Empire State Building trying to read it. Regular antiquated {size:2 font is fine by me.

But .. this .. oh this is great!! GGGRRRRRR --ATE!!

Now, when I get into my rev sent area, probably by Nov of this crazy year, there's one short story which I shall recommend for the winning short story of 2008.

The author had me on the edge due to suspense and input for such a marvelous write. Later she said everyone liked it from her rev's received. So this is what you seek, yes?

An important question pertaing to THE QUILL AWARDS, dear.

Do the nominees have to be copy-righted 2008?

Well, to all of us out here, who do like higher word counts for short stories of worth, and for any writers who are toning up. Keep your eyes open for the best of the best.

Wondeful -- Overall -- Twenty STAR material, right here.

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BIG THANKS GOING OUT TO ANDREW BOWMAN.
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