Thank you for sharing the background about this poem, and what was the driving force for writing it. It is sad and appalling that a child should have to beg to be loved and cared for! Those women definitely give "evil" and "step" the hatred those words bring to mind! This poem broke my heart as I read it. Very well written. Gut-wrenching! I look forward to reading more of your work.
I enjoyed reading your biography. Especially enjoyed reading about Mr. Dinger...sounds about right for a cat! LOL. Quite the busy person! I'm glad you have time to write, and enjoy doing so. I plan on being "nosy" and checking out your work. Thank you for sharing your life and love of writing.
LOL...too funny. I read it twice. One way to get rid of an annoyance for sure. Clever names and fun reading. I enjoyed this bit of whimsy, and I look forward to reading more of your work. Thank you for sharing this. (Please don't roll your eyes if I missed the point...lol)
It took me a second, but there it is...No more patriotism in the front and at the end of each line....very cool. Interesting poem. Gives you something to think about for sure. The flow makes it very readable. No typos that I can see. I especially like the last two lines of your poem. Thought provoking, and thank you for sharing.
Thank you for sharing this poem, and also for the explanation at the end of the poem to describe the style. As I was reading, I saw the imagery of almost losing something precious. The flow was smooth and easily readable. I liked the last part of the poem the best, with the pledge, and trusting in "Him above". Great Job! Look forward to more of your work.
An interesting read. You are projecting safety and security with this wall...sometimes a wall can be a type of prison, but here it is a safe and comforting place to be behind. Protection against anything or anyone who would do you harm. Well written, and vivid imagery in your words. Thank you for sharing this poem. I look forward to reading more of your work.
This is funny and sad at the same time. Role reversal seems to be becoming a normal part of life. (I'm not quite there yet, but it is on the horizon.) The flow of the story makes it easily readable, and I spotted not typos. I liked the imagery, especially the last sight of his mom digging into the ice cream as he was leaving.
Thank you for sharing!
Sincerely,
amy
WDC Power Reviewers Group
Interesting reading. I especially liked the last statement of your story."Who knew stumbling into an evil empire would be as simple as answering a want ad?" The flow was good, and it read fairly easily. No typos that I could see. Thank you for sharing your little story. Keep up the good work!
I like the descriptors in this poem. I can picture a dark, snowy Christmas Eve. I also like the way you describe the "soul's banked fires" in contrast to the cold snowy night. Well written. Thank you for sharing.
Sincerely,
amy
"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"
That was interesting to read. How horrible to have a disease that actually transforms letters like that. Well written, and once I got the hang of it, easy to read. LOL...Nicely done. Thank you for sharing this poem in this format. Clever how you got the typing to face that way!
Well said! I agree with what you said 100%. For heaven's sake...TELL THEM! I also agree with you...men need to hear it too...it's not just the women who want to hear it.
Thank you for sharing. (I just listened to Brian Adams I Do It All For You from Prince of Thieves)...Love this singer!
Nicely written. A sweet poem about a frolicking mermaid. Nothing dark or sinister here. A fun read. Flows well, and no typos that I see. Very well done. I like how she sings to the sailors songs of comfort. Usually mermaids (unless it's Disney) sing songs to lure sailors to their doom. I enjoyed the light-heartedness of your piece. Thank you for sharing.
This was a challenging and well thought out contest...I enjoyed it immensely and hope to enter other contests as well. I like reading and reviewing, and hope to get better at it. It was the first time for a product review, so I hope to do more of them as well. Well done, and thank you making me feel so welcome!
I don't know the whole story, but from the dialogue, the main character, Andrew, is in protective custody. He is going to be reunited with his family after extensive therapy and a face-lift of sorts. Even though he is anxious to be reunited, he is frustrated that he cannot remember some of the most important events in his life.
Well written and full of promise. (A gal can hope that you would eventually add more). No typos that I see, and very easy to read. Nicely done!
I liked this poem. Vivid imagery laid out in easy to read form. I liked how well you made knitting a scarf into poetry. It amazes me how the abbreviations on a pattern make any kind of sense, and if you follow the pattern correctly you will have such a beautiful piece of work. Well written!
I enjoyed reading your poem. I could actually picture myself enjoying each of the items that you described (wishing I had some caramels right now!). I liked the pictures that your descriptions evoked. Vivid in detailing. Thank you for sharing this poem!
LOL...I understand about getting lost in references to try to say something in a new way. Nicely written...I do have to ask, though, do you mean "lose track of the time?" (as in the time gets lost?) Just wondering. Otherwise, I enjoyed reading your poem, and the imagery of hunting for all of the parts to poetry. Thank you for sharing!
I love this! While I still am lucky to have my dad with me, I can imagine that I would want to continue to talk to him even after he is gone. Thank you for sharing such a touching piece. This line is my favorite:
"Everybody’s got a computer,
Everybody’s on the net…
So why isn’t heaven online yet?
Well done!
Wow...riveting would be the word I would use. I wonder how many homes are so constructed. I hit a cord with me, as this is how my first marriage looked like on the outside, with the same walls built on the inside. It took a long time to have the courage to walk away. Well written, and paints a vivid image in the reader's mind. A sad commentary on how the world can judge. Thank you for sharing.
An interesting read to be sure. I like the idea of a "bucket list" for writing. And I thought I had a boat-load of interests...LOL...anyway, best of luck with your writing now and in the future. I also liked the way you wrote this as a letter to yourself. A fun read!
LOL...I'm penciling in George! A very cute satire to outline the sadness of the way things are. Well written, and very clever use of the farm as a setting for your story. I look forward to reading more of your work. I enjoyed reading this piece. Thank you for sharing!
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