This is really good written. Something to win a contest with. It is hard to start every line with an L and not to repeat yourself all the time. You choosed a fanastic way to handle this. I keep my fingers crossed and hope you are under the first places. A winner are you for sure, with writing this.
Keep up the good work... anna
We find ourselves, we loose ourselves and we search all the time.
As fast as we found ourselves we can loose us again.
But, one time found there will be always something left, deep inside of us.
And, we not only search and forget about ourselves we search for the right partner.
You put that very well.
Keep on writing... anna
The only one we can never escape are ourselves.
We are the body and the brain, the thoughts we have to live with.
No one is as close as we are for ourselves.
Even if we don´t like us, we have to see us.
That´s how I understand this poem. And, I think you are right.
Very good written.
Keep on writing... anna
Life is a long and winding road and you never can be sure what will be behind the next corner.
What will be your decision after seeing what will be behind the corner.
And yes, all the roads will end with the dead. If nothing is for sure, that is.
I really enjoyed reading your work. It is fantastic written.
Keep on writing... anna
Oh, that is thrilling. I want more, more, more
Yes, really! The beginning of this story is already open for every direction. What will happen to her? Will she be on the side of the good and, will the master see this when she´s grown. Will she be one of the bad and will the master take her as his tool as he wanted exactly this. Or will she be the good and he let her live and fight against the bad. Or will she be bad and will he kill her, but, he isn´t able to do that and now he has to hunt her and so on...
Oh, this story has a big portential.
Keep on writing... anna
This is really well and poetic written. You have to go into the rythm of this peace of work and read it with heart to find the depth of it. Not, that is is not obviously deep, but for the complete understanding you have to go deeper. Thanks for this wonderful poem. I enjoyed it a lot.
Keep on writing... anna
First I would correct two typos
1. chage into change (last row, last word of the first verse
2. waht into what (third verse, second row, word number 4)
But all in all it is a solid and good work. You wrote clearly what the intension of this peace is.
I liked it. It shows, that it always will be worse and no one will be pleased, if you cahnge for a person.
Well done, keep on writing... anna
What imagination can do. Dreams can be real, if you just put enough power into it. And, if you dream intensely enough, you might have a chance to accomplish them. The power of your thoughts are bigger as anything else.
Very good written, I enjoyed it a lot. Go on like that... anna
This is a sensitive written poem, and I enjoyed it a lot. But, why this feeling of guilty? Why this hate against yourself? You gave a lot and you got a lot back, that is what the love is meant to be, right? I really like the erotic description in a very tasteful way.
Keep on writing like that... anna
You used your words like a painter uses his brushes. A really nice picture you painted here. Like an painting in oil. With warm colours. From red to gold to a deep velvet blue of the night. Very well written. I liked it a lot. Made me feel good on a warm summer night.
Keep on writing... anna
Uuuhhhh, that sounds scary. It makes me shiver like I watch a dracula movie. This little ghoose bumps you have, by the association of this scene. This little scream you want to make, just because you think he might stand behind you. Very vividly written. Fantastic.... anna
Good rythm. A peace to think about. I really like it. It sounds like a scary situation, but it is not. And than again it is. Really space enough for private thoughts. Is it about loneliness? Is it about hiding in the dark? Is it about being afraid of the light? A vampire poem, maybe?
But at least it is fantastic written.
Keep on your good work... anna
Hihihi, this is a funny little poem. Really a good read. And yes, the sweet fascination of a magic moment. And, what can happen with it. Very well written. Just amazing and entertaining. What more to say? Just, keep on writing, go on like that. I enjoyed it a lot.... anna
This is a fantastic positive poem, written for a wonderful day. Yeah, jump out of your bed, smile and love your day. You only have this day one time of your life. Tomorrow will be another day. If you can make this sunshine in your day an everyday ritual you have to be a happy person. Liked it a lot.
Well done. Keep on writing... anna
What a sweet, cute story. Yes, everybody needs its knight and dragon every now and than. And yes, dreams can come true. I saw into my knights eyes aswell and it really felt just wonderful. Those kids dreams are come true for some with enough fantasy, when they are adults. Good that it is like that.
Was a fun read, you are a wonderful writer... anna
And you wrote it wonderful. It is always hard when deep emotions are involved to find the right words. But it seems like you hit the nail. Maybe now, within every little every days frustrations and fights you conjure this poem forth and you will see, it will put a happy smile one someones face.
Well done. Keep on writing... anna
What a beautiful scene you painted here. Just like it. Like the silence of a wonderful landscape and the colours you can see, if you are just silent enough and open for those sensitive scenes. Really an adorable picture. Thanks again for finding those beautiful words... Anna
I wish more people will open their eyes wide and are able to see the world a bit more philosophical. It makes life sometimes more complicated on one hand and more clear on the other. It is ot easy to look into everything open eyes. But here you did and I enjoyed it. Keep on writing... anna
Oh, wow. I think your mother should read this. Maybe she understands you a little bit better than. Sometimes it is hard to look into someones closed soul, even if you are a mother. You may have your reasons, but, I think she has to read this. It is really good written and even a heart of stone will understand and feel what you are talking about... Anna
Really good written. I like that looking back without being bitter. All the wrinkles in an old peoples face are just amazing, if you ask me. I don´t like these tightened, plain faces without any sign of the life they lived. You wrote in a really lovely beautiful way, how proud some people can be to look back into the past... Anna
This is fantastic written. In the short cutted way, you throw words around that sum up everything about a lost love. And, you didn´t wrote one word to much. Just like the situation is. Not to bitter, not to angry, maybe a bit desperate and infidel. And maybe surprised, that´s how it sounds. I like that a lot. Keep on writing... Anna
This is fantastic written. Sounds like it comes deep from your heart. Your wife can be just proud and happy to get so much love and such a big compliment. Yes, love can change life. And if it is a fullfilled love it is even better. I really loved to read this... Anna
Very depressive, but good written. Thinker have this thoughts I think (wow, what a sentence ). But, at one point it is time to get out of this thoughts or you will sink into the mealstrom of your thoughts and you can´t be sure, if a helping hand is there to get you out.
Head up and you will find your way out... Anna
Hihihi, this is funny.
short, but, what more to say?
All you´ve written eaten by a bug. That´s not fair.
Hope you find a healthy cure for it and go on to work on your book soon. I really like to read more of you, but, maybe a bit longer
Keep on writing
...Anna
To watch the nature on a relaxed and a bit lazy morning while sipping the coffee is just to wonderful. I love, when a summer thunderstorm is coming up and the sky is deep gray, but shining in a mystic way. The air is thick and touchable and full of electricity. And than, within a second and a big bang the rain comes down like a shower and white thunderbolts illuminate the sky. And, as fast as it came as soon it is gone again. What a wonderful play mother nature shows us from time to time.
A very inspirational poem, thank you... Anna
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