Reviews by Ledan Dark

Hm...
T'is very short indeed. Is this it in its final form? Just wondering how long you want it to be.
First helpful thing i can come up with would be that you remove the words "nice".
If you really want people to notice the change from the ad and the reality, I would suggest using contrasting words.
"a beautiful shimmering lake" which turned out to be " a cesspol that had never seen the light of day"... or something to that effect.
If you are going for that slightly insane thing, then 3 "ha!"'s to me sound better.
It would also help if you separated your text into 2 or more paragraphs, 1 describing the dream and 1 the reality, and then maybe a separate one as
well for the final part.
So, finally it's interesting and different, but you could do more to it if you want to and make it original and unique.
Good Luck!
P.S.
If you don't have many GP's, then remember that I don't ask for them. 8D