An excellent article, Viv! This is well-written and draws emotion from the reader. I'm so glad that you wrote this and shared this with us. I'm putting this one in my favorites!
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Another great Chapter, Jim! Again, your descriptions are vivid, and makes your readers feel as though we're watching a movie. I sure hope you can get this book published. It deserves to be available in book stores. Your dates really help bring the reader to that time period, as well as your descriptive dialogue and narration.
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This is the most beautiful memorial I've ever seen. I feel as though I know her, from what I've read. She was truly a special person, and always will be. I wish I had of had the pleasure of knowing her personally, but this novel is the next best thing. I can't thank you enough for sharing all of this with us!
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What a beautiful image, created by you and made by Ashley. I feel sure, Linda would be so proud of you, Jim. Carrying on her memories, that she held so dear, is so very special. I think you were both very blessed by God.
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Wow, the more I read, the more I can't put it down, lol. It's 4:00am, and I'm still reading. The was another great chapter. Each one is so unique, and draws much emotion. I noticed you put the Prom picture in, already. A perfect touch...to a perfect romance. Description, again was awesome! You do such a great job, showing the emotions of both of you.
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Simply, Wonderful, Jim! You have such deep emotions in all of these chapters but, especially true in this chapter. I really liked the way that Linda, tells us what she is thinking, too. This really adds to the story. The climax was perfectly written. Although, I thought Linda had something to do with the girl in the orchestra that fainted, you still did a great job of keeping the reader in suspense. A terrific job, my friend!
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A very good chapter, Jim! I like the way you put in your recent conversations with your father, on this subject. It's amazing when we look back on our lives, and try to figure out why we made certain decisions, without a clue to why we did. (as your father did.) I believe that's why life is a learning experience, for us all. Very descriptive, I can envision you worrying over this decision. Another great piece in your novel!
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Another great chapter! It's remarkable that you remember almost every detail. I can't remember what I had for dinner last week, lol. A very good story, well-written, my friend. I'm looking forward to the next chapter, tomorrow night.
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You tell them, girl! ha ha. I feel the samw way about this. I only use anonymous when I give a bunch of gift points to a contest that I plan on entering, so that my story stands on it's own merits, and not by any donation that I give. A well-written article. Great job!
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A good story, Harry. I loved the second paragraph from the end, lol. You've done a good job with all the components of a short story. Congratulations and good luck with the contest.
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This was a great story! Wow, the things we do as kids, lol. I really have no complaints at all. You did very well with all the components, and your descriptions were vivid. I would highly recommend this story, so I gave it a five. There is one small mistake around the middle of the story. The paragraph begins with: "Reaching outside..., the speaker outside then cranked them volume." It's a great story. Congratulations on a job well done!
With Much Love,
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