This is a fine poem. I liked the rhyme scheme. It is a great tribute to her. You said you didn't know what she looked like. Was she an online friend? I feel that the last stanza could us a little work. Somehow to get the 2 smiles into 1. Actually it doesn't really matter. This is good work and I would recommend you to a friend.
Hi Paul, I really liked your poem al lot. There were a couple of indentures I would have left out. The word rhyme is misspelled. Other than that I think it is a fine poem and should do very well. Thanks for the optimism I needed it today.I especially liked the last 2 lines. Good luck with this one.
I liked this poem a lot. It only had one little problem that bothered me. In two of the stanzas you are writing about song birds. I think it would be better if you could change one of these to something else, it's a little redundant. Mostly I wouldn't change anything else. It's a really nice poem.
This is a great poem and a great tribute.You have done a marvelous job. The only thing that sort of rubs me wrong is your using us in the last 2 lines of the poem. I think it would sound better if you left off the us in left us and just left left. Doesn't really take away the fact that you've written a marvelous poem. Bravo!
This was a great read. I liked it a lot. I can tell from this that you are really intelligent.
I'm not sure I would have broken up the lines the way you have. But it really doesn't matter. This made for good reading material and I would recommend it to a friend.
Keep on writing I enjoyed it very much.
I liked this a lot . It has many good qualities and invokes a feeling of sympathy. I just noticed one little mistake. In the first line of the last stanza you have this spelled theis.
Congratulations on a great poem.
I thought this was a marvelous poem. The rhyme didn't seem forced to me. I found it to be intellectual and creative. I love how it begins and how it ends. I don't find any areas that need improvement. I think it is a fine poem just as it stands. Ialso like the title it fits the poem to a t . Congratulations on a fine write.
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