Let me start by saying I really enjoyed this piece. I thought it was an excellent concept which was well put together. There were a couple of thing, which are from a purely personal perspective and not a criticism of any kind. Do you think the interviewer would benefit form a name? The term bible, for me, indicate both old and new testaments combined. The phrase major world religions was used at the beginning of the piece, would something from Islam or Judaism work? As I have already stated these are purely personal points I might have asked, if I had been creative enough to come up with this excellent piece. Thanks for a great read.
Nice concept, the characters were alive and I found myself routing for them.
Personally I did find it difficult to follow the blue text, however it did highlight the cold, so if that was the intention, well done.
I really enjoyed this. A couple of small grammatical mistakes but nothing significant. Quite a jump from the carousel to the crash. however I found myself gripped by the story and rooting for the characters. I would definitely say start your book. Thanks for sharing this and good luck with the book.
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