Absolutely Beautiful... Suicides are always the hardest tragedy to me. Because the person chose that way of ending it. My best friend shot himself. When he was only 14, no goodbye note or anything. Just that he didn't want to go home. And after he passed i had about 10 lizards show up on my porch. Which made since he loved lizards. That just goes to show that there really is more to life. Keep your head, the pain eases with time.
Very powerful, really good. Every word held such a powerful emotion. You have quite a knack for poetry. Perfect rhythm.... It doesn't have to rhyme to get it's message out. Just the perfect details, gave the message very well. Anyways Great job and may you someday have a poem published.
Very informative...You have a very good valid point with this. How old are you?? Because if your 15 yourself, you wrote this in a very adult way. I my self had my first job at 15 and absolutely loved it. It made me feel like i was indestructible, and i loved being able to buy thins on my own. With my own money that i made myself.
wow absolutely amazing, I went through all kinds of emotions reading this. Happiness, Sadness and other ones. Your a very lucky person, My husband and i lost our twins from being born prematurely. Life is an amazing thing, too many people take it for granted. They see it as beautiful as most. Thank you for sharing this.
This is really good, I can't wait to read some more. You have a real knack for writing. are you going to post more of this story on here, because i would love to read the rest. Anyways I'm going to go ahead and check out more of your stuff. goodnight and good job!
I really enjoyed reading this. I think you did a great job, the characters were believable. I felt like i was in the story watching it go down. Kudos on the grammar and the correct spelling of everything. Thank you for sharing this and i look forward to reading more of your pieces.
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