WHAT I LIKED
I liked the repetitiveness of "I see". I liked how you opened and closed the poem with the same line.
WHAT I DISLIKED
There was nothing I really disliked. I did notice that "unhesitating" was a little awkward. It didn't really flow well with the "waiting" rhyme.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I enjoyed this poem. Well done! If I changed anything it would be the word "unhesitating."
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
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IN MY OPINION…
This poem transitioned nicely between the two writers.
WHAT I LIKED
My favorite line from the poem is "Waters are fading from cobalt to grey;"
WHAT I DISLIKED
There was nothing I really disliked.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
This was a lovely poem.
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
Also, I noticed your number is 560 and you started WDC in 2008. I started in 2007 but have taken a long break from writing. I am just getting back to my creative side.
Please kindly stop by my port and review one of my items.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
“May the Muse join you on your journey, and may your writing and your life continue to surprise you.” ~ Judy Reeves
IN MY OPINION…
This is a well written poem. I enjoyed reading it.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked how you showed how he gradually got worse.
WHAT I DISLIKED
With children galore. - It doesn't seem to fit there. I can explain that in better detail if you'd like me to.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Thank you for sharing this with me. It is a lovely poem.
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
Please kindly stop by my port and review one of my items.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
“May the Muse join you on your journey, and may your writing and your life continue to surprise you.” ~ Judy Reeves
WHAT I LIKED
I loved how you described each light touching the other lights. Great display of illustration.
WHAT I DISLIKED
I am not a fan of the dream sequence but I felt compelled to read this story. :)
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
1."The moonlight illuminated the rolling fog over the lake, the heavenly stars twinkled above in the clear cloudless sky, and the points of light floating all over the yard created a beautiful masterpiece in the silence of such a peaceful night." - Is this a run-on sentence?
2."one act of kindness or word of care propagating more acts kindness and support for others." = more acts of kindness
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I enjoyed this story. Thank you for sharing such a wonderfully creative mind.
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
“May the Muse join you on your journey, and may your writing and your life continue to surprise you.” ~ Judy Reeves
IN MY OPINION…
This is a very well written poem. It definitely deserved to win a contest.
WHAT I LIKED
I loved the rhythm of this poem. It was fast and upbeat. It flowed nicely.
I know a few teacher's and I feel like I know a little more about them after reading this poem.
WHAT I DISLIKED
Nothing I can think of.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I would send this into a teacher's magazine and see if they would publish it.
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
“May the Muse join you on your journey, and may your writing and your life continue to surprise you.” ~ Judy Reeves
WHAT I LIKED
Faith gives us hope, a life beyond this mortal shell. = my favorite verse
WHAT I DISLIKED
Platitudes show you that people do care. - What does platitudes mean?
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
Well doj SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
“May the Muse join you on your journey, and may your writing and your life continue to surprise you.” ~ Judy Reeves
IN MY OPINION…
I felt like this was a good article. But I believe you could have expanded it even more.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the numerical list. I liked the facts you included.
Your #1 - Sorry. I'm still gonna use that at the end of my reviews.
Your #2 - I always try to do this. There was only one time I couldn't say anything positive.
Your #3 - The following questions were helpful: What was their favorite part? How did the story make them feel as they read it?
Your #4 - I was already using a template. Though I really didn't use much color. Thanks for the advice.
Your #5 - This was very helpful.
WHAT I DISLIKED
I can't say there was anything I disliked. But I was a little disappointed with the lack of examples. I think this piece would be even better if you gave a couple template examples.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
My only suggestion is to add some examples. Other than that it was a very informative article.
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
“May the Muse join you on your journey, and may your writing and your life continue to surprise you.” ~ Judy Reeves
WHAT I DISLIKED
The length. I personally prefer longer poems.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I think you can expand this poem into something beautiful.
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
“May the Muse join you on your journey, and may your writing and your life continue to surprise you.” ~ Judy Reeves
IN MY OPINION…
This is a nice poem but it is a little confusing.
WHAT I LIKED
I loved the topic and the content of your poem. Great message.
WHAT I DISLIKED
The fact that you rhyme random lines is a little confusing and awkward. My personal preference is to either rhyme them all or don't rhyme at all.
Also, I didn't understand the comparison to the old cranky mill.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I think if you work on this a little it has the potential of being a great poem.
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
“May the Muse join you on your journey, and may your writing and your life continue to surprise you.” ~ Judy Reeves
IN MY OPINION…
Very well written. I initially thought I would not like it as it is about a topic I am not familiar with...the shed. I loved it.
WHAT I LIKED
It is very entertaining and humorous. I also loved the wording.
WHAT I DISLIKED
Nothing I could think of.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
Nothing I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I really suggest you try to get this published in some type of tool/harware magazine. This was very well done.
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
“May the Muse join you on your journey, and may your writing and your life continue to surprise you.” ~ Judy Reeves
IN MY OPINION…
I think this was a good poem with wonderful metaphors.
WHAT I LIKED
I loved the topic and the way it was presented.
WHAT I DISLIKED
The part below doesn't rhyme. I think that is confusing/awkward.
"And Margaret, our mother, while here did abide, was the thread that kept us all tied. She was our buildings foundation and our garments main thread. "
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Here I am again reviewing your work. :) Well done! I think it could be a better poem if you tightened up the spot that doesn't rhyme.
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
Could you be so kind as to review my article? I am a women's bible study leader and just recently started volunteering my services at an assisted living facility.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked how you brought the first and last lines together.
WHAT I DISLIKED
Nothing. I would have liked the poem to be longer. But that's just my preference.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Well done!
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
FANCY’S REVIEW
Item Reviewed – Is Christian a Verb?
IN MY OPINION…
What a wonderful piece! I enjoyed this immensely.
WHAT I LIKED
I loved the story and the inspiration.
WHAT I DISLIKED
Nothing I can think of.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
"with the teachings of Jesus of talked about in the Bible" - This doesn't sound right. Did you mean to write " with the teachings of Jesus talked about in the Bible?" I think there is an extra "of" in there. :)
"shuting out " = Should be shutting or shooting?
"the last bus.." - Remove extra period.
"Today as I look back I see a world where the basics have not changed, that young man taught me something about the word Christian." - Should this be 2 sentences?
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Well done!! I look forward to reading more of your work.
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
May ideas fill your head and words fill your pages.
IN MY OPINION…
What a good start to an interesting poem!!
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the concept of the poem.
WHAT I DISLIKED
If you're going to start the poem off rhyming you should continue to rhyme throughout (or don't rhyme at all). Also, the word "whirls" so close to "whirlpool" makes it seems awkward and repetitive.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS/TYPOS
I think you should expand this poem. It feels unfinished. But good job so far.
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
May ideas fill your head and words fill your pages.
WHAT I LIKED
I'm assuming these are real thoughts and emotions. This poems seems very authentic.
WHAT I DISLIKED
There is a little too much information in this one poem. I think you could have made this into at least two poems. One about the anger and drugs...and then one about the son and abuse.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
"So much anger that it has consumes my soul" = consumed
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I would break this into two poems and elaborate. This is a great poem as is. But I think it could be more. Good job! And if you want to talk about God, life, being a mother, relationships, etc. email me. :)
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
May ideas fill your head and words fill your pages.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the topic. I also liked the words you used.
WHAT I DISLIKED
I didn't like the line spacing. It made it difficult to read.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I really liked this piece. I just had a hard time reading it. :(
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
May ideas fill your head and words fill your pages.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked that you gave a bit of different opinions.
WHAT I DISLIKED
I don't think this piece was broad enough. Also, I still don't know what your opinion is or if you even meant to give it. And I don't understand the part about the turtles.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I think you could add a significant amount of information to this piece.
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
May ideas fill your head and words fill your pages.
FANCY’S REVIEW
Item Reviewed – Triumph of the Female Species
IN MY OPINION…
I enjoyed the poem.
WHAT I LIKED
I really feel this poem is well organized.
I also liked the words chosen for this poem.
WHAT I DISLIKED
There was nothing I really disliked. I was hoping the poem would mention the human species at the end.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I appreciate you sharing this poem.
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
May ideas fill your head and words fill your pages.
IN MY OPINION…
I enjoyed this simple (yet poignant) poem.
WHAT I LIKED
I loved that I could visualize this homeless woman with the birds. Great pictures in your writing.
WHAT I DISLIKED
I was confused about the line
"She has no regrets."
It didn't really fit with the rest of the poem.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
My only suggestion would be to change the last line.Maybe, since she's leaving you could mention "No need to hurry" again. Whatever you decide I think you can think of a better ending to this poem. Plus, it doesn't seem realistic that this woman would have no regrets.
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
May ideas fill your head and words fill your pages.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the entire poem. I liked the subject matter, your style and the visual. I liked EVERYTHING!
WHAT I DISLIKED
I initially didn't like the word "prattle". Then I looked it up. After learning it's meaning I think it fits perfectly.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
First of all, I learned a new word. Prattle! Good word!
Keep writing. Very good work!
-Take it, over leave it. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
May ideas fill your head and words fill your pages.
FANCY’S REVIEW
Item Reviewed – Where the Thunder Hides
IN MY OPINION…
This poem reminds me of Shel Silverstein’s poetry. It is well written. The poem is imaginative and original. I can definitely see this in a magazine or collection. Good job!
WHAT I LIKED
Overall, I enjoyed your poem.
WHAT I DISLIKED
There wasn’t anything I disliked about your poem.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS
You wrote…
“for that's all he needed”
Should it be…
“for that’s all he needs”
It sounds like you’ve changed tenses with this line.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
-Take it, over leave it. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Sincerely,
Fancy
May ideas fill your head and words fill your pages.
WHAT I LIKED
Overall, I enjoyed this poem. I found it sad, yet I was still entertained. I believe it is a subject many readers can relate to.
WHAT I DISLIKED
There was nothing I disliked about your poem.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS
None
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
-Take it, over leave it. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer. My only suggestion is this:
You wrote…
“Bringing up demons that hurt real bad!”
I thought your word use was very creative throughout your piece, except for this line. “Hurt real bad” just seems out of place in this poem.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Sincerely,
Fancy
May ideas fill your head and words fill your pages.
FANCY’S REVIEW
Item Reviewed – Success is about attitude not aptitude
IN MY OPINION…
You did a great job with this article. I found myself inspired and entertained. Good word use and sentence structure.
WHAT I LIKED
Overall, I enjoyed your article.
WHAT I DISLIKED
In general, I don’t review articles or non-fiction. I was surprising pleased with your piece. There was nothing I really disliked about your story.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
-Take it, over leave it. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer. My only suggestion is this: I would really have liked this piece to be longer. I agreed with your message and would have liked to read more. It’s all about positive thinking! If you don’t believe you deserve great things, NO ONE else will.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Sincerely,
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May ideas fill your head and words fill your pages.
BEGINNING
I felt the beginning of the poem started off well and piqued my interest. Once I read the first two lines I wanted to read more.
DESCRIPTION
Great job on your descriptions!!! I felt your pain. The poem was filled with agony. The emotions were believable and relatable. I have a tendency to like sad/dark poetry.
WHAT I LIKED
Overall, I enjoyed your poem. I found the subject intriguing and the emotions realistic.
WHAT I DISLIKED
Nothing.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS
You wrote…
“Perhaps they are true and right in so many different ways,
But forget it's not that easy to just simply change each day.”
The rhythm here seems a little long- maybe a bit wordy. Compared to the rest of the poem, this part seems “bumpy”.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
-Take it, over leave it. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer. My only suggestions are grammar/punctuation related (above).
*After reading this poem I feel compelled to offer my friendship. If you need anything, I am only an email away.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Sincerely,
Fancy
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