Greetings. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poignant, poetic-piece. Very creatively expressed. Well done. The meter could be addressed to appease the reader more. Regardless, the piece flowed and you told a story in verse very well. Good rhymes along the way which were pleasing. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I really enjoyed reading your free-verse, poetic-piece. You told a story well in verse. You didn't introduce the 'sand castle until half-way through the piece, so I was a little lost until then, but I did enjoy then re-reading as I was enlightened! Sorry to be negative. Good luck with you entry, it is a good piece! Well done. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece. You expressed your feelings on marriage well. Perhaps sometimes it's good to wait, so you are both ready and able to free the horses from their stable! Our Lord was born in a stable, and advocated marriage! The meter was acceptable and enjoyed the rhymes along the way - which were pleasing. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poignant, poetic-piece. You expressed your sorrow very well. Sorry for any suffering you may have experienced. The meter was acceptable and the piece flowed with many rhymes along the way to please the reader. A nice turn at the end 'isn't it lovely'. Well done.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece. True friendship is a special bond with understanding of each other's feelings, and to try and not to hurt them. You expressed your friendship very well. The meter of the piece is a bit erratic! I would have liked the odd rhyme along the way to please the reader, but that's just my preference. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece. I think a lot of us have experienced a one-sided relationship! Sorry for any suffering you may have experienced! Men can be pigs at the best of times. Was it raining while she was crying? Well done. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece. God is all about love, you are not wrong, and belong in the throng of acting Christianly within your poetry, which is a delight to see! Is this a sonnet separated into different segments? The piece flowed and had good rhymes, which I liked. Well done. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poetic-piece denoting Jesus. I fell in love with Jesus many a year ago! More should come to know His love for all! I think you put saved instead of 'save', in the second verse, line three. Jesus is heavenly, and preached life after death with God above who is all about LOVE! Blessings to you.
Greetings. New Year's resolutions can come around too soon, and be a bit tedious! I'm a smoker! Hope you get to find your adventure you are seeking. Glad you are fighting fit for 2018, and are ready to embrace this new year. Blessings to you. I enjoyed reading. Well done. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece. You started the piece off with 'Who can see me', with not knowing the answer, then you go on to write 'Did they flee', now with not knowing who is looking, how can they flee? Does losing white wings, and replaced by black wings represent devilish behaviour? The piece flowed and had good rhymes. The meter was acceptable. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece. Well done. The piece has a good structure, and the meter is consistent. I enjoyed the rhymes along the way, which helped the piece flow as it does. Glad you enjoy writing and thanks for sharing. Blessings to you.
Greetings to you. I poignant poetic-piece. My father in law has dementia, so I can understand what you are going through! I'm glad your mother still remains your friend! Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece, and congratulations on coming first in the competition. You expressed you joy of riding very well. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece. Well done. I like a friendship within a loving relationship. The meter was almost consistent throughout, which was pleasing. You expressed yourself very creatively. I would have liked the odd rhyme along the way, but that's just my preference. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece. Well done. You expressed yourself very creatively. We all have a past to dwell on, with ex partners dwelling in our thoughts. What could have been can be seen in your keen emotions, as you sound like a caring, sharing person within a pairing. Blessings to you.
The piece flowed regardless of the sporadic meter. I would have liked the odd rhyme along the way, but that's just my preference.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece. Well done. Very inspirational with being spiritual. You expressed your love for God very creatively. God is indeed awesome and has a plan for each and everyone of us. I fell in love with Jesus many years ago. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your fantasy, poetic-piece. Well done. Unicorns are magical, and appear in fairy tales galore! You told a story well in verse. The cat certainly benefited from the short, but memorable visit by the Unicorn.
The meter of the piece is acceptable in appeasing and pleasing. I enjoyed the rhymes along the way. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your dark, poetic-piece. Well done. You created some good imagery. Aren't shadows shaded? Some sporadic meter structured. Sorry for any suffering you may have experienced, and sorry you feel 'lost'. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece. Well done. I like the structure of the meter, and you did well with the restrictions. I hope you find yourself, it's not nice to be in a hostile relationship full of insincere courtship. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your quote. Well done. My ways are pleasant and Godly. I love Jesus with all of my heart. Believing in God and Jesus is bountiful. God bless you.
Greetings. A dark, poetic-piece indeed. You started off with 'pleasant', then turned this to 'moaning and groaning', which was an unexpected turn. And repeat another turn with 'darling', then 'poison scars'. I like turns. You could have separated this verse into two quatrains, to appease and please the reader. Regardless, the piece flowed. The meter could be addressed, but that's just my preference. Blessings to you.
Thank you. Love love, Andrew. Bye.
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