Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece. I like the line 'it's a sorrow of another goodbye'. The first verse is a beginning to your concise, short story in verse, and an introduction to your piece, and says so much for the reader to read on. The second verse is a reflection of what was, a middle to your story. And the end is a reflection on your present suffering. A well written and structured, poignant piece with good rhymes. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece. A piece denoting the moon and its attributes to earth and humans. The moon is frozen, and is attacked by meteorites! Man has yet to dominate the moon, but the moon can dominate man, as in its magical powers to impress. The tides are susceptible to its prowess at giving more and not less! The metre of the piece could be addressed to appease and please the reader. I enjoyed the occasional rhyme along the way. Well done, an expressive and creatively written piece denoting the moon. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece. Well done. Well written with some good rhymes. The piece flowed with a longing for lips belonging to a partner devout! You expressed the lustful bliss of a kiss well, with a 'kiss and tell' of being in hell without this swell expressive expression of love. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece - very imaginative and creative! I liked the turn within the concise piece. Well done. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece. You must have enjoyed a visit? An interesting piece that is informative. Well written with some good rhymes. You did a good job, well done.
Greetings. A heat-felt poetic-piece of missing a loved one. I liked the rhymes within the piece, which kept me appeased while reading. The piece flowed well and is written like a rap, but is like an elegy! The poetic-piece flowed well, and I enjoyed reading. Strong feelings of love and devotion expressively expressed. Very creative. You should write more poetry. Blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading your poetic-piece. Well done. Very imaginative and creative. Well written with good rhymes.
The second line's metre is lengthy in comparison to the other lines expressed, you could try and shorten it to appease the construction. I try and steer clear of repeating words in a piece, but sometimes it is unavoidable!
On the whole you told the story well. A happy New Year to you.
Greetings. A poignant piece with a turn! The reader gets a feel that the abyss is unwelcome at the beginning of the piece, then you turn it to actually favouring it, which was unexpected, which I liked. This is very dark, with images to play on the reader's mind. Some cleverly penned expressions.
On the whole I enjoyed reading, so well done. Thank you for sharing and keep writing and typing. A happy New Year to you.
Greetings. A poignant poetic-piece. Was he sleeping around? He had deep regrets of letting her go, but all he had to do was beg to get her back on track, so his days would become less barren! He was a fool to stool, but still acting cool by thinking of himself as superior, when he should have lowered himself to restore some of his health, as he's suffering with his cheating resulting in him being lonely.
On the whole I enjoyed reading, with some good rhymes along the way. Good luck to you. Thanks for sharing and keep writing. A happy New Year to you.
Greetings. I like Nature poetry. This was an amazing piece that I enjoyed reading. Well done. Well written with good rhymes. Seasonal blessings to you.
Greetings. I enjoyed reading. Well done. Species don't appreciate the existence of our God, Jesus and the Holy Spirit. We should spread Jesus seed where there is a need. Seasonal blessings to you.
Greetings. I really enjoyed reading this Christian poetic-piece. I fell in love with Jesus years ago, and write many poems about our Lord and God. Praise you and your faith. We all face death, but for Christians they look forward to being with God in heaven. God bless you.
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