I really like the image this poem brings, not just in the words but in the idea. My favorite line is " And two weeks of a late summer campfire in your hair"
It actually made me picture my many camping times and I think I might write a poem about one! Thanks for the inspiration. Keep writing and savoring the days!
I really like the emotion in this. Anger is one of the best tools for writing. Its one of the only emotions that lets people see into the others soul. Although this poem is not about beauty, its beautiful. I can tell how much you let out while writing this poem. Keep writing with your emotions! :):):):)
I really like the message this sends. The first two lines were what intreged me the most. 'They were all thinking about tomorrow Until there were none left'
It really made me think about how I live my life. Thanks for the great read and keep writing! :):):):)
I really like the idea behind this and the way you formed your words. Some great positive outlooks. The rhyming does sound a little forced though and makes the poem not flow as much, but that could be fixed. Just a suggestion. Keep writing with such emotion!
This is definitely from the heart, which is where most great poetry is found. You have some great idea's and you have created an interesting poem. Keep writing with such passion! :):):):):):):):):):):):)
I'm probably not the best reviewer for these lyrics, because I don't know what song this was from, but I wanted too write something anyways. I really like the flow, I can actually hear a melody when I read this. There is a lot of repetition in this though, but if its suppose to be like that than I think you've got a great song! Keep writing.
I like the imagary in this, and the rhyming has a flow too it and doesn't sound forced. Its almost like a story. Its really interesting and I wished it was longer! You've got a great imagination and I look forward to look at some more of your stuff. Keep writing with such passion!
Such powerful words! I really like the repetition, it doesn't always work in a lot of writing, but here it makes sense and really works. Thanks for sharing your work and keep writing with the same passion and emotions!!!!! :):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):)
Wow, you have a very vivid imagination and it completely shows in this story. The plot was interesting and kept me reading every word. I like each and every character you invented and find the character building tremendous. I haven't read a story like this in a long time. Thank you for sharing such a wonderful piece of work! Congrats on your master piece!
This is quite interesting as a start of an autobiography. A lot of people are too scared to write about themselves, so its nice to read something someone has written about themself. I like the beginning, it really caught my attention. Afew spelling errors, but otherwise a good form. Keep writing!
This is definitely interesting. I like the originality in this and how you conveyed the characters emotions. Your imagination was profound and I really enoyed the middle of the story. I definitley wanted too read more too find out the ending. Very suspenseful and entertaining. Keep writing!
Wow, this is empowering! I'm glad to hear you have so much confidence and are willing too share that in your writing. Keep up the amazing empowerment and I would love too hear more things from you in the future! Keep up the excellent writing! :):):):):):):)
Wow there is such emotion in your words, and they are so very inspirational. This is a beautiful piece of work that kept me reading word for word until the last. I can almost feel the pain with which you speak of, but yet have none of the experience. Good job and keep writing!
This beautiful purely for its depth and personality. You obviously wrote it with not just a pen and paper, but with your emotion and experience. This piece really conveys a personal side. That is what writing is truely all about. Its hard too write pieces like this because you have too be in the right state of mind. Congrats on creating such an interesting piece, I enoyed reading it! Keep writing!
I find this story very adorable. You captured the sincere young and naivety of a little boys fear. I really like the way this was written. What an original story! Thank you for such an entertaining read and keep writing with such passion! :):):):):):)
I really like this story. I got pretty close with the main character, and actually found myself rooting for him too win. I like how it wasn't so predictable, I didn't assume he was going too win. Nicely done, and I look forward too hearing more from you! Keep writing!
I like this because it shows how simple it is too start an argument and yet how difficult it is too end it. I really like the idea behind the story. The are some run on sentences in the beginning, and just a few grammar checks needed, but other than that, you've got yourself a great short story! Keep writing!
I really enjoyed reading your perspective on such a grave fact of life. I agree with you 100%. I lost my mother last year too drugs, and almost lost my father due too a stroke. He made a full recovery and has turned his life around. He is happy he made it through but on the same token, his views on death have changed, and I share his view points as well. The immediate reaction too death for many is sadness, and its too bad that such a certain thing to happen to us should be so sad and dehabilitating. Thanks for sharing your view point, and backing yourself up with facts and such. Keep writing! :):):):):):)
Wow, I really enoyed this poem, everything about it. The form, and the image and idea you captured. The sterotype your talking about I am well familiar with and I enoyed reading something I can relate too. I only wished there was more! Keep up the fabulous job!
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the emotion you captured in this poem is raw and riveting. It kept me glued to the poem till the very end of the last sentence. Keep writing from the heart and remember, every poem counts.:):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):)
I like this. It was beautifully written and it captures the way you feel about marriage. Keep on writing with all of your heart and passion! Looking forward too hearing some more of your work in the future. :):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):)
I understand exactly where you are coming from. This was an interesting piece to me expecially since I follow an eclectic pagan belief. It seems to me you have a very good point. I like how you backed your opinions up with facts as well. This makes complete sense too me. Thanks for your input and message me if there is anything I can help with!
I like this. Some of my poems I don't have on my profile are like this. Everyone comments and says, wow, thats dark. But I think this is beautiful. Just because some writing is sad, doesn't mean its destructive. I really like the imagery and everything seems too flow. Keep writing with passion!
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