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Sep 6, 2025 at 1:01pm
In response to "Weekend Escape"

Thank you, Steph!

Sep 4, 2025 at 6:29pm
In response to "Weekend Escape"

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

The poem was about how a beach can take us to a mountain.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the adventure of the poem and how it explored both the beach and the mountain.

STRUCTURE

This is a diamante poem. The rules involve having 7 seven lines, first and last line, just one word which is a noun, 2nd and 6th lines, 2 words which are adjectives, 3rd and 5th lines have 3 words which are verbs, 4th line has 4 words - nouns. Diamantes don't have to play hard by the rules, but they should take the shape of a diamond.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font. I also liked how the ML changed color when the explorer/reader moved from the beach to the mountain. Subtle, yet effective.

DESCRIPTIONS

There are great descriptions for both environments that really give the reader for both such as "sandy," and "tides" for the beach, and "hiking," and "rocky" for the mountain. Well done. Nice transition.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title, "Escape" sets the stage for what to expect from the poem. Solid word choices are used to paint the environments for the beach and mountain. I honestly felt like I was on a adventure. Well done! The poem followed the prompt and used one of the following words: mountain, beach, or forest. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.

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Scary_Soldier_Mike

Aug 21, 2025 at 11:18pm
In response to "Everybody Needs a Hero"

Sounds like we're both fortunate. I owe much of what / how I am to those two fine folks.

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Jul 14, 2025 at 2:41pm
In response to "Buffalo Soldiers"

Thank you! It has been fixed.

Jul 13, 2025 at 4:29pm
In response to "Buffalo Soldiers"

I really like your poem here - it's a nice tribute to Buffalo Soldiers which is the featured video at the Veterans Group this month. Well done! If anything - I think "soldies" should be "soldiers," if you'd like to fix it.

Smiles
Steph

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Scary_Soldier_Mike

Jul 9, 2025 at 11:48pm
In response to "Buffalo Soldiers"

I met a Buffalo soldier once, and I've seen the 10th Cavalry depicted - or at least mentioned - at least once in a novel. Pretty cool history.

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Jul 2, 2025 at 4:51pm
In response to "Flanders Field"

Thank you! I appreciate that detailed feedback.

Honoring Our Veterans - Challenge

Jun 30, 2025 at 11:26pm
In response to "Flanders Field"

Thank you for the June 2025 entry for the

FORUM

(ASR)
Celebrating Veterans Day every day
#423698 by SpookyBee

It's much appreciated!

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

The poem was a respectful tribute for those who have passed away in war. The use of Flanders Field and poppy seeds stirs up images of World War I.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the compare/contrast of the battlefield to be followed by flowers.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC to increase the font and make it red. It made the poem easier to read on the website.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: Along with crimson poppies, military cemeteries appeared," This is a striking visual - where poppies mark a battlefield and a cemeteries and it stirs a sense of gratitude for those who sacrificed.

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Scary_Soldier_Mike

Apr 18, 2025 at 11:44pm
In response to "Military "Brat""

All four of my daughters were vets from the moment of birth. They were all born while I was on Active Duty, were born in Army hospitals, and bounced back and forth between the U.S. and West Germany with their mom and me (the eldest ones more than once).

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Sep 18, 2024 at 2:09pm
In response to "The Call"

Yes, a blending of recent newscasts inspired this one.

October 18, 2025 at 5:05pm

#1099584

In the Spotlight

Harvest moon's luster
illuminates pumpkin patch
with scarecrow on guard,

but goblins are not deterred
from partying where they please.

They occupy field,
as horny owl adds his voice
to the grisly scene.

8 lines

October 18, 2025 at 4:50pm

#1099583

Deployed

Hubby takes over
cooking dinner, mopping floors,
getting kids to school,
because wife is called to duty
and answers without a flinch.

That is how it goes
within the family routine
while she is deployed.

September 3, 2025 at 4:26pm

#1096535

Gold Star Families

They raise and support
a proud group of heroes,
volunteering to thwart
the evil in this world,

until the terminal
sacrifice is unfurled,
stretching emotional
impact to its limits.

Gold star families: https://americasgoldstarfamilies.org/

August 29, 2025 at 1:38pm

#1096128

Stubborn Heart

My stubborn heart
refuses to give up.

Once upon a time,
wallowing through Hell--
no home, no love, no hope,
sleeping in the bushes.

It has been a long road back,
but here I am,
sleeping in a warm bed
with healthy meals
and loving family.

August 23, 2025 at 12:36pm

#1095800

Tin Can Navy

The Tin Can Navy roams the high seas
in search of submarine enemies.
Bouncing around on rolling waves,
we tried to send our foes to ocean graves,
while defending our liberties.

We went without the luxuries,
endured despite a few miseries,
because of challenges the crew braves
in the Tin Can Navy.

Our many nautical odysseys
to distant places provided the keys
to great adventures a young man craves.
These days, I ride nostalgic waves
across a sea of memories
from the Tin Can Navy.

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Author's notes: ▼

Let the creativity flow from your soul!

Dave
"The Poet's Place "

August 21, 2025 at 2:11pm

#1095698

Everybody Needs a Hero

Everybody needs a hero.
I struck it rich,
was granted two.

My mom and dad were there for me
through good and bad,
no matter what.

They guided me along the path
past obstacles
to my future.

Up and down steep hills we went.
We did struggle,
but here I am.

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August 9, 2025 at 3:07pm

#1094980

Weekend Escape

beach
sandy, crowded
swimming, surfing, burning
tides, dunes, streams, trails
hiking, camping, puffing
rocky, steep
mountain

Notes on the Diamante form of poetry ▼

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July 29, 2025 at 4:20pm

#1094335

The Train of Time

The train of time
keeps on rolling
down the tracks,
past birthdays,
graduations,
weddings, retirement,
and obituary.

Still,
the train of time
keeps on rolling.

July 20, 2025 at 5:19pm

#1093781

Under the Apple Tree

I remember when you and me,
sitting under the apple tree,
launched destiny with our first kiss,
and thus began our years of bliss.

Our wedding vows with family,
taken under the apple tree,
secured the bond to last through years
of laughter, arguments, and tears.

Our kids enjoyed their revelry,
running around the apple tree,
as they matured into adults,
making us happy with results.

So, here we are again, you and me
buried under the apple tree,
together for eternity.